WK16: SIN of Darkness (0-4) vs MV (0-1) MV Wins

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@SIN of Darkness

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Against me..you'll hear the scream of silent Sirens.. I'll outshine you with the rays of ultraviolets (to play door mind's for the evenings!)
You can't see my double cross like a rising Pilate..you're gay as hell...MV stands for.. My Valor? You're trying to save your ass..and..Saving Private Ryan's
In war I have dog tags I have your drawback in clenches! I knock tracks with pension
Draw back with teck clips..you can't escape my bars..Shawshank Redemption..
I'm judges when I pop the gavel..I'll kill you at the top like popping snapple
saying you rap but you're going pop in battles..you're basically the worm in the rotten apple..
my scorn will hail ghosts..I'll have you going ghost..I'll lay forth the pale toast
I'll close the door..and sail boat..with well flows..I'll have you 'frozen on tracks' like ice storms on rail roads
I'll turn you blue as ghosts..I'll break bread and do a toast..
I'm true and known..you're retarded like The Truman Show..you're so wack..I can't tell if you're doing dope..or doing coke..
I'm deceiving your idols..you can't touch the apple..as I teach as disciple..
I'll besiege as a eyeful..I'll put a Acts to your arms..like reading the Bible..
I have the sadder burst to lay this waste..grab a hearse and see the day
stab a verse with easy says..I'll put this 'faggot in a box' like massacre's at gay parade's..

14..don't get..don't vote..

check

AHS-American Horror Story

im on the map as a legend for killing fools so pray for blessings
or im after your basin<--finding her in one of those can lead to major depression
goodluck break ya leg, battle you everyday on a different floor for an allegory
doctors'll be realigning ya limb thinking AHS same cast but different stories
you the snitch type? better tell if know where papi hiding the bricks
believe me, imma find out what sinew...even if i have cut through that shit
im the epitome of evil but had an epiphany to get my life right today
hold ya underwater until u floating up stream.. i got confused how to wash sin away
off memory i'll act out like dave chappelle when he larp on set
where'ever darknesses put'em in the same place as rick james..thats as dark as it gets
yo girl on me i gave her the dick, fucked her now she onna jihad
she will never push this deicide............for the love of god
you seriously want arson in ya pen game like me? ok lets get one thing clear
now that its directed at you we gonna see if this flame retarded or if sinsear

So yea.. i think some ppl are taking your shit literaly Sin and not voting casue they dont get it, or dont want to.. so u may wanna cease with that. Still, this battle was lacking in direct hits and had major reaches by one, and some farfetched attempts by the other.

Best bars were:

I'm deceiving your idols..you can't touch the apple..as I teach as disciple..
I'll besiege as a eyeful..I'll put a Acts to your arms..like reading the Bible..
^Best short bar attempt of your short career my dude.. well set up minus overwording which is typpical of you, then fairly well delivered minus the filler "besiege as a eyefull" I have the sadder burst to lay this waste..grab a hearse and see the day
stab a verse with easy says..I'll put this 'faggot in a box' like massacre's at gay parade's..
^Decent attempt, but Im starting to wonder if you're even over the age of 20 cause your use of multis(sadder/grab hearse/ stab verse/ massacre) is begging the question to whether u are actually attempting to correlate these concepts or just think they sound cool..6/10

versus

you the snitch type? better tell if know where papi hiding the bricks
believe me, imma find out what sinew...even if i have cut through that shit
^this wordplay/nameplay bar was well placed in an otherwise low tier verse(altho i imagine intentionally considering the opponent).. coulda obviously been better set with the drugs angle but nice hit 8/10
im the epitome of evil but had an epiphany to get my life right today
hold ya underwater until u floating up stream.. i got confused how to wash sin away
^cool delivery on the setup up evil vs good/realization.. everything else a bar above and below(except MAYBE the Sinsear punch) wouldn't stand against most others here.. but you seriously already knew that...


V/ MV for the better hits in this mess of a showing.

Quote:

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Originally Posted by SIN of Darkness

Against me..you'll hear the scream of silent Sirens.. I'll outshine you with the rays of ultraviolets (to play door mind's for the evenings!)
You can't see my double cross like a rising Pilate..you're gay as hell...MV stands for.. My Valor? You're trying to save your ass..and..Saving Private Ryan's
This was horribly stretched, worded, and conceived. Just a mess.
In war I have dog tags I have your drawback in clenches! I knock tracks with pension
Draw back with teck clips..you can't escape my bars..Shawshank Redemption..
You can escape my bars....then reference a movie ABOUT a prison escape?....
I'm judges when I pop the gavel..I'll kill you at the top like popping snapple
saying you rap but you're going pop in battles..you're basically the worm in the rotten apple..
Pretty much your M.O. TRYING to cram in multiple concepts but failing to drive them home as punches.
my scorn will hail ghosts..I'll have you going ghost..I'll lay forth the pale toast
I'll close the door..and sail boat..with well flows..I'll have you 'frozen on tracks' like ice storms on rail roads
hail ghosts...pale toast? Then a pretty basic tracks/train simile.
I'll turn you blue as ghosts..I'll break bread and do a toast..
I'm true and known..you're retarded like The Truman Show..you're so wack..I can't tell if you're doing dope..or doing coke..
Not sure why you felt compelled to rhyme ghost & toast...again. Truman punch was bad.
I'm deceiving your idols..you can't touch the apple..as I teach as disciple..
I'll besiege as a eyeful..I'll put a Acts to your arms..like reading the Bible..
This was horribly worded, and the concept is meh.
I have the sadder burst to lay this waste..grab a hearse and see the day
stab a verse with easy says..I'll put this 'faggot in a box' like massacre's at gay parade's..
Yeah..no.

14..don't get..don't vote..

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Quote:

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Originally Posted by MV

AHS-American Horror Story

im on the map as a legend for killing fools so pray for blessings
or im after your basin<--finding her in one of those can lead to major depression
This was solid.
goodluck break ya leg, battle you everyday on a different floor for an allegory
doctors'll be realigning ya limb thinking AHS same cast but different stories
This was pretty dope. Good shit.
you the snitch type? better tell if know where papi hiding the bricks
believe me, imma find out what sinew...even if i have cut through that shit
Decent jab.
im the epitome of evil but had an epiphany to get my life right today
hold ya underwater until u floating up stream.. i got confused how to wash sin away
Concept was alright. Not feeling the wordy execution.
off memory i'll act out like dave chappelle when he larp on set
where'ever darknesses put'em in the same place as rick james..thats as dark as it gets
[B]Wasnt big on this nameflip. Kind of anticlimatic. [/b
yo girl on me i gave her the dick, fucked her now she onna jihad
she will never push this deicide............for the love of god
Ok jab.
you seriously want arson in ya pen game like me? ok lets get one thing clear
now that its directed at you we gonna see if this flame retarded or if sinsear
Another straight jab.

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This was a pretty easy call. One sided. MV consistently threw punches. Sin consistently tripped over himself.

Vote - MV

Quote:

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Originally Posted by SIN of Darkness

Against me..you'll hear the scream of silent Sirens.. I'll outshine you with the rays of ultraviolets (to play door mind's for the evenings!)
You can't see my double cross like a rising Pilate..you're gay as hell...MV stands for.. My Valor? You're trying to save your ass..and..Saving Private Ryan's
^^No sir... Why is he saving Private Ryan?

In war I have dog tags I have your drawback in clenches! I knock tracks with pension
Draw back with teck clips..you can't escape my bars..Shawshank Redemption..
^^No sir. Can't knock a track with pension. They escaped Shawshank, too

I'm judges when I pop the gavel..I'll kill you at the top like popping snapple
saying you rap but you're going pop in battles..you're basically the worm in the rotten apple..
^^OK
my scorn will hail ghosts..I'll have you going ghost..I'll lay forth the pale toast
I'll close the door..and sail boat..with well flows..I'll have you 'frozen on tracks' like ice storms on rail roads
The connections are random, brother

I'll turn you blue as ghosts..I'll break bread and do a toast..
I'm true and known..you're retarded like The Truman Show..you're so wack..I can't tell if you're doing dope..or doing coke..
^^No sir... U used ghost and toast already in this verse. The Truman Show wasn't retarded...

I'm deceiving your idols..you can't touch the apple..as I teach as disciple..
I'll besiege as a eyeful..I'll put a Acts to your arms..like reading the Bible..
^^Nope

I have the sadder burst to lay this waste..grab a hearse and see the day
stab a verse with easy says..I'll put this 'faggot in a box' like massacre's at gay parade's..
^^OK

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Quote:

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Originally Posted by MV

AHS-American Horror Story

im on the map as a legend for killing fools so pray for blessings
or im after your basin<--finding her in one of those can lead to major depression
^^Not for me MV. The last line had potential... Simpler, like "I'm takin ur Basin, then I'ma put her in one"

goodluck break ya leg, battle you everyday on a different floor for an allegory
doctors'll be realigning ya limb thinking AHS same cast but different stories
^^Yes siir

you the snitch type? better tell if know where papi hiding the bricks
believe me, imma find out what sinew...even if i have cut through that shit
^^Yes

im the epitome of evil but had an epiphany to get my life right today
hold ya underwater until u floating up stream.. i got confused how to wash sin away
^^OK

off memory i'll act out like dave chappelle when he larp on set
where'ever darknesses put'em in the same place as rick james..thats as dark as it gets
^^No sir

yo girl on me i gave her the dick, fucked her now she onna jihad
she will never push this deicide............for the love of god
you seriously want arson in ya pen game like me? ok lets get one thing clear
now that its directed at you we gonna see if this flame retarded or if sinsear
^^Almost lost the rhyme scheme... but decent, my guy

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MV took this battle easily. Sin... your verse seemed extremely random and the connections weren't there. It was a bit frustrating to read. The shit may sound good in your head, but it's a nightmare of a drop.

I'm deceiving your idols..you can't touch the apple..as I teach as disciple..
I'll besiege as a eyeful..I'll put a Acts to your arms..like reading the Bible..

Vs.

I'm on the map as a legend for killing fools so pray for blessings
or im after your basin<--finding her in one of those can lead to major depression
you the snitch type? better tell if know where papi hiding the bricks
believe me, imma find out what sinew...even if i have cut through that shit
im the epitome of evil but had an epiphany to get my life right today
hold ya underwater until u floating up stream.. i got confused how to wash sin away
yo girl on me i gave her the dick, fucked her now she onna jihad
she will never push this deicide............for the love of god



V/ MV

This was straightforward...

Sin: I told you beforehand about your lines. Good Horrorcore points, but no actual dissing is seen throughout your script. Take your time on the difference between broad or overly used concepts. Just take these words into consideration.

MV: You had a few cool lines. Not a perfect victory just enough to draw attention more.. Not bad.

Overall : MV gets my vote...

Against me..you'll hear the scream of silent Sirens.. I'll outshine you with the rays of ultraviolets (to play door mind's for the evenings!)
You can't see my double cross like a rising Pilate..you're gay as hell...MV stands for.. My Valor? You're trying to save your ass..and..Saving Private Ryan's
If u have to expo the bar in the bar this a fuckin miss... and U didnt diss him
In war I have dog tags I have your drawback in clenches! I knock tracks with pension
Draw back with teck clips..you can't escape my bars..Shawshank Redemption..
Played concept and another moving bar?
I'm judges when I pop the gavel..I'll kill you at the top like popping snapple
saying you rap but you're going pop in battles..you're basically the worm in the rotten apple
pop pop pop...this bar didnt hit man..
my scorn will hail ghosts..I'll have you going ghost..I'll lay forth the pale toast
I'll close the door..and sail boat..with well flows..I'll have you 'frozen on tracks' like ice storms on rail roads
no
I'll turn you blue as ghosts..I'll break bread and do a toast..
I'm true and known..you're retarded like The Truman Show..you're so wack..I can't tell if you're doing dope..or doing coke..
I'm deceiving your idols..you can't touch the apple..as I teach as disciple..
I'll besiege as a eyeful..I'll put a Acts to your arms..like reading the Bible..
I have the sadder burst to lay this waste..grab a hearse and see the day
stab a verse with easy says..I'll put this 'faggot in a box' like massacre's at gay parade's

Not breaking this verse down anymore. this dude gets feedback every week and doesnt listen drops trash like this man. every bar either wasnt a diss or just played misses

vs


im on the map as a legend for killing fools so pray for blessings
or im after your basin<--finding her in one of those can lead to major depression
Dope
goodluck break ya leg, battle you everyday on a different floor for an allegory
doctors'll be realigning ya limb thinking AHS same cast but different stories
Meh wordy man not feelin this
you the snitch type? better tell if know where papi hiding the bricks
believe me, imma find out what sinew...even if i have cut through that shit
Dope concept just a bit wordy
im the epitome of evil but had an epiphany to get my life right today
hold ya underwater until u floating up stream.. i got confused how to wash sin away
This was aight man...could have been dope
off memory i'll act out like dave chappelle when he larp on set
where'ever darknesses put'em in the same place as rick james..thats as dark as it gets
yaaa... dont do this
yo girl on me i gave her the dick, fucked her now she onna jihad
she will never push this deicide............for the love of god
Doesnt rhyme bro
you seriously want arson in ya pen game like me? ok lets get one thing clear
now that its directed at you we gonna see if this flame retarded or if sinsear
I fuck with this tbh



V/MV Easy here.