3-6Neilson vs. MoS iLL

[3-6Neilson]

10 lines, lets get it on

[MoS iLL]

Okay okay.......

Aiyo...

They call me MoS iLL and they do it for reasons
It's cause i'm hot year round and you go by seasons
You think you can battle me 1st and collect a win
You just gone get beat and added to my collection
Note the direction, when I ground you on your back wit your feet up
No need to duck you'll get stuck behind like fat kids tryn'a keep up
Head the script chump, you got served the ass beatin you been needin
I beat this pussies teeth in so deep tampons can't even stop the bleedin

I'm out

[3-6Neilson]

You want a competition like american idol/
but you too bridal, nothin but practice like a rap recital/
Go hed crown me the king, kiss my ring get down on a knee/
Mos-ill embarass your lines harshly, treaten em like an iraqi detainee/
my lyrics "R" rated, so sharp they serated/
become a prisoner of war and become decapitated/
Im a kamikaze with da pound, goin out spittin rounds/
call you a clown-a-kaze, goin out dying a clown/
the type real thugs leave in the lost and unfound/

Hollatchu

[MoS iLL]

need some voters please............................................
thanks..................................

[Aargh Kelly]

mos ill
overall good verse you had a good closer
you had some stretched lines makin your flow off
structure could have been better
your wordplay was aight
work on your vocab
punches were ok
use more personals

3-6 neilson

punches were really weak work on that
work on your vocab and wordplay
your flows ok your structure was aight had some stretched lines too
elevate

vote?mos ill for harder punches

hit my battles in my sig
ill poll vote when i get enough posts

[Karl Merks]

Opener: Mos Ill -Both were pretty weak, but Mos's definitly flowed better and seemed to be the harder punch of the two. Neilson did have some internal rhyming going on, but it wasn't effective.

In Between: Neilson - Both of you had some filler lines, but Neilson had the best punch. (Iraqi detainee.) Again, there wasn't much here.

Closer: Mos Ill - He had the better punch out of the both of you.

Overall: Mos Ill - It was close, but in the end Mos wins. Although, I think both of you need to try a bit harder next time.

Please take the time to vote on this.

[And Death]

MoS iLL - Your structure started out fine but after your 4th line you lost it. You need to keep all your lines even or at least consistent. Your flow was okay until you switched from short to long lines, this threw it off. You didn't have any personals which are important in a battle. If you don't use them your verse won't have as much direct impact on your opponent. Your punches need a lot of work. They were played and your delivery of them was weak.

3-6Neilson - Your structure was alright but try to even your lines out better and get rid of all the /'s. Your flow was good but would of been better if you kept a similar syllable count from one line to the next. You didn't have any personals either, so the same thing I told MoS iLL goes for you as well. Your punches weren't very good. They were played and your wording took away from their overall impact.

Vote - MoS iLL for structure, flow and punches.

[3-6Neilson]

not my best work but anyway uppin for votes.............

[MoS iLL]

lets vote this out of the way.........

thanks,
MoS

[dreamer]

Punches: go to Mos iLL his punches seemed more direct and hit harder 3-6 had some punches that was alright but i feel they just wasnt that direct.

Vocab: goes to 3-6 he had the better of the vocab, it seems he took time to think about his spit, Mos ill had basic vocab

Structure: Mos ill got this, his structure was fairly simple but easier to understand
3-6 was all ova the place at some points

Flow: Mos Ill got flow his syllables count seemed about right and 3-6 seemed to force words sometimes

My vote goes to Mos ill both elevate though

[3-6Neilson]

first battle, rusty, i lost so can someone vote and get this off so i can battle more peeps, also check out my threads, Thanks

[Allevyate]

ok im gunna vote on this one PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133926
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133962
Mos Ill
They call me MoS iLL and they do it for reasons
It's cause i'm hot year round and you go by seasons
Eh, ok decent, flow is good but not great punch 5/10

You think you can battle me 1st and collect a win
You just gone get beat and added to my collection
Once again, good flow, generic line 5/10

Note the direction, when I ground you on your back wit your feet up
No need to duck you'll get stuck behind like fat kids tryn'a keep up
Liked the second line, kinda funny 7/10

Head the script chump, you got served the ass beatin you been needin
I beat this pussies teeth in so deep tampons can't even stop the bleedin
I don't like the use of you got served, gettin really played, tampons meta was decent 5/10
Overall 22/40 I liked your flow, but u need to work on your vocab and originality, also attack him personally, that was pretty generic, decent tho

3-6Neilson
You want a competition like american idol/
but you too bridal, nothin but practice like a rap recital/
Choppy line, not that creative 4/10

Go hed crown me the king, kiss my ring get down on a knee/
Mos-ill embarass your lines harshly, treaten em like an iraqi detainee/
Best line, iraqi detainee thing original 7/10

my lyrics "R" rated, so sharp they serated/
become a prisoner of war and become decapitated/
You got like 4 concepts here goin at once 3/10

Im a kamikaze with da pound, goin out spittin rounds/
call you a clown-a-kaze, goin out dying a clown/
the type real thugs leave in the lost and unfound/
Nah i didnt like the clown a kaze thing 3/10

Overall 17/40 You had some originality in there which i liked, but your flow wasnt great and your vocab could have been better, also u didnt exactly go after him personally either, no hate good effort keep elevatin

V/Mos Ill

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