U.S. House

[chuck taylor.]

not bad bro, im from nz so free about that doesnt really come to me, but i liked it aye, simple mayb be more creative
chur 6/10

[pakipimp]

This was pretty good drop. the flow was kinda weird. The strucutre was good. But i liked the message that u sent. overall it was good.

[CrazyCarl]

uppin

[PhillyKat]

yo crazy ur a beast man keep it up ill holla at u latta

[dtwisted]

Mentioning Bush has become a trademark for me
talkin bout how we the mark for tradin overseas
cheap Chinese labor destroyin our economy
this next metaphor isn't as blunt
its a little hidden like the osama hunt
try thinking of the US as a house
and we only get what the gov't gives out
picture the house having termites
slowly over time damage appears with their bites
these cracks are made throughout the home
now terrorists are where the buffaloes used to roam
the gov't tryin reword land of the free
....................to the land of we'll see

Bush should be the house's owner
instead he thinks of war and gets a boner
since he changed the country without feeling
he should look above the ceiling
up there is the Bill of Rights
out the window, views of historical sights
when we were the apple of the world's eye
instead of now, bein greedy, obsessed with I
so how did he become person of the year
when so many mothers shed a tear
for the loss of their sons
because of low oil funds
so in '08 a new Republican runs
and there's more of the same...taxes by the tons

i like this peice beause it is how i see things in a political state i like the rhyme shceme and it had a little lack of structer but only by the readers eye but other then that it was a decent peice so keep droppin so that i can better understand you flow of rhymes aight peace hommie

[MrGolden79]

This was aight, it had rythm at times, but at others it felt off. There were pieces that were ill and pieces that were terribly wack. But, thats just my opinion cuz I think every rapper has there own style and you shouldn't hate because it doesn't sound like yours. Keep rapping.

[Raid-R]

it was ok, no like good beat down punches
u said crap like he gets boners at war
make fun of his laugh or his studdering next time
u did ok but u can improve

[conquistador]

I smell political energy...but the vocabulary of someone who doesn't care what I think. Look man I am not like other Rb members if I read your rhyme and I can hear a beat as i read it because it flows so good, then I like it. If I can read a rhyme and then show it to my friends and they ask me can they use it...then it's good. This rhyme did both...so it's good. Keep dropping lil homie

[Raid-R]

hit mine up since I hit ur up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=170118

[UnlikeNest]

im feelin that

[Genetic Carnage]

Shit was alright, but you could've put more work into it. It was well structured and there was a good flow, but ya bars are uneven man. Work a little bit on evening out the bars by adding and removing some words that don't really get the message out and I'm sure it will sound and look better. Good drop man, keep droppin.

[CKamakazee]

yeah i was feelin that i love when people spit political stuff man juss rearrange some words and throw on a beat and you got you a audio, folk

[WhiteNoise]

thats pretty good bro, just remember to keep spittin that shit and ull get better as time flows

[WhiteNoise]

yea i enjoyed urs strong from begginin to end nice work

[CelticOne]

I'm likin the topic, and I can tell you got the right motives in ya head. Your vocab is decent, the flow seemed a little on and off, usually more on than off, good piece for a starter.

Return the favor on my battle please it's been slept on forever