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    Confessions

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    The night sky is glowing to make a free show of lights rarely viewed or enjoyed in the city except for one girl. She curls up on the front porch, watching her breath disappear into nothing, much like her life. She sits silently, waiting for an answer.

    From who? God? Her mind waits for an answer.

    Silence.

    The pitch black midnight will not give it to her. She breathes another icy breath. Silence. She is alone.

    Many moons she has spent wondering, can the stars see all? They led the three wisemen, but leave me to die. Can the moon hear me weep in this starry confessional? Hear me out, please.

    Many mistakes I've made, many debts need to be paid
    What I smoked, sniffed or swallowed, all the drama that followed
    The choices I made, the path I have laid
    Deciding to live or die- it all happened under your sky

    She shut her eyes and made a wish, though no shooting star graced the sky with her presence that night. Darkness starts to consume her now, pinching her skin purple and drawing her lips to a quiver. She couldn't wait for her wish any longer. The moon winked at her as she returned inside.

    She was heard.

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    I loved it. Not your usual way of writing but you wrote an excellent piece.

    You wrote something happy!
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    WTF? My poem has been here for more than two days and only one post... from my BOYFRIEND? Come on people! :P

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    This was a good piece. Seemed tobe a very thought out piece with a great deal of emotion. Just from the power of the setting you described and what not. I think this was a moving piece. Keep it up.
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    This was great. I liked it and for some reason I can relate to it. Emotion was heartfelt. A lot of imagery which makes it even better. Good job gurl. Keep it up

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    Originally posted by Cinderella
    WTF? My poem has been here for more than two days and only one post... from my BOYFRIEND? Come on people! :P
    Oh...that was SO a blatant way of letting us all know Bruklor is yer boyfriend...

    ...or not.



    Superbly atmospheric. You stayed away from convention, instead letting go...to float on the 'poetry within' (how 'Yoda' of me, eh? *shudders*..)...

    Have you heard of post-rock? It's to do with minimalism in a way. No singing either. Well, some bands have 'open mic' vocalists. Who read out the poetry in an open mic style. And i can seriously see this (with some touching up here and there) being on one of those tracks. Just before and/or inbetween the centre...(okay, i'm gonna get too technical with this...and that technical stuff is more within...therefore making it hard for anyone to understand..so i'll stop there..).

    Excellent piece. I enjoyed reading it.

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    I'm too secure to have a signature.

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    Um yeah he happens to be, but my point was that Poetic Scriptures is so deserted that my poems don't get a lot of replies. Come on people, reply! :P

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    ^I know, i wasn't being serious.

    Deserted? Sometimes...you just got to go with it all. It's laid back. Patience is the key.
    I'm too secure to have a signature.

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