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I like to go on adventures,
through sprawling forests.
Where the sun light dances in the leaves
giving life to the trees through which it weaves.
First, I love simple titles. Simple titles can lead to so much more, especially when the content explodes with life. Two, simplicity within the text itself. No trying to impress me, at least that's how I felt. Beautiful, gorgeous imagery. You don't rhyme much, but leaves and weaves flowed effortlessly off the tongue. I enjoyed that being in there, like a semblance of a melody within the lively confines of the forest. Green, full of life, thrumming with the sounds of the birds. It's a place of its own, beating with a heart not completely separated from our own.
And the sky is concealed
by a canopy of butterflies and birdsong
and the crisp air fills my lungs
free of the city smog.
There's them birdsongs I was talking about. The usage of canopy is something I liked. Crisp air. Untainted, unpoisoned with the toxins of industrial labor. Free of people, free of manufactured things. Just you and nature. In your natural habitat to be truthful, because it is.
My rural metropolis.
Echoing that sentiment. Your rural city, your home, your true home. Where things live in nature, free. No laws. No rights. Just primal instinct and peace (for the most part). Strong single sentence ending here.