Under Her Spell

[Whyte Ave.]

Under Her Spell

Corus
She's a witch/
She's got me under her spell/
What a bitch/
She's puttin me through hell/
Why I stay, I do not know/
But I look into her eyes, and I cannot go/

Expensive Dinners, Jewelry and Clothes/
Her best friends, my biggest foes/
I'm not rich, this girl I'm gunna ditch/
The phone rings, its her on the other end/
Tellin me to bring extra cash, cause she's bringin a friend/
I can't say no to her voice/
This cash is needed for unpaid bills/
Instead I'm usin it for her thrills/
I go acting all sincere [really thinkin how to kill you my dear]

She's a witch/
She's got me under her spell/
What a bitch/
SHe's putting me through hell/
Why I stay, I do not know/
But I look into her eyes, and I cannot go/

We get home that night, to what else but another FIGHT/
Curses spit and furniture thrown/
The fight is blown outta control/
Looks like the twister has taken its toll/
Its never been this bad before/
She storms out and slams the door/
GOOD she's finally gone/
Something today that didn't go wrong/

There's a knock at the door, it's 3:00am and now were gunna start it up again/
It's two men, what the fuck did she do, she called the cops... (Little hard guitar solo)/
I curse til my lungs can't give air, pleading with these cops that this isn't fair/
Her vision was blurred, her thoughts were slurred, she had to much to drink/ (slow soft voice)
My skin goes pale, from its normal pink/
A semi and her car got in a fight/
She didn't Make it, she died at 1:30 this night/

She's a witch/
She's got me under her spell/
She's a bitch/
And now I'm missin her like hell/
Why didn't I tell her to stay/
Now I'd give the world to see her eyes this day/

*Italics is a different person singing

[Whyte Ave.]

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[Tim]

good piece cept not feeling the chours that much but it might work for other people you had a couple of quotbales and it flowed well nice job keep doing ya thing

be kind peep mine

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=144140

[Whyte Ave.]

thanks for the feedback man..
upppppin

[Nu Artist]

That was pretty decent, and i am feelin the chorus ....it was one of the reads that make me paint a picture to it...good writin

[Sublime D]

nice concept...ok flow...but way too choppy...you cut everythign to short, it was tryign to be fast, but ended up really really choppy..the structure was very sloppy...this was a lil weak honestly..good concept though..weak execution...elevation man...gotta do it...

6.8/10