Hands on the Wheel

Hands on the Wheel
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dGd9DTTrX4U

Truth is weed and brew just is how my summertime do
11am wilen out, puff a blunt a heinekin too
Keep me straight until 4:22
Life as Qs55 was just a one when trick turns bitch
Trying to play me like she ain’t the snitch
Fuck around and get the GB ditch
Bitches, bitches, bitches, got to put one down to make them shine
Truth is they feel my fire in every other line
But the get right aint anything like theirs I do mine
Lunatic, the addict can stop any time
Switch it up, light it up, pop it down or fight it with rhyme
Ordering coronas with lemons not limes

Chorus

Roll it up, take a hit, pass it around, light a cigarette
Take a shot, and pass it again – lights go down at 2am
This is just our winter nights, our circle crew yeah we owe you
To demonstrate how the ghost can do, inebriated between the two
Always around corners, it’s just how this game can do
We got your bitch and her lame little crew
Either way the blame lands on me or falls on you
To put to shame just what they’ll do
And don’t tell me cause maybe I’ll tell you
3rd world order, yeah I’m kinda high
Under what merit can your trick drive by
Evil is as evil do, and fuck you bitch maybe I O U
Hands on the wheel it’s either you or me
When the vision gets blurry and I can’t see

Chorus

Spring time come and it’s time to grow
Get the finance up, and make the dough
Time to airout, detox the flow
Bringing out that 3 day blow
Oh you think that I don’t know
How’d you think the guide would show?
Oh he thought that I can’t throw
Did he not see my black crow
Fuck the fire and fuck the light
Let’s get high every night
Reel it in, and stop on sight
Save it for a party night
Every season there’s an autumn too
If you took the oath like the players 2
Then just don’t tellem how bad girls do
Surrender now and go on through
Life for me is just fun and jokes
Tell me how it is for your other folks
Take to the rarest of rare
Smoke um out everywhere
I don’t care if it’s weed or brew
Top or bottom you know how we can do

@ILLunatic ... teach me?

I'm not a fan of the content. I like imagination drops.. haha but with that been said, i think it was good.. a little meta here and there will help you out a lot.

Yeah, I need to spend time perfecting rather then just airing out... I kinda understand you there

try to find a diction first cause the idea was just all over the place to be honest but word shit was vibin on some west coast type shit but it was just ideas... nothing real solid and based. the content was just too translucent and dry in a sense.... read some of the OM's around to try and grasp the art of storytelling but props on this and i see potential and the fact you want to elevate then sure thing my friend

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Originally Posted by CLA919

@ILLunatic ... teach me?

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???

I think she wants your 'expert opinion'...

LOL

I couldn't really get the flow of this unfortunately...

Structure was low, flow was low, your meaning was low and you seemed to use run ons.

I don't know if I'm wrong with this but your gonna need more practice with this one in mind. Only this one CLA919.

Upping this one... every other line made sense too