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    Angel
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    Good Night Old Friend

    Good Night Old Friend

    Watching you lying there looking sound asleep
    I retreat to my knees and start to weep
    We’ve known each other far to long,
    Now you’re gone, this must be wrong

    Writing these words it breaks my heart
    Knowing that were going to be apart
    You were young, wild and free
    Knowing that your gone that’s what’s hurting me

    You always lived your life to the full
    It was never boring, sad or dull

    With these words I say goodbye
    Never letting your spirit die,
    Living on in hearts of others
    The memory of you will be with us all to the end

    I’ll miss you simon
    Good night old friend!

    This poem was written for a very good friend of mine who killed himslef last yr...ive known him since i was 3....so this was the only real was i colud express my feelings...also it was how i saw simon thru my eyes.

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    MythDirection
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    it's great to see you showing some of your work and not just pictures

    this was pretty little poem that could have used maybe a bit more focus on the lines but the you rhymed and got out your emotional baggage so good for you

    later cutie!

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    Nice job on this poem I liked it. It was simple and the imagery was decent. Nice job keep posting.

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    young ryda
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    that is deep very deep it had me thinking of my best friend that i lost n the 3 grade , thanks for bringin back memory's

    -ryda

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