dopeeeeeee. all I gotta say. Real nice use of this concept.
Enjoyed reading. Vocabulary was good too.
I think we can all agree, the best part of this is the way that you expressed yourself using your words. Very deep...and I'm guessing that this is a topic that u've actually taken the time to think out...and then just put something raw on paper.
Very good please. Only thing I must take note of is your flow...Your bars have too many syllables man...If you try and spit that outloud...unless your twista or sumthin...Your not gonna hit those.
A secret i've learned in rap...try to hit 12-14 syllables every line you make. no matter how bad the line is, people will think it's hot just because of that lol.
Keep your head up. good drop.