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this should be good -
16 ?
Originally Posted by Feeble Minded
Correction..
this WILL be good -
16 is good
nevermind, make it 12. -feeble
look at the trash he's got in store, he'll retire before me -
write not only managed wack shit, he went as far as to hire employees
am i clear enough? your the type of black man to start jive,
just to understand your the only DM member without an archive
you made your return & already acting like this mans tough
im like a cashier..
bitch you'll get receipted, and won't be able to stand up
you said u had the advantage, kept believing you should
thus announced your a rival... when i hoped u were leaving for good
since you got the title, your verses draw an impression
& if time is money.. then write's about to cause a depression
plus composing a coherent sentence doesnt fit his writtens
and as far as english grammer.. you're just Subject to criticism
lol kinda saw the Archive punch coming...
gotta stop at ten...no big deal feebie
dam feebs...
ya rep has went down...u believe you'll get the best of me now?
ya ship has sailed.. and its obvious the crew just left him to drown
when it comes to me...
he hates the rival...last season knew he'd just take the title
well, not only did he fail...the bitch didnt even make the finals
so bring goloshes and raincoats, to try help weather the bleeding
his verse was a joke
he'll say he save good punches for the regular season
i just come in, kick ass and leave, i love watching this bitch quiver
and u aint a real man, i've seen bigger balls on stick figures
league went down...DM split, u think i'd call this dude a friend
when the only thing he managed lately, is how to fucking lose again
write wins..
sub par verse from feeble this week..
write had better punches, better personals
feeble had some food lines but some real predictable shit,
and gay wordplay. clever, but not effective in this battle..
vote write
GotDope?
Feeble Minded-
look at the trash he's got in store, he'll retire before me -
write not only managed wack shit, he went as far as to hire employees
Okay, this was a pretty good opener.. simple but humorous wordplay.
am i clear enough? your the type of black man to start jive,
just to understand your the only DM member without an archive
I think this set-up could have been better.. the personal was alright though.
you made your return & already acting like this mans tough
im like a cashier..
bitch you'll get receipted, and won't be able to stand up
I get it.. but nah, wasn't feeling this bar too much..
you said u had the advantage, kept believing you should
thus announced your a rival... when i hoped u were leaving for good
This was subpar for you Feeble.. nothing witty in it.. just seemed more like a statement as opposed to a punch towards him...
since you got the title, your verses draw an impression
& if time is money.. then write's about to cause a depression
Lol, this was humorous.. but not a hard hitting punch in my opinion.
plus composing a coherent sentence doesnt fit his writtens
and as far as english grammer.. you're just Subject to criticism
Okay, this wasn't complex wordplay, but it was a good punch.. not sure if it's true.. but I'll assume it is because I haven't seen Feeble drop fake personals.. decent closer.
Your verse was subpar for what you normally come with Feeble. You didn't have anything that stook out in my mind as being particularly great or hard hitting. I liked your opener the best.. and your closer the second best... I don't think you tried your hardest because it's preseason.. but overall, bit below average from you.
Mr W.Rite-
dam feebs...
ya rep has went down...u believe you'll get the best of me now?
ya ship has sailed.. and its obvious the crew just left him to drown
Eh, could have been worded better to make it harder hitting. Not feeling this bar too much.
when it comes to me...
he hates the rival...last season knew he'd just take the title
well, not only did he fail...the bitch didnt even make the finals
Alright, not much creativity.. but I was feeling this personal.. nice punch.
so bring goloshes and raincoats, to try help weather the bleeding
his verse was a joke
he'll say he save good punches for the regular season
Lol, this made me chuckle here... pretty good punch again.
i just come in, kick ass and leave, i love watching this bitch quiver
and u aint a real man, i've seen bigger balls on stick figures
Ha, never seen this concept before.. made me laugh.. I liked it..nice.
league went down...DM split, u think i'd call this dude a friend
when the only thing he managed lately, is how to fucking lose again
Meh, a manage line like Feeble's opener... his was wittier.. yours was harder hitting. Solid closer.
Your verse was pretty good.. I've seen you come a lot better too, but it is preseason so I know you didn't try your hardest. You came pretty consistent with your punches.. only bar I really wasn't feeling was your opener.. other than that, pretty solid verse.. stylistically speaking.
As you can see from my breakdown, I have W.Rite taking this one because I felt he came more consistent with his punches and had harder hitting personals as well.. this was a pretty good battle, but a bit disappointing.. it is preseason though, so I'll let it slide...
v/ Mr W.Rite
Been a real one.
yeh man
dissapointed like a mahfucka.. but still a good match up i'd say
feeble had his normal nice wordplay but ain't come as sweet as he normally do wit it, was a bit simple this time man, a couple personals, but none that actually stood out but tha archive one
write, came with some nice personals that actually stung feebs i'd say, and some witty punches like the stick figure, that was madd funny.. not much wordplay but your personals got the win for u man
v/ write
look at the trash he's got in store, he'll retire before me -
write not only managed wack shit, he went as far as to hire employees
- pretty funny , favorite bar
so bring goloshes and raincoats, to try help weather the bleeding
his verse was a joke
he'll say he save good punches for the regular season
- favorite , best of the battle i felt
liked more from write , basically .
look at the trash he's got in store, he'll retire before me -
write not only managed wack shit, he went as far as to hire employees
am i clear enough? your the type of black man to start jive,
just to understand your the only DM member without an archive
you said u had the advantage, kept believing you should
thus announced your a rival... when i hoped u were leaving for good
vs
ya rep has went down...u believe you'll get the best of me now?
ya ship has sailed.. and its obvious the crew just left him to drown
when it comes to me...
he hates the rival...last season knew he'd just take the title
well, not only did he fail...the bitch didnt even make the finals
so bring goloshes and raincoats, to try help weather the bleeding
his verse was a joke
he'll say he save good punches for the regular season
league went down...DM split, u think i'd call this dude a friend
when the only thing he managed lately, is how to fucking lose again
I like this battle, it was pretty good, anyhow Rite wins for 1 more quotable than feebs, feebs i like ur a rival wordplay, i thought that was really dope, but i wasnt feelin like 2 of ur bars, the verse kinda fell of near the end, while rite was consistent, and had more personals, 1 Go vote in the Jr. Champ match please
Artificial Intelligence
Bliggity Ah.
This actually Deserves attention in a vote.
look at the trash he's got in store, he'll retire before me -
write not only managed wack shit, he went as far as to hire employees
you said u had the advantage, kept believing you should
thus announced your a rival... when i hoped u were leaving for good
Feebs came half-assed to me. I've seen him word wittier punches and it didnt go through here. It seems liek he didnt put the effort he should have to win.
so bring goloshes and raincoats, to try help weather the bleeding
his verse was a joke
he'll say he save good punches for the regular season
i just come in, kick ass and leave, i love watching this bitch quiver
and u aint a real man, i've seen bigger balls on stick figures
league went down...DM split, u think i'd call this dude a friend
when the only thing he managed lately, is how to fucking lose again
W.rite came decent. This could've been a much better battle. Much, But it doesnt seem as if they put in the effort to make it such.
V/W.rite
Always Impervious an Axis Power.
Supermod Me.
look at the trash he's got in store, he'll retire before me -
write not only managed wack shit, he went as far as to hire employees
you said u had the advantage, kept believing you should
thus announced your a rival... when i hoped u were leaving for good
since you got the title, your verses draw an impression
& if time is money.. then write's about to cause a depression
ya rep has went down...u believe you'll get the best of me now?
ya ship has sailed.. and its obvious the crew just left him to drown
when it comes to me...
he hates the rival...last season knew he'd just take the title
well, not only did he fail...the bitch didnt even make the finals
i just come in, kick ass and leave, i love watching this bitch quiver
and u aint a real man, i've seen bigger balls on stick figures
league went down...DM split, u think i'd call this dude a friend
when the only thing he managed lately, is how to fucking lose again
Yeah...real close, but one more quotable bar from Write...
Great work, cats.
Vote: Write
look at the trash he's got in store, he'll retire before me -
write not only managed wack shit, he went as far as to hire employees
am i clear enough? your the type of black man to start jive,
just to understand your the only DM member without an archive
you said u had the advantage, kept believing you should
thus announced your a rival... when i hoped u were leaving for good
vs.
dam feebs...
ya rep has went down...u believe you'll get the best of me now?
ya ship has sailed.. and its obvious the crew just left him to drown
when it comes to me...
he hates the rival...last season knew he'd just take the title
well, not only did he fail...the bitch didnt even make the finals
i just come in, kick ass and leave, i love watching this bitch quiver
and u aint a real man, i've seen bigger balls on stick figures
it's 3 vs 3... but the bar i highlighted, IMO, was the best of this battle - made me laugh.
Therefore,
v/ Mr. W.rite
am i clear enough? your the type of black man to start jive,
just to understand your the only DM member without an archive
you said u had the advantage, kept believing you should
thus announced your a rival... when i hoped u were leaving for good
against
when it comes to me...
he hates the rival...last season knew he'd just take the title
well, not only did he fail...the bitch didnt even make the finals
so bring goloshes and raincoats, to try help weather the bleeding
his verse was a joke
he'll say he save good punches for the regular season
league went down...DM split, u think i'd call this dude a friend
when the only thing he managed lately, is how to fucking lose again
this was one of the bettter battles in LLL.... but i gotta go wit Write... he had few wittier lines and made me chuckle a bit..... good battle ... no hate.... stay up both
vote - Mr Write
My Drift, the mixtape coming this summer be on the look out shit is HOT
Feeble- I liked your opener, it made me laugh, your 4th bar was good. I think those are the quoteables from your verse, the rest of the verse I'd seen the concepts before or I just wasn't feeling it.
Mr W Rite- Nice verse, your best punches weren't as good as feebles best, but you came more consistent with your verse in my opinion. Good match up.
v/ Mr W Rite
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