10 lines due tom by noon
10 lines due tom by noon
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Last edited by Uben. Sonned; June 18th, 2009 at 10:47 PM
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.Major League Gaming.
XBOX 360 GT: COF Nightmare
iight...
start the adoption case, i fucked ya girl and stopped so she could collect'er thoughts n pace
long enough to realize...her only wish's for me to keep dragon balls across'er face
why's this guy spittin-n-high sittin when im hittin to make him crash and fall
responding for crowds to see when i think that 'few should know' you even rap at all
you'll get ya bars ripped as i deliver spar tips n pound dude in to the floor
so hurry n split... cuz you're the only fusion created wit less power than before
abort ya plans to diss me i advance wit hands that strike to leave you in a trance n dizzy
fuckin this whore over how my hookers leave'em wit out a single V like Atlantic City
this is suicide to collide...im adressin the verse to wear'em out like jewelry
cuz you're the first instrument of defeat that looks more like a tool to me
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wtf... and you no show huh?
a mod pls close this
-sighs-
this is why i dont care to battle any more
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Yeah, try I work man.
Shit, 10 lines Rushed.
Kid stays within the cypher forum for practice
He stays steady with text...So how you going to ask how the feedback is?//
He used to rep NA, now a crew that's no more
Wasn't even rostered...Why? Cause he was too wack of course//
I'm starving for herbs, at least the pains bareable
I would've fed off some of your lines, but their plain horrible//
The fusion, punches that are compelling and raw
Leaving this punk speachless, as if I ripped out his fucking jaw//
Did some research I know you want the No-Show Victory
Addicts are used to the same...your past battle's show your history//
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.Major League Gaming.
XBOX 360 GT: COF Nightmare
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-401057.html
hit mine back fusion i did yours
start the adoption case, i fucked ya girl and stopped so she could collect'er thoughts n pace
long enough to realize...her only wish's for me to keep dragon balls across'er face
-your lines are stretched which kills it
why's this guy spittin-n-high sittin when im hittin to make him crash and fall
responding for crowds to see when i think that 'few should know' you even rap at all
-ok
you'll get ya bars ripped as i deliver spar tips n pound dude in to the floor
so hurry n split... cuz you're the only fusion created wit less power than before
-ok
abort ya plans to diss me i advance wit hands that strike to leave you in a trance n dizzy
fuckin this whore over how my hookers leave'em wit out a single V like Atlantic City
-eh
this is suicide to collide...im adressin the verse to wear'em out like jewelry
cuz you're the first instrument of defeat that looks more like a tool to me
-played but cool this was ur best line
vs
take out the //
Kid stays within the cypher forum for practice
He stays steady with text...So how you going to ask how the feedback is?//
-eh culda been worded better
He used to rep NA, now a crew that's no more
Wasn't even rostered...Why? Cause he was too wack of course//
-made me lol but weak
I'm starving for herbs, at least the pains bareable
I would've fed off some of your lines, but their plain horrible//
-ok
The fusion, punches that are compelling and raw
Leaving this punk speachless, as if I ripped out his fucking jaw//
-cool
Did some research I know you want the No-Show Victory
Addicts are used to the same...your past battle's show your history//
-weak
ok this battle was decent
im giving it to fusion as he wasnt strethed and came harder with the punches even if the punches were weak i still lold
start the adoption case, i fucked ya girl and stopped so she could collect'er thoughts n pace
long enough to realize...her only wish's for me to keep dragon balls across'er face
vs
honestly nothing....
this battle was average at best, i felt like feedback def had more real attempts at punch lines though and thats the main reason i think he takes this, fusion your structure was not good and punches were rather simple....
v/ feed
so heres what i see... i got feedback, who is dropping the best verse i ever seen from him, but its all way too stretched, and i got fusion, an obvious vet, with great structure, but obviously a rush job he put little thought into.. i dont like that excuse, but still its far better verse than feedback, but dont take me wrong feedback... this is some nice elevation from you, and if youd have trimmed your verse into a more concise structure, i seriously think that you would have won this, because i could feel you going for the neck... keep up the good work
V/fusion
you rap like ibeastout votes
start the adoption case, i fucked ya girl and stopped so she could collect'er thoughts n pace
long enough to realize...her only wish's for me to keep dragon balls across'er face
An alright concept killed by stretch, should've used filler insted.
why's this guy spittin-n-high sittin when im hittin to make him crash and fall
responding for crowds to see when i think that 'few should know' you even rap at all
multi's, but thats really it... okay-ish
you'll get ya bars ripped as i deliver spar tips n pound dude in to the floor
so hurry n split... cuz you're the only fusion created wit less power than before
Okay I guess...
abort ya plans to diss me i advance wit hands that strike to leave you in a trance n dizzy
fuckin this whore over how my hookers leave'em wit out a single V like Atlantic City
Stretched, meh-ish
this is suicide to collide...im adressin the verse to wear'em out like jewelry
cuz you're the first instrument of defeat that looks more like a tool to me
okay-ish closer.
vs
Kid stays within the cypher forum for practice
He stays steady with text...So how you going to ask how the feedback is?//
meh...bad wording
He used to rep NA, now a crew that's no more
Wasn't even rostered...Why? Cause he was too wack of course//
whack... no rhyme
I'm starving for herbs, at least the pains bareable
I would've fed off some of your lines, but their plain horrible//
was too straight out, Should've been a flip...
The fusion, punches that are compelling and raw
Leaving this punk speachless, as if I ripped out his fucking jaw//
Too simple...
Did some research I know you want the No-Show Victory
Addicts are used to the same...your past battle's show your history//
lol alright
I honestly don't know who to vote for, this was really weak. After reading both verses afew times I don't know... I'll say Feed took it, Fusion just elevate...
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Was gone for a minute, but back this second.
start the adoption case, i fucked ya girl and stopped so she could collect'er thoughts n pace
long enough to realize...her only wish's for me to keep dragon balls across'er face
stretched but a sick bar
why's this guy spittin-n-high sittin when im hittin to make him crash and fall
responding for crowds to see when i think that 'few should know' you even rap at all
Nah, bad wording
you'll get ya bars ripped as i deliver spar tips n pound dude in to the floor
so hurry n split... cuz you're the only fusion created wit less power than before
Decent
abort ya plans to diss me i advance wit hands that strike to leave you in a trance n dizzy
fuckin this whore over how my hookers leave'em wit out a single V like Atlantic City
nice multies
this is suicide to collide...im adressin the verse to wear'em out like jewelry
cuz you're the first instrument of defeat that looks more like a tool to me
LOL
vS.
Kid stays within the cypher forum for practice
He stays steady with text...So how you going to ask how the feedback is?//
Decent
He used to rep NA, now a crew that's no more
Wasn't even rostered...Why? Cause he was too wack of course//
A little weak
I'm starving for herbs, at least the pains bareable
I would've fed off some of your lines, but their plain horrible//
Bareable & Horrible don't even go together for me, plus I just read a battle earlier where Archtype flipped this concept better
The fusion, punches that are compelling and raw
Leaving this punk speachless, as if I ripped out his fucking jaw//
Played but decent
Did some research I know you want the No-Show Victory
Addicts are used to the same...your past battle's show your history//
ok, not as much of a sting as I thought it'd bring
Feedback: Although alot of your bars were stretched, I thought you came with the stronger punches and fresher concepts... Nice use of multies, decent drop overall..
Fusion: Your verse was rushed and you could tell... you've got some decent concepts going for you, just need to find a way to word 'em better... keep working at it dude
Vote: Feedback
bump.
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let's get this shyt closed
vote ppl
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vote - Feed back
quote suggestion...stop being so wordy and tryin to through
too many multis and words used for filler into your lines
just to make them rhyme and just stick with the content
in the punch itself and your bars will shorten
and those ~'s in ur username look gay
Feed definately had more punches that where creative than fusion
fusion had a few but they where overused punches like you cant
speak because I ripped your jaw out and I would feed off of you
but your shit was too bad etc.....
I was expecting more from fusion.....
Feed work on that ish and you'll get better
if you gota size down your font to make the bars fit which
I know you did then the bars are definately too damn long.....
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lol iight... i didnt size them down to fit tho, just like book ant.'s style lol
vote it up ppl!! need this closed
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