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  1. March 3rd, 2004, 01:15 AM #1
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    Reinvent The Wheel

    Reinvent The Wheel


    My very heart is lit, until staring into the dark abyss
    Starts to hit my heart with bricks, cause art is fixed.
    Or at least parts of it, and it is bound not to change
    With plots to stain every canvas with blots of pain..
    The same-exact blots of pain, which nots my brain
    Because things used to be original; used to be new
    It used to be true that everyone spews the free juice
    Of creativity; it used to be proof of our progression..
    Now I just see our regression to sub-par perfection
    Of meaningless repetition of what came before us
    We; carbon copies of our idles, so fans will adore us
    Never mind that it bores us to constantly pore stuff
    That has been done, in attempt to get our repore up...
    It...The Fixation on idealism has made rap too scary
    It is what makes Freeman say “work on vocabulary!”
    It’s what makes people say “you need more wordplay”
    It makes’em only see rhymes; not what the words say
    It’s why everyone writes the same and nothing’s new
    It’s why everything you write is them and nothing’s you...
    Well I refuse to fit into someone’s vision, cause I want to write a line this long without someone bitching...
    I want to not care about structure, and be the violent rupture that causes change...
    The huge rupture that causes brains to pause the frame
    And be able to recognize that we are not all the same
    So fuck your vocab, rhyme scheme and tired concepts
    Fuck your small, centered font and lines out of context
    Fuck your legends forum & your disrespect to non-vets
    Realize, anarchy and individuality is what my Intent is
    ......This is 100 percent truth from my pen as I spit this
    And I know...
    You think your wheel is perfect, but watch me reinvent it


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...44#post1232644
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117555
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...58#post1232658
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...67#post1232667
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  2. March 3rd, 2004, 07:30 AM #2
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  3. March 3rd, 2004, 09:15 AM #3
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    I like - you came through very strong. Flow was on point - saw a good number of multi's. Vocab was good. Concept was obviously from the heart. I disagree with some of your points but you presented them well. Very nice work - hit my Lamentations if you get a chance.

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  4. March 3rd, 2004, 01:35 PM #4
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    This was nice... flow'd quite nicely in ma head, I felt this whole piece, tha vocab came nicely in many places in this spit... tha structure was real hott too, you didn't fall off once... 8/10

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  5. March 3rd, 2004, 01:57 PM #5
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    Liked the flow, love to read these pieces, you're all a great help to let me figure out what this all about...hope i'll learn quick and be able to write things like this coz i really liked thise one!
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  6. March 3rd, 2004, 04:15 PM #6
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    yeah, like was said, this pretty much excelled. I like the concept, and the ideas you incorperated were great. Structure was well combined and it flowed quite easily..
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  7. March 3rd, 2004, 04:30 PM #7
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    Thanks for the replies.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...84#post1233884
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117549
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117847
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117862
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  8. March 3rd, 2004, 10:09 PM #8
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  9. March 3rd, 2004, 10:58 PM #9
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    Nice flow. Vocab was there, and i liked the topic. Something i think everyone could relate to. Real Nice. Keep spittin.

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  10. March 3rd, 2004, 11:11 PM #10
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    Nice spit it had some strong meta4s and mutis homie i enjoyed it

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  11. March 4th, 2004, 06:48 AM #11
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  12. March 4th, 2004, 08:08 AM #12
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    liked this piece alot.......
    words used were grrreat, vocab was spot on. Flow...erm, goood..
    Not much to say really, nice piece
    Boom tick its Brix!

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  13. March 4th, 2004, 04:58 PM #13
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    Nice piece.
    Not amazing but it did show potential to be. Your multis
    showed good balance here w/ not an over use or under
    use. The subject came quite strong altho your imagery cudda
    been better. But it wasn't over lacking but detail
    was just short. Your vocab' was also good. Word usage was
    picked very well to express ya thoughts.
    I was impressed by ya flow here. Ver adequate and rolled
    nicely.
    Props all around.
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  14. March 4th, 2004, 04:59 PM #14
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    Cool piece man ..
    .. the topic ive seen approached before, but you put your own mark on it with this. It was actually a decent read, the flow and multi's / internals etc came off nice with this - and without ruining your content. Reminded me of my old style very much in SS months ago .. you've got a lot of potential here if all of your stuffs at this standard - my main advice would be - DITCH THAT EVEN BAR STYLE. Seriously, thats advice given to me a while ago and it is SO true - all the even bars does for you is makes the piece LOOK nicely presented, the drawback is - it can take away from your content because you sacrifice the piece's depth for how the piece looks. And id rather you wrote something dope with varying bar lengths than something decent with even bar lengths, if you get what i mean? Just write it how it comes naturally, dont care for even lines in your pieces and you will be a fairly good writer given time. You've a lot of potential there man.


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  15. March 4th, 2004, 06:57 PM #15
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    ^Thanks, I'll put the advice to use...

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...51#post1236751
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