How to be a player

Don't -og
Liar in red

Just got bored n keyed this up, first open mic
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8AfWiBfYbhA

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Met a nice young tender on tinder it was real discreet
Tlc relationship,we hadda creep
every week, I would serve her beef
Sloppy toppy she ain't need no teeth to eat this meat
Head so good make a man luv her
Can't be square cuz from the go she said she had another
I ask who it was, she said dont matter it ain't ya brother
She didn't stutter, at this time my life was In The gutter
Still smooth like butter
I told the girl I was having rainy days, she said she could make em sunny
I laughed out loud but she ain't think it was funny
Look me in my eyes ask what I needed it, I told her money
Said bring me some the best way you know how
A hour later she brought me 70 dollars, oh wow
I'm gonna milk this heifer like a show cow
She handed it over with no fuss
Didn't matter how much, I just needed trust
It felt like a movie
Told her next move be her best move n chose me
She said mofo I'm down for you I wanna see you shine
No matter what I got ya back I'll be ya spine
She had no idea at this time about this life of crime
Only thing that mattered was chasing dimes
I had sold stones to feens but never dreams to a queen
But I knew I hadda secure this girl on my team
She had on jeans
cut the pants legs off,show her naked azz
Instructed her to stroll the ave and wave as the cars past
See that 70 was cool but this way you can make money swiftly
Handed her 4 condoms and told her every 15 minutes bring me fifty
She took off and I saw her flag a truck down n hopped in as I watching
10 minutes go by I look at my clock in
Here she comes handing me 75 I P.ut I.n M.y P.ocket
Told her get to the next one don't let no thing stop it
As she ran off, I was approached by a lady named Mimi
She said, you look out for yo girls, wish that could be me
I told her she. Could have the world if she could learn French we we
She gave 770 told me that was a day's earnings
My other girl came back with another 50 from the tricks she was turning
Now I'm no sex slave master, girls I just guide ya
This was the day they chose me as they personal advisor

Technically wasn't all that great. You know as far as technique goes but I enjoyed this alot. There were a few lines that had some humor...

Lol @ best way know how/ 70 dollars oh wow . That part was cool

Then the French we we part. Lol

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Originally Posted by Attack of the Muff

Technically wasn't all that great. You know as far as technique goes but I enjoyed this alot. There were a few lines that had some humor...

Lol @ best way know how/ 70 dollars oh wow . That part was cool

Then the French we we part. Lol

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Just a key my friend, I vomited all that out. Just tryna do my part n be active

Entertaining drop

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Don't get my wrong I liked it

Seen o.g dropped some shit thought I'd drop some shit, might hook my mic up n try n spit it

Whatup mofo
You should def hook up your mic and get things rolling!!
This was a nice write nd just it not being that serious vibe were all pretty accustomed too it had some good humor in it. Even some lines like sold stones to feens never dreams to queens, that was a little glimpse of some shine.

Lol this was an amusing read. Funny how some of us display stories such as this for some pussy or errand run then pussy.

This piece almost described on how you can fail in the process if denied comes into play.

My only suggestion is to add more depth along the storyline. Make it cinematic or flavored imagery so readers can taste the feeling of....yeah I been there yo. Other than that it was a fun read while enjoying every moment.

Thanks guys.