father, is that you?

[monkeypoet]

your cynical laugh rings in my ears
only to be out-weighed by the number of my tears
i can feel your damp breath on my collar bone
im your fucking daugher, leave me alone
this isnt the father i once had
he was loving, caring, always glad
he never critized the person of me
he encouraged my dreams of what i wanted to be
but he changed immensly for the worse
now all he does is drink and curse
i miss you daddy, please come back
please tell me this inst your grip on my neck, never to be slack
but the shortage of breath takes me to a place of utter totality
its an escape from you, an escape from reality
the person who was my father doesnt live here any more
because my father wouldnt call me bitch and whore
and even as he beats me ill always pray
that he'll come to love me again some day

~this was a simple peice, but i wrote it to get my feelings out, not for form or ne thing... tell me what u think~

[danja]

feelin it deepness is there, if the topic is truthal im sorry, poetry is such a good way to express your feelings keep at it.

[monkeypoet]

thanks for the reply danja... its mostly tru... some of it isnt, some of it is tru... as u said, poetry is an outlet... and its one of the only things that keeps me alive... love to ya

[.........sIn.........]

sup MonkeyPoet..??

yo i was feelin dis as i always am feelin ur posts....

and dis was deep and enjoyable to read...much repsect....

I was feelin ya topic of write....it came from da heart.....
ya vocab and flow was perfect along wit content....

A very enjoyable read....Much respect.........


wUn

[miz kitta]

hey....this was a nice peice deep and full of feelings.... i felt it all and could relate in sum aspects... remember if it gets to hard cum to live w/ me.. im here~love ya much~peace

[monkeypoet]

sin: thanks for the reply im glad u liked it... you have always checked my stuff and i really apreecate u takin the time to read them... love to ya

miz kitta: yea.. it was a short peice, but i was so pissed at him... i will take u up on that offer if that basterd starts up again..love to ya