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  1. January 2nd, 2005, 09:54 PM #1
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    Is My Heaven Your Hell?

    DuvalRapStar's is in green and mine is in light grey....she's the wannabe rich person and im the rich person thinkin that its Hell.....you could've gathered that from the verses but im gonna tell you anyway DuvalRapStar=green
    GC Mixtape=black

    Duval
    I wanna have the same vocation as Tom Hanks and Carlton Banks/
    the same money stacked to the sky/
    I wanna be in the movies instead of askin why/( I said that because i'm asking why can't I be in the movies.)
    And I don't care about the paparazzi and the press/
    I already know they gonna put stress on my chest/
    See,but I can take them on/
    Long as I believe in god and stay strong/
    Its' gonna be a lot of people wantin to stop it/
    But despise they hate i'm gonna stay on top of it/
    Cuz I an't gonna let no nigga in my way/
    And if they do do/
    Its because they gay!/


    GC Mixtape
    with all this money cars -n- wealth,
    paparazzi run me down no longer stealth,
    to the world stressed its bad health,
    forget depress pills I had weed on the shelf,
    I plead to kill myself, with a gun loaded six,
    roman roulette saved the chicks,
    wild for me screaming my name,
    a young child saw me dreaming my fame,
    it aint the same, as they make it on TV to be,
    famous fortune BET is so fake you see,
    diamonds mounted on my watch,
    body guards counted ten like hopscotch,
    cant go nowhere without signing an auto,
    I love writtin not an actor like Waldo, (some cartoon character)
    my big house is nice but i got no wife,
    crazy lifestyle self denile with a priced life,
    high cost like in Vegas I hit the triple seven,
    camera's wake me up my Hell is your Heaven......


    Collab By Me and Duval, alittle basic on my part, i didnt really try at all, but its got passion haha, but anyway feedback is needed, feedback on her part then on mine, then as a whole.....peace

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  2. January 2nd, 2005, 10:08 PM #2
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    Dope......Ya'll Go Good with each other.....

    Duval's......was dope i like the vocab.....You make a good wanna be rich person...

    Mixtape's.......Dope as well...Good with goin on with the rich person

    Keep it up.....Dope
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  3. January 2nd, 2005, 10:37 PM #3
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    PBK: Takin Me to Vets Status..."The Serpents Posion"

    Twixn & Socrates: Clearing the bush Collab

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  4. January 3rd, 2005, 08:57 AM #4
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    this was aight nothing too good the flow in both verses was average the structure was good overall an average piece.

    reply to my last post.
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=163673
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  5. January 3rd, 2005, 06:36 PM #5
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    yo thanks for the feedback keep it comin
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  6. January 3rd, 2005, 08:48 PM #6
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    come on feedback needed...

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  7. January 4th, 2005, 01:10 PM #7
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    come on people need of feedback....come on....

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  8. January 4th, 2005, 09:05 PM #8
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    ch..ch....check this man...need some feedback come on people, stop sleeping on me....

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  9. January 4th, 2005, 09:35 PM #9
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    LoL I Cannot Believe What War Child Said LoL

    **Just Checked His ''Last Post''**

    Quarter Of This ''Average'' Piece Pisses All Over Your ''Last Post'' Lmao
    Anyway Enough Of Tha Bitchin

    I Enjoyed Readin This Collab, Duval Your Flow Was A LiL Choppy But To Be Honest It Was StiLL Dope, Yah Verse Was Tightish LoL (Did You Keystyle It?)

    Mixtape Your Verse Flowed Nicely Man, Vocab Was Aight A LiL Basic But Yah Don't Have To Use Complexities All The Time Like You Said.

    Overall This Collab Was Dope And Good To Read.

    **Thinks We Should All Hook Up For A Collab**

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  10. January 4th, 2005, 09:41 PM #10
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    you compliments each other style well the flow was choppy buit that can make a verse better on ausdio giving it more character i liked th idea and collab and really cant complain to it this was hot from both
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  11. January 4th, 2005, 09:41 PM #11
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    you compliments each other style well the flow was choppy buit that can make a verse better on ausdio giving it more character i liked th idea and collab and really cant complain to it this was hot from both
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  12. January 5th, 2005, 02:45 PM #12
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    You two were alright,
    I think duvall needs to up the vocabulary some. I think it would sound a little better.

    I like the second verse tho
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  13. January 5th, 2005, 05:50 PM #13
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  14. January 5th, 2005, 06:05 PM #14
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    well, neither verse was outstanding, i didn't really see any lines that caught my eye. the vocab was really simple, but the flow and the structure was on point. however, i really felt the piece because of the way the two views off set eachother. you compliment eachother well, and it was a good topic. elevate, and keep posting
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  15. January 6th, 2005, 09:22 PM #15
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    thanks for the feedback people, keep it coming though...

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