Common Senses

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Common Senses

loudly subtle
as her innocent eyes devilishly drew me
proudly humble
as my gaze avoided her shrewdly
with eyes of desire's most fervent fire
instinct took hold
lies I told of indifference acquired
began to then fold
obvious secret
she acknowledged with ignorance
confident mistress
controlling my resistance
with heart of love's deepest emotion
I deny reply to lust
for what good is my love
If I break our trust

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=140603

[.Element.]

It seems like you just stopped you left me wanting more I guess. Your vocab was nice on this one you did a good job explaining yourself.

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yea I did kind of just stop, it was a brief moment of temptation you know

thanks

[exprtsharpshootr]

i liked it, again like element said vocab was good, it was short to the point, again good explination, i liked the rhyme shceme and i thought the flow was exelent

[kaotic~theory]

yup
it was complex,vocab was good,and the emotion and imagery was most definitely there,althoug it woulda been better if u woulda wrote more,but this was a decent poem
good job

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