Scytso Presents: Solidus Confinement

[Spoken]

Solidus Confinement
-A decaying night

Hank Ludwick
Eyes awake to a shimmer, dimmer that be the light
Needed to guide my eyes, one livid reason to fight
Darkness will swarm around, greet murkiness with a might
Survival under the moon, it’s full to shine through the night
A battle compatible to rattle minds, well defined
As schizophrenia twisted with hallucinated minds
Confined to a tiny room in jackets looking through the blinds
Declining exquisite visits from incomparable kinds
Now wandering through a forest, smashing branches and leaves
Starry skies up above, and shadows you won’t believe
I slowly creep past the trees, I plead to exit this maze
Correct direction unsure as it lures an oncoming craze

"As the night spewed wild embers,
Flashing as powdered particles; descended.
The moon lit bright,
A certain path to no where"

Hank the Tank
Molding clanks that shank the banks of my outer mind,
Slandering tanks of thanks that Hank couldnt identify.
Irate prose with a nose sniffing close; blood of civilization,
Mending pros with con lows growing holds as truth is evasive.
So he snapped from crack that people cap as a peaking tantrum,
Vast figures that laugh and mask mankinds sanctum.
The norm is not to swarm as global warns this generation,
Lodging thorns through our sores with seeping pores; radiation.
So with that said it's my test to manifest a readers perspective,
Accolade the best thoughts that caresses bleeders to neglect this.
Feed the poor that adores concrete floors and dirty mouths,
Because the door from which we're born swore it's our way of getting out.

"He spoke with a gentle tongue,
But his words corrupt; blew bullet wounds
Through insanity, talking and screaming.
-At himself at night"

Hank Before Bed
their every words are relentless; sanctum burst by vindictive...
state of mind frame begging for picture perfect existence
and every verb is considered as such absurd definition
a piece of turd, in my instance...OF COURSE IT HURT, it’s a given
cursing in spirit’s an option, i guess. as laughter endow...
sometimes u’ll glimpse the inner pain through the crack of a smile 
conflict of what was/ what could be...yea, my years has its limit
so now i'm cradle robbing this innerchild....for vicarious living
my light's a glaring emission with subtle, grave sentiment
"mind" Kampf, prison subjected to this state penmanship
padded walls where thoughts spew vile vision perfected
hall of fame or house of horror, smiling Scytsophrenic

[I]"Alas, truth is told many times,
But when said over with brute cognitions; your losing yourself in your mind"[/I

[Spoken]

I'll grab links now


Bump

[<SamPle>]

Hank Ludwick:
consistently goof all the way through, nice multies and a wide range of vocab... you almost overdid the vocab but i you stayed at a good level at the end. flow was tight also. didnt have any amazing lines though but were all good.

HAnk the tank: i was expecting an Old School reference.
"Molding clanks that shank the banks of my outer mind,
Slandering tanks of thanks that Hank couldnt identify"

nice multies here, a real great way to open the verse was excited from here on.

"Vast figures that laugh and mask mankinds sanctum.
The norm is not to swarm as global warns this generation,
Lodging thorns through our sores with seeping pores; radiation"

on same, killer multies.... ncie flow throughout. your vocab was spot on here, not overdone but gets you thinking. another consistant peice.

Hank Before Bed:
"mind" Kampf, prison subjected to this state penmanship"

clever here, nice

but the ryhming was terrible, is written like a poem.. the peice would be ok on its own but as part of a 3 verse written it jsut didnt fit in. missing alot of rapping devices but focuse more on the storytelling, maybe thats what you tried to do but sure..

keeping going guys

[Spoken]

Thanks man appreciate your time

[Str8 JackIt]

damn...i'll provide links, aint know this was posted....DAMN, hot shit hot shit! lol

links:
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...176/index.html
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...643/index.html

[Spoken]

My bad been tied the fuk up


Bump

[Northern Beggar]

oh shit didnt even see this haha. good stuff.

anybody who feed this will get a feed in return.

[Northern Beggar]

^^ up up

[Spoken]

bump come on suckers

[trajik]

First verse

You created a sick flow with your internals, certain lines were so fun to read, perhaps my favorite line was "a battle compatible..." The imagery was exceptional, painting the perfect pictures. Great story telling here and nice wording throughout.

Second verse

Another superb flow because of internals, I'm loving this collab. Great imagery in here as well. You had nice wording and my favorite part of this verse was your interesting vocabulary use, using words that you don't constantly see, it spices it up.

Third verse

Damn I really loved the imagery and vocabulary use out of this verse. You had some phenomenal vocabulary allowing for the read to be fresh. The imagery was great I could picture everything that was happening. You also had some good internals to help your flow but I felt some lines read awkwardly working against the flow, but that could have just been my reading.


This was an intriguing concept guys, I can't say that I know who this guy is, whether he's a character you created or if he's a famous schizo, but really interesting read here.

[Yellow Tape]

The first verse describes the situation the person is in. A detailed account of his position. The last two described how he feels and his mind state. Pretty deep stuff

second verse

So with that said it's my test to manifest a readers perspective,
Accolade the best thoughts that caresses bleeders to neglect this.

Trying to relate to your audience but they wont say your right or even aprechiate it because showing love is forbitten.



The last verse spoke to personally. Not saying i'm crazy....

cursing in spirit’s an option, i guess. as laughter endow...
sometimes u’ll glimpse the inner pain through the crack of a smile

So real! I do this often when thinking about my life. I think we smile because it funny in a way and also a smile masks pain. Funny how a man go days without smiling but ask him about a painful memory and watch him describe it with a smile.

conflict of what was/ what could be...yea, my years has its limit
so now i'm cradle robbing this innerchild....for vicarious living

The peter pan syndrome. Like michael jackson, we spend alot of time trying to relive the past or make up for it. Mike like to hang with kids because he lost his childhood trying to be a star and noone understood that. This line describes that perfectly. One day you'll find yourself watching an old childhood cartoon and remember how you use to lay on the floor and watch it along with the action figures in hand. very deep stuff.



great collabo fellows. Hopefully we could hook up and do one soon

[Spoken]

thanks man

[Northern Beggar]

conflict of what was/ what could be...yea, my years has its limit
so now i'm cradle robbing this innerchild....for vicarious living

The peter pan syndrome. Like michael jackson, we spend alot of time trying to relive the past or make up for it..

^^ very impressive. Feed will be returned.