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LLL Season 24
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@Blue Bayou @miracle
@Blue Bayou
I get it bro.. Your tired and you got work..plus it is after 10 o clockQuote:
Originally Posted by Blue Bayou
Im just wondering what you mentioned your figure-for.. Then snap ur bones in that leg lock
Some say your a legend on here.. You go for the title and always snag it
Yeah we consider you ABeast but s'cuz u remind us of barcotic crying like a faggot
Your chick stays giving me sexual looks, & she's the type that dude's prefer
I cant breakdown metals but i'm pretty sure i could scorify put the moves on her
action jam-packed.. Your girl see's me and i get sexually attacked
she starts sucking the second i waive over like the end of a contract
Fuck punches you'll get the legwork. I'm sending roundhouses w/ urgency
You'll either get a headkick or toonies in the face like Canadian currency
goons to my right.. 5 deep in the windsor w/ dark tint, cruising for a fight
& when that van gogh's to your house, everyone will mourn you on that Starry Night
Im all for equality and your gay right....or what ever this kid wants to pursuit
S'why It breaks my heart that blueberries the fact that he might be a fruit
Your wifey loves fucking me. N if you want it to stop u better keep wishing
The first time i gave the dick to Hershey couldn't get enough like a chocolate addiction
ew.
to dick coochie he slips roofies. that’s the only way he gets the bed wet dudes..
even the girls know it.. if they accept any Miracle Tonic they must be playin Red Dead 2
frontin like ur fat ass is pullin 10’s & has a buncha dimes pouncin’..
Mir please.. last time you had some clap between ya legs it was just ya thighs bouncin
so you the boss of what?! broke ass can’t even buy shit that costs a buck..
we don’t associate you w/ Cash-mir…we just call all your material soft as fuck
i’ve been on a big tear lately. maddd wins because i’m hard w/ the raps..
a big tear for you is me not letting go of the lock once you’ve started to tap
forget the fact i’ll beat you effortlessly & that i’m known for bomb fire..
the real reason RB’s talkin bout some low hanging fruit is cuz i’m prone to long wire
lmao @ you no-showin’ me weeks back bcuz i rattle you dude..
were only Inclined to show this week cuz this is obviously an uphill battle for you
i’ll make this hatchet work. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in his face so hard it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
Miracle on 34th St. to me is a classic xmas story that was done sublime..
Miracle on 34th St. to this faggit is turnin tricks on the corner.. for the 100th time
I get it bro.. Your tired and you got work..plus it is after 10 o clock
Im just wondering what you mentioned your figure-for.. Then snap ur bones in that leg lock
not a bad idea but the execution/wording hurt the impact
Some say your a legend on here.. You go for the title and always snag it
Yeah we consider you ABeast but s'cuz u remind us of barcotic crying like a faggot
lmao facts. Fire. Fuck u blue
Your chick stays giving me sexual looks, & she's the type that dude's prefer
I cant breakdown metals but i'm pretty sure i could scorify put the moves on her
decent
action jam-packed.. Your girl see's me and i get sexually attacked
she starts sucking the second i waive over like the end of a contract
somehow, someway, I woulda used this as a gun line. Ok bar here
Fuck punches you'll get the legwork. I'm sending roundhouses w/ urgency
You'll either get a headkick or toonies in the face like Canadian currency
nice, you’re actually pretty good at wp. Some folks should take notes from you. Won’t name names though
goons to my right.. 5 deep in the windsor w/ dark tint, cruising for a fight
& when that van gogh's to your house, everyone will mourn you on that Starry Night
crazy, I had a Van Gogh line in my notes for years but could never figure out how to use it. Decent here but a bit corny
Im all for equality and your gay right....or what ever this kid wants to pursuit
S'why It breaks my heart that blueberries the fact that he might be a fruit
good god NO
Your wifey loves fucking me. N if you want it to stop u better keep wishing
The first time i gave the dick to Hershey couldn't get enough like a chocolate addiction
nah bro now you’re just ODing on wordplay just for the sake of putting wordplay in a bar
2 nice
2 ok
2 decent
2 miss
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to dick coochie he slips roofies. that’s the only way he gets the bed wet dudes..
even the girls know it.. if they accept any Miracle Tonic they must be playin Red Dead 2
cool opener, I haven’t played rdr2 but it still works based on the first one
frontin like ur fat ass is pullin 10’s & has a buncha dimes pouncin’..
Mir please.. last time you had some clap between ya legs it was just ya thighs bouncin
wait so you’re dissing him for NOT having an std? LOL c’mon man...
so you the boss of what?! broke ass can’t even buy shit that costs a buck..
we don’t associate you w/ Cash-mir…we just call all your material soft as fuck
alright
i’ve been on a big tear lately. maddd wins because i’m hard w/ the raps..
a big tear for you is me not letting go of the lock once you’ve started to tap
ok again
forget the fact i’ll beat you effortlessly & that i’m known for bomb fire..
the real reason RB’s talkin bout some low hanging fruit is cuz i’m prone to long wire
what?
lmao @ you no-showin’ me weeks back bcuz i rattle you dude..
were only Inclined to show this week cuz you know this is an uphill battle for you
ehh decent at best
i’ll make this hatchet twirk. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in the face w/ such force it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
this woulda been bar of the decade if you hadn’t said fuckin so much. Still nice though I liked it
Miracle on 34th St. to me is a beautiful xmas story that was done sublime
Miracle on 34th St. to his hood is this faggit turnin tricks on the corner.. for the 100th time
i guess you just said fuck a closer huh?
2 nice
2 ok
1 decent
3 misses
Close battle but I have miracle taking it slightly with 1 less miss
Vote Miracle
Vs.Quote:
Originally Posted by miracle
Mvgt Blue Bayou by a large marginQuote:
Originally Posted by Blue Bayou
I get it bro.. Your tired and you got work..plus it is after 10 o clock
Im just wondering what you mentioned your figure-for.. Then snap ur bones in that leg lock
Saying the wording is fucked here is an understatement. Figure for shouldn't have been hyphenated, and the punch lost luster because of the setup.
Some say your a legend on here.. You go for the title and always snag it
Yeah we consider you ABeast but s'cuz u remind us of barcotic crying like a faggot
Didn't hit for me. Even if I knew who ABeast was, this wasn't very witty.
Your chick stays giving me sexual looks, & she's the type that dude's prefer
I cant breakdown metals but i'm pretty sure i could scorify put the moves on her
Another example of below average wording. 1) I had to look up scorify/scoria and I bet your average person would too. That's a negative for me, not a positive. 2) The bar loses harshness if it aint confident. "You'd think I'm breaking down metals the way I scorify put moves on her" flows much better, is more confident, and took 5 seconds to think about. TLDR this bars a no.
action jam-packed.. Your girl see's me and i get sexually attacked
she starts sucking the second i waive over like the end of a contract
eh flow is decent and the concept could've worked, this didn't hit
Fuck punches you'll get the legwork. I'm sending roundhouses w/ urgency
You'll either get a headkick or toonies in the face like Canadian currency
This is just like the last bar. Doing the "...like the end of a contract" "like canadian currency" at the end as your punch would work better for an audio battle. For text it's simply not witty enough. Your first bar did better in this area.
goons to my right.. 5 deep in the windsor w/ dark tint, cruising for a fight
& when that van gogh's to your house, everyone will mourn you on that Starry Night
I fuck with this as above average filler
Im all for equality and your gay right....or what ever this kid wants to pursuit
S'why It breaks my heart that blueberries the fact that he might be a fruit
Although the setup is meh, this the best bar so far (idk if blueberries is played on him) but the "might" almost ruins it. Check the wording: "...that blueberries the fact that he's a fruit" ending the bar with that simple change makes it flow much better.
Your wifey loves fucking me. N if you want it to stop u better keep wishing
The first time i gave the dick to Hershey couldn't get enough like a chocolate addiction
1) You ended this bar just like the others with the 'like'. 2) This the 3rd bar about fucking his girl. Gotta be more creative. They could all be FIRE and still lose impact because it's repetitive. 3) Hershey is played af 4) Below average rhyme
Overall a subpar verse. You got bits of creativity here and there, but your wording is what really needs to improve. Not just wording, but specifically how your bars flow, and creatively using your words. It's like you not spitting this shit out loud before you post it. Cuz if you did, you'd see the flow is off crazy. And more of your creativity needs to mirror, consistently, what you were thinking when creating your 1st, 3rd, 6th and 7th bars.
Off first impression without seeing blues post I'd give this a 5/10.
VS
to dick coochie he slips roofies. that’s the only way he gets the bed wet dudes..
even the girls know it.. if they accept any Miracle Tonic they must be playin Red Dead 2
W/o having played the game I get the context clues. Points for the internal rhyme in the setup. But the second line is too long imo, flow is subpar. Overall ok bar
frontin like ur fat ass is pullin 10’s & has a buncha dimes pouncin’..
Mir please.. last time you had some clap between ya legs it was just ya thighs bouncin
Made me laugh. Good shit. Flows right. Hits hard.
so you the boss of what?! broke ass can’t even buy shit that costs a buck..
we don’t associate you w/ Cash-mir…we just call all your material soft as fuck
Another weird place to use a hyphen. I'd use a comma here. Other than that this was fire. From the rhyme scheme to the nameplay to the actual punch hitting hard. The flow would be perfect taking out "all" in the last line. Best bar so far.
i’ve been on a big tear lately. maddd wins because i’m hard w/ the raps..
a big tear for you is me not letting go of the lock once you’ve started to tap
Good shit. It's a blowout so far. The wording is on two different levels.
forget the fact i’ll beat you effortlessly & that i’m known for bomb fire..
the real reason RB’s talkin bout some low hanging fruit is cuz i’m prone to long wire
Good shit again
lmao @ you no-showin’ me weeks back bcuz i rattle you dude..
were only Inclined to show this week cuz this is obviously an uphill battle for you
Above average filler.
i’ll make this hatchet work. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in his face so hard it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
Lol. I'm breezing through this at this point. Battle's over.
Miracle on 34th St. to me is a classic xmas story that was done sublime..
Miracle on 34th St. to this faggit is turnin tricks on the corner.. for the 100th time
Filler like shit
Yeah so this verse would independently get about a 8.5/10 from me. Obviously some filler in there, but he did have the advantage of knowing the level of comp, so he knew what was needed to win. This was a landslide. I don't think Miracle is trash, he just has a lot of cleaning up to do.
Vote: Blue
2-1 blue
Some say your a legend on here.. You go for the title and always snag it
Yeah we consider you ABeast but s'cuz u remind us of barcotic crying like a faggot
Your chick stays giving me sexual looks, & she's the type that dude's prefer
I cant breakdown metals but i'm pretty sure i could scorify put the moves on her
Fuck punches you'll get the legwork. I'm sending roundhouses w/ urgency
You'll either get a headkick or toonies in the face like Canadian currency
vs
to dick coochie he slips roofies. that’s the only way he gets the bed wet dudes..
even the girls know it.. if they accept any Miracle Tonic they must be playin Red Dead 2
frontin like ur fat ass is pullin 10’s & has a buncha dimes pouncin’..
Mir please.. last time you had some clap between ya legs it was just ya thighs bouncin
i’ve been on a big tear lately. maddd wins because i’m hard w/ the raps..
a big tear for you is me not letting go of the lock once you’ve started to tap
i’ll make this hatchet work. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in his face so hard it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
thought bb had the better non quotables too. got bb taking this one
v/bb
Miracle:
I get it bro.. Your tired and you got work..plus it is after 10 o clock
Im just wondering what you mentioned your figure-for.. Then snap ur bones in that leg lock
Nice concept. Wording issues on the punch.
Some say your a legend on here.. You go for the title and always snag it
Yeah we consider you ABeast but s'cuz u remind us of barcotic crying like a faggot
Standard, okay.
Your chick stays giving me sexual looks, & she's the type that dude's prefer
I cant breakdown metals but i'm pretty sure i could scorify put the moves on her
Nice
action jam-packed.. Your girl see's me and i get sexually attacked
she starts sucking the second i waive over like the end of a contract
Okay.
Fuck punches you'll get the legwork. I'm sending roundhouses w/ urgency
You'll either get a headkick or toonies in the face like Canadian currency
lol rondhouses with urgency.. toonies was cool could've been developed more...
goons to my right.. 5 deep in the windsor w/ dark tint, cruising for a fight
& when that van gogh's to your house, everyone will mourn you on that Starry Night
lol whatever
Im all for equality and your gay right....or what ever this kid wants to pursuit
S'why It breaks my heart that blueberries the fact that he might be a fruit
allllright
Your wifey loves fucking me. N if you want it to stop u better keep wishing
The first time i gave the dick to Hershey couldn't get enough like a chocolate addiction
played
Blue:
to dick coochie he slips roofies. that’s the only way he gets the bed wet dudes..
even the girls know it.. if they accept any Miracle Tonic they must be playin Red Dead 2
Sorry but Mir's quote about you being 33 with a 10 pm makes me think you shouldnt be playing Red Dead 2. I don't get it without looking it up which I wont do because you're 33 with 6 figure income
frontin like ur fat ass is pullin 10’s & has a buncha dimes pouncin’..
Mir please.. last time you had some clap between ya legs it was just ya thighs bouncin
cool concept weird wording
so you the boss of what?! broke ass can’t even buy shit that costs a buck..
we don’t associate you w/ Cash-mir…we just call all your material soft as fuck
ha nice...
i’ve been on a big tear lately. maddd wins because i’m hard w/ the raps..
a big tear for you is me not letting go of the lock once you’ve started to tap
lol this was stupid
forget the fact i’ll beat you effortlessly & that i’m known for bomb fire..
the real reason RB’s talkin bout some low hanging fruit is cuz i’m prone to long wire
blah
lmao @ you no-showin’ me weeks back bcuz i rattle you dude..
were only Inclined to show this week cuz this is obviously an uphill battle for you
hmmmm... I like it and dont at the same time
i’ll make this hatchet work. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in his face so hard it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
lolol sheesh
Miracle on 34th St. to me is a classic xmas story that was done sublime..
Miracle on 34th St. to this faggit is turnin tricks on the corner.. for the 100th time
the 100th time kinda threw this off for me.. pretty cool though
Going to have to do a point breakdown it's that close....
edit I'm not doing a point break down takes too long.
I've got Miracle winning here.
Good battle guys.
Blue Bayou. That ending was classic.
@Echelon u gotta explain better than that..u aint on that level my man.. Just break it down a bit -mir
3-2 blue
miricle
I get it bro.. Your tired and you got work..plus it is after 10 o clock
Im just wondering what you mentioned your figure-for.. Then snap ur bones in that leg lock
I liked how you used that personal against him, I SEEN that post.
Some say your a legend on here.. You go for the title and always snag it
Yeah we consider you ABeast but s'cuz u remind us of barcotic crying like a faggot
barcotic does cry a lot, but I never knew he was a faggot, so +1
Your chick stays giving me sexual looks, & she's the type that dude's prefer
I cant breakdown metals but i'm pretty sure i could scorify put the moves on her
I like how this is worded, but I don't really think this hits hard.
action jam-packed.. Your girl see's me and i get sexually attacked
she starts sucking the second i waive over like the end of a contract
you need to be focusing on blue more than his girl you never seen, you used two bars of this.
Fuck punches you'll get the legwork. I'm sending roundhouses w/ urgency
You'll either get a headkick or toonies in the face like Canadian currency
eh I'm not really feeling this one.
goons to my right.. 5 deep in the windsor w/ dark tint, cruising for a fight
& when that van gogh's to your house, everyone will mourn you on that Starry Night
I'm not really feeling this either, the wording is pimp tight here.
Im all for equality and your gay right....or what ever this kid wants to pursuit
S'why It breaks my heart that blueberries the fact that he might be a fruit
lmao, it looks corny on paper, but I'm laughing rn, nice wordplay.
Your wifey loves fucking me. N if you want it to stop u better keep wishing
The first time i gave the dick to Hershey couldn't get enough like a chocolate addiction
I liked the hershey wordplay her, the ending is dope, I'm just not feeling how your starting these "your bitch" bars
Hey I liked a lot of your shit here, you used the your bitch angle a lot here, have you actually seen his bitch? how do you know she is fuckable, idk.. alot of bars aimed at his girl and they should be aimed at him, I liked a few of them tho, the hershey one was histericall and the blueberries one was dope.
vs
blue bayou
to dick coochie he slips roofies. that’s the only way he gets the bed wet dudes..
even the girls know it.. if they accept any Miracle Tonic they must be playin Red Dead 2
I like this cool red dead reference.
frontin like ur fat ass is pullin 10’s & has a buncha dimes pouncin’..
Mir please.. last time you had some clap between ya legs it was just ya thighs bouncin
nice fat joke although I think we are passed this now, might as well used a mom joke.
so you the boss of what?! broke ass can’t even buy shit that costs a buck..
we don’t associate you w/ Cash-mir…we just call all your material soft as fuck
ohhhhhhh that was some dope wordplay, I need more of this from you.
i’ve been on a big tear lately. maddd wins because i’m hard w/ the raps..
a big tear for you is me not letting go of the lock once you’ve started to tap
looks like you flipped the submisison bar that mir had, whatever not feeling this one.
forget the fact i’ll beat you effortlessly & that i’m known for bomb fire..
the real reason RB’s talkin bout some low hanging fruit is cuz i’m prone to long wire
I'm not feeling this one, don't really get it tbh, prone to long wire?
lmao @ you no-showin’ me weeks back bcuz i rattle you dude..
were only Inclined to show this week cuz this is obviously an uphill battle for you
I liked the wordplay here, inclines / uphill, good shit.
i’ll make this hatchet work. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in his face so hard it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
damn, a little horrorcore, the bar went hard tho imo, I liked it.
Miracle on 34th St. to me is a classic xmas story that was done sublime..
Miracle on 34th St. to this faggit is turnin tricks on the corner.. for the 100th time
lmao, this is funny af, but another one of them aren't we passed this moments.
your wording was clever and you had some dope wordplay, the cash mir one was nice and probably the bar of your verse and battle...
so I'm going to have to give the W to blue for having the bar of the battle, this is a close one.
v/ blue
Miracle- You had good moments here. The personal to open was a nice touch. I like the figure four line second bar. I’ve seen many mentions of barcotic so that line worked. The scorify line hit for me. I can appreciate that as a former hardware store manager. I agree with the statement about attacking blue verses his girl. Your bars are tight, I wouldn’t waste em on anything other than the opp. After the lines about Blue’s girl I thought you had a nice flow. I wasn’t feeling the Hershey’s line but I get what you were doing.
Blue Bayou- good use of the red dead mention, haven’t a line about the miracle tonic. I like a good joke, it worked with your rhyme. The cash-mir part of the next two bars was nice. It worked perfectly for your opponent. I know you can bring a stronger line than “broke ass can’t buy shit that cost a buck”, the cash-mir line that followed proves this. The next bars I thought were okay but it felt like you flipped Miracle’s line. I’m not sure if that was agreed on before hand or what the stance is on it. That was the first time I’ve seen that on the site. The two bars following that didn’t hit for me.
lmao @ you no-showin’ me weeks back bcuz i rattle you dude..
were only Inclined to show this week cuz this is obviously an uphill battle for you
i’ll make this hatchet work. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in his face so hard it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
These lines were the highlight of your verse. I also agree that the curses hurt the line. You killed it though. The ending wasn’t strong enough to follow the well written lines that preceded it.
It was close but Miracle took this one for me. Good stuff.
Vote-Miracle
Miracle:
I get it bro.. Your tired and you got work..plus it is after 10 o clock
Im just wondering what you mentioned your figure-for.. Then snap ur bones in that leg lock
Cool concept. Wording on setup
Some say your a legend on here.. You go for the title and always snag it
Yeah we consider you ABeast but s'cuz u remind us of barcotic crying like a faggot
Predictable IMO
Your chick stays giving me sexual looks, & she's the type that dude's prefer
I cant breakdown metals but i'm pretty sure i could scorify put the moves on her
Nice ify bar
action jam-packed.. Your girl see's me and i get sexually attacked
she starts sucking the second i waive over like the end of a contract
Ehhh
Fuck punches you'll get the legwork. I'm sending roundhouses w/ urgency
toonies in the face like Canadian currency
toonies was ok but I may have seen it.
One of ur better bars tho
goons to my right.. 5 deep in the windsor w/ dark tint, cruising for a fight
& when that van gogh's to your house, everyone will mourn you on that Starry Night
nah, I've seen this on rmbva 5 yrs ago. Van Go/Van Gogh
Im all for equality and your gay right....or what ever this kid wants to pursuit
S'why It breaks my heart that blueberries the fact that he might be a fruit
played
Your wifey loves fucking me. N if you want it to stop u better keep wishing
The first time i gave the dick to Hershey couldn't get enough like a chocolate addiction
more played
Blue:
to dick coochie he slips roofies. that’s the only way he gets the bed wet dudes..
even the girls know it.. if they accept any Miracle Tonic they must be playin Red Dead 2
Ok, ref had to lookup..
frontin like ur fat ass is pullin 10’s & has a buncha dimes pouncin’..
Mir please.. last time you had some clap between ya legs it was just ya thighs bouncin
hmm Ok concept just didn't do.it for me
so you the boss of what?! broke ass can’t even buy shit that costs a buck..
we don’t associate you w/ Cash-mir…we just call all your material soft as fuck
name made it better for an otherwise played wp
i’ve been on a big tear lately. maddd wins because i’m hard w/ the raps..
a big tear for you is me not letting go of the lock once you’ve started to tap
lol ok.. mma crap bar
forget the fact i’ll beat you effortlessly & that i’m known for bomb fire..
the real reason RB’s talkin bout some low hanging fruit is cuz i’m prone to long wire
lacks something but ok. worded Cool
lmao @ you no-showin’ me weeks back bcuz i rattle you dude..
were only Inclined to show this week cuz this is obviously an uphill battle for you
rattle / battle rhyme scheme. Eh concept
i’ll make this hatchet work. slash this twirp i’m fuckin THAT bizerk
stab em in his face so hard it fuckin brings out his eyes like a matchin’ shirt
alright
Miracle on 34th St. to me is a classic xmas story that was done sublime..
Miracle on 34th St. to this faggit is turnin tricks on the corner.. for the 100th time
ok idea- lazy execution...
Vote BB. Higher highs/more consistent & smoother bars
5-3 blue wins