Pandora's Box v Po'Ethics
Topic- Wrath of God
20 to 30 lines
Due Wednesday
Anyone can vote
Tactixx
Telekinetic
Pandora's Box v Po'Ethics
Topic- Wrath of God
20 to 30 lines
Due Wednesday
Anyone can vote
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Sawp....Checkin in....Verse'll be up by Wednesday....If not sooner..Peace..
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......................The Wrath Of God................
From ancient forgotten lost scrolls this story is told in full
Two titans we all know and their epic battle for total control
The script the bible withholds cause the outcome was unknown
Written in a foreign tongue, so I will translate it on my own
Centuries after His first defeat Lucifer returned to his throne
Hell burned, and the Dark lord began feasting on flesh and bone
His power grown immensely, but still unable to reverse his curse
So long after his banishment Satan once more traversed the earth
Finding weak minds to pervert, spreading lies and rumours abroad
Causing chaos and stating his intentions to be worshipped as god
Our world now flawed,everything his evil touches becomes corrupt
The Gates of Hell appear on earth, engulfed in flames they erupt
Now strong enough, he began to lust for things beyond his reach
All that he did was seen and now the wrath of God was unleashed....
The clouds divide as thunder and blinding lights split the skies
Countless cries from the devils minions as they avert their eyes
From the lights emerged Knights mounted upon white winged steeds
Followed by a robed figure, who strode through the air with ease
The master of stars and seas,Gods army was now displayed in full
Arrayed in white and gold their horses halt with precise control
The two armies battled below as the arch-rival's took to the sky
many times the earth shook and fifteen days and nights passed by
Unable to die, Satan was viciously defeated and bound In chains
left to endure a life's imprisonment in complete misery and pain
A script written long ago, by the devil himself inside his cage
Till the end of days nothing will compare to Gods wrath and rage
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[center]Wrath of God
Thunder viciously crashes the twilight sky on Earth
Acid rain seems wickedly trickling with liquid hurt
Megahertz of voltage flicker much sicker than ever
Clouds outline a face showing grace to the weather
Now fully together it’s the biblical only holy divine
Defined himself with speech about his lonely design
Stating its time for mankind to be judged as foretold
Those that sold their soul will now behold my anger
As he cast down fire an led man astray like strangers
The depths of hells fire transpired danger and disease
Mans pleads go unheard with a word the ocean bleeds
Americans to the Japanese all seized in a twist of fate
Then suddenly a great tectonic plate shifted its power
Its off the rector scale, California nailed and devoured
Like the twin towers it falls now sinners cower afraid
Decades of work decade, loss weighed in the trillions
Not to mention the indention to the resident civilians
Millions more hide as God’s hand sweeps to slaughter
Hitting harder than a comet ten miles wide in the water
Monster waves shave the landscape raping its way east
While the beast of all tornados make a feast of the west
On a collision course of impact on their apocalyptic fest
At best an eyebrow away now, reality seemed distorted
Trapped in the eye awaiting demise like a baby aborted
The entire supply of nukes transported in with the path
The crash that now occurs is just a blur an bursting fast
The blast from the nukes hit so hard it carves the moon
A mushroom cloud blooms blocking the looming facade
Of Earths greatest punishment handed the wrath of God
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Tactixx that was really good imagery... i enjoyed reading your verse.. the rhyming words seemed to flow out your cerebral cortex almost effortlessly. an admirable verse i must say. Creative piece! Story was pretty good but kinda lacked climax in a way . . . none the less a good read..Telekinetic you put together a pretty good verse.. good diction ... pretty creative... not as good imagery as tactix had... pretty strange rhyme structure at times but it was original.... you had one sketchky line .. " Decades of work decade " I believe you meant decayed... which was kinda good wordplay but nothing great... a good verse but i think tactixx took this one with his imaginative imagery.
Good topical battle.
Props 2 Both
Hit up my battles.. the one against 7curse is a topical
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id say tactixx pulled this off...
liked his imagination and shit in this...
nice presentation...nice flow...
overall u came good and shit...
tele man u came nice too...
but i think you could of came harder...
well i mean u could of been more in depth..
wit shit...u could of steped it up a lil more...
like i felt tactixx stayed on topic better...
he just gave more...more kerizma...
tele u stayed on topic too...but...
at times u did fall off just a lil...
i felt tact caught the audience better...
well he caught me...so thats thats...
tele u didnt really get a hold of the reader...
but this was a good battle..it was kinda close...
but imma vote for tactixx on this one...
vote/tactixx...
Need some more votes....
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This was an awesome topical battle and a good topic also. Both crews should be proud.
Imagery: I'm gonna give this one to Tactixx. he had some go0od imagery in there. I especially like lines 13-14. Thise were my favorites. You had some good imagery in there that helped the verse and the flow out. Tele had some good ones too. But tactixx just had more throughout the verse.
Flow: This goes to Telekinetic. I felt the flow was the best thing in your verse. It stayed constant throughtout and was really easy to read. Tactixx had an ok flow and it made the verse good. But it stioopped at times.
Likeness: I liked Tactixx's verse better. I thought the imagery was very good and i liked what he did with the verse. It made me think more but tele's was also good. Again this was a very good topcial battle...
V/Tactixx
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Uppin.....#5...Last one, Come on, lets get some more votes...
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nice bout here... looking at the topic i dintnt think i would find either verse interesting, cos ive seen this sorta topic done a few times, but both came decent... tactixx, i felt your intro set your verses up nicely, sorta made me wantto read on, also you progressed well thru your first verse, and continued nicely into the second, the topic was clear all the way thru, and your flow was nice, with smooth transitiions running...
tele, your verse was also good, some nice imagery in there, i thought your wee goin in the same direction as tactixx, but then it sorta changed, some nice similies in there, i liked that, and agin your transitions were quite smooth,.... all in all a close battle to jdge, but im going to go for tactixx, simply because his story seemed to unfold better.....
...props to both... v/tactixx
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