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Joe, you're getting better. You've got a heavy Beastie Boys style. That's pretty cool. For the most part, there are a few things you can do to polish up your verse. This advice will be for you to apply to your future verses as well. Your flow is pretty solid, but gets shaky when you don't use enough words in a line, or use too many. Find just the right amount. You should be able to feel it. If rythym is natural to you, it will just click for you. If it's not, I'm sure there are tutorial videos on YouTube to able to master ryhtym with lyrics, probably even rap lyrics. I was digging your wordplay, but I think sometimes the end rhymes you choose aren't as strong as they could be. Let me rewind this and give you an example. "aftermath, forecast, backdraft" You're rhyming all one syllable end-lines, which is fine, but I personally believe you have enough talent to rhyme compound syllables, because I've seen you do it from what I remember. Vocals sound more polished when they have a consistent pattern. When you pause in the line "Better think smart................thnk fast/ Studied my shit..................like (not sure what you say here)"/ You pause too long after "studied my shit". You leave it open to not let the listener know where you're going with the next word or words, and then you finish it abrupltly. If you're going to pause in both lines, make the pause the same period of time. What I mean is, the way you pause in the first line, repeat it in the second line. Maybe say like (whatever you say) faster. Let's just say you said "M-Cats"(sorry if this isn't what you said). In the first line after your pause you put emphasis on THINK. So, in your 2nd line, your emphasis should be on your first word after you pause. Your overdubs could also be cleaner. I would say from a mixing standpoint, also bring the volume of them down so they don't take away from your original verse. I think you're on your way to recording some solid audio if you tweak a few things. Good job brother.
Edit: What I mean about the one syllable lines, is the words you chose are good compound syllables that you can play off of. Example : Aftermath: You could rhyme it with a few things. I'm doing this off the top of my head so take it with a grain of salt. Aftermath; Hack and Slash; Half the Cash; Blastin' Past; there are plenty more, but I have to do my schoolwork now. Good luck to you bro.
I appreciate it very much you leaving accurate feed on this man. This was an old joint i found from 2006 i think i cant reallt think that i never posted on here. I definitely get what your saying on the flow and the rhyme scheme and thats a big problem because i overthink when i write something too much.Quote:
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I'm digging this man! That vocal quality is super on point. That mixing is phenomenal. Vocals are perfect with that beat. The dubs might be a little loud.
But that beat is fire. This has an old school vibe that I really fuck with. That hook was like a throw back DMX hook.
Second verse is pretty fire too! Good delivery and cadence. Good pronunciation. Nice old school feel to this track all over all around.
This was fun to listen to. Keep it up man! Thanks for the feedback on my last video!
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Not the biggest fan of the beat. You have good presence, flow seems consistent. Decent verse overall.
Chorus is pretty basic. But I like the back & forth format wit both of you guys.
2nd guy - Great presence, love the energy and hunger. Lines are pretty good. Solid verse.
I think the mixing could be better. Sounds a little raspy. But overall I'm feeling the track. It can bang.
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that rap was really awesome !