Senseless Vows

[Moniker]

Senseless Vows

I vow
to love you as passionetly as a blind man hearing a reassuring whisper,
warming him from within. Emotions painting pictures with words
Untill I can see your heart clearly.

I vow
to be deaf. So im able to hear the pounding of your heart, as you slowly
mouth the words I long to hear, entering straight into my veins.
Untill my heart hears your soul.

I vow
to lose my sense of smell. So I can feel your essence, and see your scent
lingering in the air, soaking into my skin as I sweat your fragrance.
Untill I breathe the aroma of your tender kiss.

I vow
to be mute. Speechless, in awe of your elegance. My vocals not worthy
to sing of your beauty. Toungue tied by a single glance, my lips were sealed Untill you tought me to speak the word, Love.

I vow
to taste nothing. Savoring all that you are; lost in the sensation of your
sweet skin. Life is our waiter. We continue to feast together
Untill we can dine all night, becoming one.

I vow
to love you numbly; your touch is paralyzing. My back breaks everytime
you massage my spine with feelings of painfull pleasure . Nervous, unmoving
Untill you walk with me, to forever

I vow
to leave my senses. I would undoubtedly give them all up.
For the simple fact of knowing we'll always be together.
Our hearts intertwined in peaceful bliss
Untill we both grow old and senseless.

[E-CleC]

Wasn't the greatest, but not at all bad.
But i feel you tried to get a bit toooooo deeeep.
Keep Em up.

E

[Moniker]

too deep?... hmm...

[SympathiesChorus]

To deep? I dont really think that a peom can be to deep. It's beautiful. Defiantly the best piece I've seen from you. You could feel the emotion in every letter. Man, it was just awesome. hands down. Its one of the best I have EVER read.

[Foreshadow]

Damn the metaphors in this were real nice mind. Although a very promising deep piece that is pretty much all truth I cant bad mouth it at all. You did a nice job on the emotion and keeping it suttle in a very nice way.