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    We all have dreams.. Formula Mc Daillestrebel Lyric and Diverged

    [DaIllestRebel]
    We all have dreams, but not all of us have the determination to fullfil...
    Some of us have the skill, but put no work, they stand still, with no will...
    If I told people my dream was to rap, they'd think I'm being facetious...
    I'm just a fetus struggling to compete, noone would ever believe this...
    We all have dreams, but if ur unsure, does it matter if you have visions?..
    Every time I think I have fate beat, I wind up making the wrong decision...
    i could want to make it to the Olympics, I would train long and hard for 2 years...
    But suddenly in 2 seconds, an injury, my soul is left with own puddle of tears...
    I wanna dream and succeed, but like computer paper I can easily fold...
    I can't change fate, but it's destiny I've always wanted to control...
    The colors grey and black remain I could never find the right bleach...
    I wanna strive for the stars..........but the moon isn't even in reach...

    [Formula]
    Dreams of rocking a crowd w/ the nicest sound
    Precise is how I slice through towns w/ a heightened prowl
    Everone in my direction gets a lesson in respect and
    The next man gets to stressing when my pen collects reflections
    She actually loves me, she hugs, yes shit is perfect
    I come to find that my grind is eventually worth it
    Wow, they remember as the greatest visionary
    Vision's so real, they can't dipict um piddling w/ pictionary
    Amazing, the Daily Tribune have me highly touted
    Those looking to be defeating soon, I highly doubt it
    This, just a small list of what I see when I get low
    In my dreams, deep sleep, pleasant when I hit the pillow


    [Lyric]
    Dreams are distant and impossible at times
    They’re wished upon stars and written down on lines
    I dream of a future, a good life and wife
    A home for my kids where I live without strife
    I dream of a promising job, where I rise in the ranks
    And dying from natural causes, without oxygen tanks
    I dream of success in whatever I strive for
    If I set my mind to it, no impossibilities anymore
    I dream of happiness, rappin hits, and amazing feats
    But my dreams have all died, they’re outta my reach
    Cause I dropped outta school, my future’s in doubt
    And that star I wished upon…It just burned out


    [Diverged]
    The insominia all those sleepless nights
    the tossing the turning it doesnt feel right
    controling dreams.. were never to enlight
    complexity reaching goals and other hieghts
    Right? Wrong? questions pouring out of the mind
    the overflowing destiny compelled in a fright
    the light shining through never seemed so bright
    Compressed thoughts in the dreams might
    The strife to conquer but never in real life
    Pain.. feelings, they are condensed so tight
    on print so sprite... through all the spite
    Through the torture through night...
    ... let our minds dream and take flight
    Last edited by Masahiko.; April 2nd, 2004 at 03:26 AM
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    Formula had the best part I think with one exception - your thoughts seemed disjointed - they jumped from one to the next without any real connection it was like:
    My words delete ideas just like mods
    My favorite pastime is to fight dogs

    Rebel had some nice rhymes and ideas - thought there were a few bugs which could be ironed out - nice vocab use

    Lyric and Diverged both came pretty well - you used short lines but still I would've like to see something a little more complex - The tone throughout this all went together pretty well - Diverged verse seem to balloon toward the middle and then fall back down which made a couple of lines flow awkward - overall 7 - pretty nice work - hit my Breathless or SS: Black & White - peace

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    This was an impressive
    from all you Formula verse stood out more creative really nice Rebel had nice vocab....pretty ill Lyric and Diverge missed the complexity level...but it was smooth flow..i liked it....nice collabo yo....keep writing.


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