A2Z (1-4) vs. Simile (0-0)

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Topic...
Sudden Death

sudden death..ok...i got cheated last week cuz my cmputer...im still not happy about that mad man...check check

yay he put me in................................................ ...........................................

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A drug deal, something simple, a quick exchange of cash//
Get the new-b to watch on the corner, make him cover your ass//
A little lump is in your pocket, just yelling "Dont fine me!"//
A little rock of fun, the spice of life, life of the party//
A shady character walks up, eyes darting at you, looking for a gun//
Blood shot eyes, milk pale skin, you can tell he hardly sees the sun//
A casual "Whats up" and he can tel in your eyes//
That at that moment you are his savior, the god of illegal highs//
You stare at each other for a second, your heart starts to race//
You start to come back on yourself, selling fake rock to his face//
It had been simple, just throw some ingredients in//
Fuck what happens to this junkie, since when were you him?//
A slip of the hand exposes cash and with a quick nod//
You jet off into the corner of the alley, ready to finish the job//
You hand him the Ziplock, the bag to his relief of tension//
This guy was smart, he did something you weren't expectin'//
A lighter in his left hand a pipe is in his right//
A quick crack and crack cocaine smoke penetrates the night//
He gives one puff on his pipe, his eyes fly open//
The flour you had decided to mix in had his black lungs choking//
His hand reaches across, he had one but stupidly you had none//
It glints in his hand, the key to your demise...in his palm was a gun//
Now his eyes were watering, his lungs were rejecting//
What ever it was you put in that fake crack-like thing//
He demands what you sold him you search for a choice//
Of whether to lie or tell him the truth, but you cant find your voice//
it dies in your throat, bt out you choke that it was misunderstanding//
"Give me the good shit" he says...he wasnt asking he was demanding//
You hastily explain how you had no more, but you could give him H instead//
He wasn't having it, with a crack and Sudden Death he sends a bullet through your head//

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...247#post574247
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...255#post574255

^^Those are the only battles done when I left^^

I'll have my links up soon...

Quick...I didnt kno it was due today...

His name was untitled - an orphan of sort - dropped out of school started playin a different type of sport/
His conscious court - was distort - in a depressant mood he ran his life with cocaine sniffed up the snort/
His nostrils burn - get that heavenly feelin - your head churns as your pulse rate starts up-healin/
He starts to dance - in a tribal way - his worries of money and emotional pain - found themselves a-stray/
Black clouds appear over his eyes - is it the end of his day? - 1 hr later he looks for more white-spray/
"Damn man i need to sniff one up real fast" Friend- " Com'on Dawg at that rate you'll never last"/
Puts his coat on - and catches the keys - jumps in the car - roars up the engine - and leaves a petroleum breeze/
Puts the breaks on - Goes into the alley - "Yo man, let me get some" - Dealer " Kid pay up the tally"/
Rummages through his pockets - but their's nuthin left - in desperation and anxiety he hits the man in the cleft/
Knee's him down - "haha take that clown" - puts his hands in his pockets and steals the crown/
Starts to make a dodge for it - but the Viper is too fast - he rams his leg into a trash can and does a 360 spin- CRASH!/
" See what happens when you cross the Viper" - Pulls out a pistol - 3 lead bullets go into the orphanted Cocaine sniper/
"Sirens" - everyone please clear the place - They put the man on the stretcher and look at his face/
He has a chance he's still breathing- "Did he eat a fruit-roll-up or are his teeth teething?/
"There's no way we can help him sir- the injury wounds point to his heart- thats probably his last breath"/
(At his Funeral) At the speed that boy was going at - with no one to show him the right way - he was destined for SUDDEN DEATH/

A2Z Had A Better Verse.. It Almost Seemed Like Similie Ripped The Concept Of A2Z'z Verse and Used It For Himself...

Vote A2Z

i agree ^^^^ my vote had to go to a2z....... great verses tho.... should have come more original sim, but good battle

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A2Z: wordplay: 8 for flow and consistency, rhyme scheme: 7 for stability, story: 8 for originality and hottness, total: 23

Simile: wordplay: 7 for consistency, rhyme scheme: 7 for consistency, story: 7 for hottness, total: 21

A2Z gets my vote, but Simile also had a good verse.....i dont think ya bit his verse

I found A2Z's verse pretty good.
I didn't care that much for Simile's. Average, I guess.
A2Z's story played out in a much more cohesive fashion.
I also felt he killed Simile in "flow".
I was fairly impressed given your terrible record.

Vote = A2Z

Ok...I Liked Both Verses And Both Had Good Vocab And Feeling Put In It...But I'm Gonna Go Wit A2Z...Nice Verse...And Like What Sureal Said...It Was Like Similie Ripped A2Z Verse...More Originality Needed...

Vote - A2Z