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@Poeta Demonio goodluck
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10 lines due by 11:59PM PST.
@Poeta Demonio goodluck
Check.
OG no-show… we just come to expect it as standard…
Checks then gets distressed, like when he’s looking down at his cowering manhood.
This fag should do stand-up...
For real yo, I’d go see his act...
Then I’d hit the button on this bitch, like the Manchester attack
Revolutionary my ass...
kid you won’t be fuckin’ televised… tellin’ lies… phony as fuck...
Claim to be revolutionary, then avy a capitalist comic book
You suck, plus, you done picked the wrong comic book character,
I’d have you play Batman… then at the premier, re-enact the Aurora massacre
So drop your fuckin’ bars, they'll be greeted with laughter…
It’ll be a bigger disaster than, well… your last battle with Dzaster.
I'mma hold the .45 to head for his Lunch Money & treat em like scum/bacteria
So if Poeta sees me Spilling Trays it's not cause I'm being a bully in the cafeteria
You back to text? surely ya CREW doesn't think this is good for ya health
Cause how you tryna comeback make a Crossover that'd make AI laugh himself
Imma expose PD as a pedophile, cuz he spies on lil girls, hopin they age right
He'll be at a Open Mic, hear "FREEZE", & it'll be the last time he has stage fright
This dude thinks his poems deserve recognition, he prolly has all regret
But I'll bury him till he's got grass to his ears, then he'll finally be a Poet Laureate
Talk too much shit & I'll get 3 goons to put him down til he's forever twitchin
They'll be in his car with barbed wire, that's 3 killer lines better than any haiku he's ever written
Revolutionary my ass...
kid you won’t be fuckin’ televised… tellin’ lies… phony as fuck...
Claim to be revolutionary, then avy a capitalist comic book
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This dude thinks his poems deserve recognition, he prolly has all regret
But I'll bury him till he's got grass to his ears, then he'll finally be a Poet Laureate
Talk too much shit & I'll get 3 goons to put him down til he's forever twitchin
They'll be in his car with barbed wire, that's 3 killer lines better than any haiku he's ever written
Interesting to see this battle between two award winners from SS and PC, but I did expect more. More attacks at previous posts of poetry and something more personal about the two of y'all cause y'all have a recent history I thought. PD had a shorter barred more poetic flowing verse, while OG used a traditional format in structure. The delivery was noticeably more effective from Maes, but his landed punches at the end are what really made the difference here.
V/ OG two bars to one
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Nothing. Sorry poeta, but you're a poet bro lol. Some of your lines were super corny. Especially that last bar lol. Your build ups were kinda stretched out most of the time, mainly on the bars that were three lines long. Try being more direct and harsher rather than creative, might help you out a bit.
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You back to text? surely ya CREW doesn't think this is good for ya health
Cause how you tryna comeback make a Crossover that'd make AI laugh himself
This was pretty good, smooth and creative
This dude thinks his poems deserve recognition, he prolly has all regret
But I'll bury him till he's got grass to his ears, then he'll finally be a Poet Laureate
nice double play
Talk too much shit & I'll get 3 goons to put him down til he's forever twitchin
They'll be in his car with barbed wire, that's 3 killer lines better than any haiku he's ever written
haha I liked this a lot, very personal
Pretty heavy drop. You had some smooth wording and a couple nice concepts. Really liked those last two bars.
Overall, Frost took this pretty easily. Poeta could be a solid competitor if he works at it but right now he's just not got an aggressive battle bone in his body lol.
o drop your fuckin’ bars, they'll be greeted with laughter…
It’ll be a bigger disaster than, well… your last battle with Dzaster.
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Talk too much shit & I'll get 3 goons to put him down til he's forever twitchin
They'll be in his car with barbed wire, that's 3 killer lines better than any haiku he's ever written
not the best battle.. poets was a bit statementish even the last line i quoted i mean i thought it was clever reminded me of like a KOTD bar made me chuckle but something was missing throughout the verse.. i think it was you who's battle i fed one time i don't like the whole 3 bar set up... it makes your lines seem stretched throws off the wording a bit.. you had some misses gotta be a little more creative with set ups and deliver the punch with a little more sting ... OG came better, still not great shaking rust i guess, felt a lot of your lines were close more subtle than actual hits but nonetheless better. the spilling trays line i thought has been done before.. and the poet laureate just didn't hit for me i think the BOTB was your closer that was creative and a cool personal... either way good enough to win the battle here...
Good shit keep battling
Vote OG
Poet: lol manhood was good
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Og: haiku
Overall: I really like poets wording and setups.. he just needs to work on his execution tbh. Og had too many bad misses. Haiku was nice tho, rest wasn't.
Vote: poet
Poet the Manchester line was okay
The rest was mild. Nothing really stood out as a strong punch..
The lines before the punches were alright
But the overall punches lacked bro.. Try to be more creative and come up with harder punches..
OG i think cam lil harder..
Punches werent all that either but landed with lil more sting
Haiku lines was cool.. Crossover line was mild.. Overall mild disses..but they hit harder then poets..
V/OG
4-1 og uppin
Imma expose PD as a pedophile, cuz he spies on lil girls, hopin they age right
He'll be at a Open Mic, hear "FREEZE", & it'll be the last time he has stage fright
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Nothing
I hate voting on battles like these,,, like both subjects didn't even try to make it worth reading... don't know what poet was doing... from structure to angle, it was all over the place...OG wasn't any better to be honest, but...eh..
V-OG