Voice Of Little Reason

[sNoopfox]

Voice of Little Reason


Stars spurt eastward; the empire fortifies,
The wolf clad in wool marches forward and guides.
Impact pastes fear in the hearts of men,
Then Tread the control web to dark descent

“Little pigs little pigs I want some thin’
Give me what you have, or I’ll blow you in”

Pre-planned terror sprinkled first at home,
A guise Cushions to show the path that’s been sown.
Flocks governed towards safe arms that embrace,
True lies awake; the hero who leads is great.

“Little pigs little pigs I’m on my way
Your about to become, my murder buffet”

Propaganda conversed and planned,
United to sperm that fertilized this land.
The babes of youth rally forth to death,
A blanket of Pawns in this game of chess.

“Little pigs little pigs dance like dominos
I did warn you but, this is what you chose”

Birds of prey haunt over the fire lit sky,
Their Death scythes play God as innocents die.
Liberal Duty frauds fake preemption,
A future formed for global dictation.

“Little pigs little pigs I have it now
Who stand in my way, I will bring them down”

[silent j]

yo that good shit man good job

[sNoopfox]

Upping...

[Varentao]

There's a very strong voice in this. Didn't hold back on emotions...yet kept it behind a certain amount of thought. Controlled even, though that's relative.

At times you spilled over into granduer that went over the top and felt kind of cliche. Like Their "Death scythes play God as innocents die" - the 'God' thing can seem over used at times. I'm being picky with that. Cos it was that kind of thing that also made it so good.

Overall it was a very good read. And the way you incorportated the 'wolf'-piggy' thing gave it well executed sub-tone. Pummeling the point even deeper into the reader.

Very good piece. Liked reading it. The ending was good, though felt it could've been better put. More sharply put to make the point more poignant. As i said, very good piece.

[Foreshadow]

This is your IE verse, at first I was like what the hell is he talking about 3 little pigs. But in the stanzas you did a nice job although i did really pick up the message within what you had written because I didnt understand the voice of little reason in your work. Maybe you can take time to explain it to me.

[sNoopfox]

This is your IE verse, at first I was like what the hell is he talking about 3 little pigs. But in the stanzas you did a nice job although i did really pick up the message within what you had written because I didnt understand the voice of little reason in your work. Maybe you can take time to explain it to me.

Ok, (good job on your piece in IE btw)...


Stars spurt eastward; the empire fortifies,
The wolf clad in wool marches forward and guides.
Impact pastes fear in the hearts of men,
Then Tread the control web to dark descent

^Stars I had the image of missiles shooting eastward, upon countries, say Iraq...the wolf in sheeps clothing is Bush who controls by fear.

“Little pigs little pigs I want some thin’
Give me what you have, or I’ll blow you in”

^ This symboliizes bushes Voice. Throughout the piece you don't hear him reasoning much at all. He wants something (oil)

Pre-planned terror sprinkled first at home,
A guise Cushions to show the path that’s been sown.
Flocks governed towards safe arms that embrace,
True lies awake; the hero who leads is great.

^ Its all been planned, sprinkled at home referrs to the twin towers, in that he was actually behind it to implement fear into the nation, blame the east/terrorists. He wants them to back him and embraces them to a sense of security.

“Little pigs little pigs I’m on my way
Your about to become, my murder buffet”

^ Again speaking, he just not reasoning with the fact of so many people dying...murder buffet. He wants what he wants.

Propaganda conversed and planned,
United to sperm that fertilized this land.
The babes of youth rally forth to death,
A blanket of Pawns in this game of chess.

^Propaganda, proposing an alternative motive to go to war with Iraq...claiming liberation of iraq...united to the UK who gave birth the the US.
Soliders march into war like pawns on a chess board, front line troops.

“Little pigs little pigs dance like dominos
I did warn you but, this is what you chose”

^ Again, little reasoning behind his comments.

Birds of prey haunt over the fire lit sky,
Their Death scythes play God as innocents die.
Liberal Duty frauds fake preemption,
A future formed for global dictation.

^Birds of prey I used to symbolise fighter planes bombing over a fire lit sky, death scythes like the grim reaper...playing the role of God.
They claim its a liberal duty to be doing what they're doing and it frauds the pre-emption of taking authority.
Now having invaded, it's made a mark for a rise in global dictation...like a new roman empire.

“Little pigs little pigs I have it now
Who stand in my way, I will bring them down”

^Final comment, he has what he wants, the oil. Whoever stands in his way he will bring them down. A voice of very little reason...

Just thought I'd break all of this down so people knew what it was exactly referring to.

Peace!

[sNoopfox]

Up...

[Dan Dare]

You provided your own breakdown, so I won't go into much depth. This was a Billion times better than your other attempt though. The images weren't quite sharp enough, as it was slightly difficult to decipher just what you were getting at. Nevertheless, the effort was felt, and it was worded fairly well. Nothing was off in the read for me really.

You may be the only member to get a straight-out win this week, as my match is currently tied, & Dubois is losing. You've got a break for a week now. I would really love to see you spend that time productively, by dropping a poem in PS during that time. It will help to keep your rhythm going. Keep dropping.

[The Vortex]

pretty good shyte mayne

first off im like WHAT THE FUCK WIT THE 3 LITTLE PIGS

but i guess it help piece it together and give humour to it

stanzas were bananas wit sultanas vocab a crazy asset

keep droppin those gems goddy

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