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    Holy War

    HOLY WAR
    Written By Timeless

    Quiet lingers all about today,
    As silence seems to overpower thought.
    Is sanity another shade of gray?
    This isolation really what I've sought?
    I look to see a deeper shade of blue,
    Though not a plane today dares touch the sky;
    And the news may hold fascination for you,
    But the horror of this day will never die.

    So sit and smile, well hid in you caverns,
    Today watching Babylon's towers fall;
    Though human life holds not to you concerns,
    In the forcing of your beliefs on all...
    Forever hence, the banners shall fly true;
    That all may know the furor of a flag,
    Raising once more the Old Red White and Blue,
    From Pendleton, all the way to Ft. Bragg.

    Still, History might hold some clues for you,
    (With surety all oppression pervades),
    Who thrust your will on others as All True,
    Having not learned a thing from the Crusades.
    The check's in the mail, open if you dare;
    Self-righteousness seen both here and abroad.
    How is it that you draw without a care
    The vanity to think you speak for God?

    A million deities, all overhead,
    And every other man condemned to hell;
    How many must we toss unto our dead,
    Till we finally bring to light the infidel?
    And what is it we gain when all seems lost?
    Humanity, itself, writhing in the cause;
    But chance to serve some Holy Holocaust
    Through the immorality of mortal laws.

    Today five-thousand men take up your cross,
    To bring that which you cherish more than pride;
    The grief and toil we suffer at their loss --
    Not near enough to leave you satisfied?
    Such obstinacy, inherent at birth,
    Might serve to name a madman conqueror.
    But I'll speak my two cents for what it's worth;
    Mankind will never fight a "Holy War."

    A price paid time again throughout the years,
    Inflicting on others values we exalt;
    Purchasing new generations of tears,
    The God-given right left to us by default.
    All liberties imbued, all bread unleaven,
    Is Hope beyond the passion of my pen?
    -- To think one day we all could share a heaven,
    Not paid for with the blood of other men.

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    Another great piece time. You've had a lot of military related pieces as of late. I really like the concept behind this one, a lot of people have suffered much pain from all the happenings of 9/11, and its following events. Rhyme scheme was excellent, vocab was very well done, flow was spotless.

    Quiet lingers all about today,
    As silence seems to overpower thought.
    Is sanity another shade of gray?

    I really felt this line, on many levels. Great opening line, made me want to read it all quickly.


    Still, History might hold some clues for you,
    (With surety all oppression pervades),
    Who thrust your will on others as All True,
    Having not learned a thing from the Crusades.

    More strong lines, very true.


    To think one day we all could share a heaven,
    Not paid for with the blood of other men

    Perfect ending Time. Keep it up.
    Peace

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    hmm, over all i liked it, it flowed so nice, exelent rhymes, vocab was sharp, imagry was kinda blah, emetion was good

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    you need to mind the rules man, Im getting tired of closing your threads...

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