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Fucc this, I aint no 2-2 untill we get at leat 3 more votes on our last battle, that shyt wasn't coo.
ch-ch-ch-ch-checkin in...
and quit moanin com and prepare to battle!
LoL, if you say so. I'm droppin real soon so be on the lookout. Best of lucc patna..........
a key...
fuck spittin ill 'piss on u',maybe itll mean 'urine' luck/
this 'jobs' truly 'blown',provin u really do 'suck'/
tha 'truth hurts' kidd,so stock up on them 'pain killers'/
ur dirty like wacko jacko,a 'fake' an a 'chyld' 'thriller'/
like 'pullin faces' in tha 'wind',ya fortunes gonna 'change'/
like an 'afghan sniper',a victories clearly 'out-of-range'/
ill stop u readin 'otha lyrics',and cut out ur 'power source'/
u like a one legged 'marathon runna',tha pain takes its 'course'/
each style sound tha same,u recycle like 'eco friendly'/
ya rhymes 'pleasent',it takes more than average 'sickness' to 'offend me'/
clearly ripped,cormetas more 'fake' than britney 'lip syncs'/
ya styles 'flushed out',everyone knows yaw 'shit stinks'/
i 'tripped' u,and sent u 'head ova feet',a 'flipped' 'flop'/
theres no 'karate kid' but yaw still headin for tha 'chop'/
uppin 4 com 2 drop...
Good shyt. I was finna post ealier, but in case you aint know, it was my birthday August 1st, so I'mma drop friday.
*rubbin hands togetha*
Only 7 bars huh? Well I aint tryna outdo you too much, so I'll shorten mines..........
..........KEYSTYLE..........
Ringside Announcer: comet seems to be disturbed from his last unfortunate loss.
Ringside Announcer2: yea, it seems he was robbed in that one. That was bullshyt, straight bullshyt. There shoulda been more votes.
Ringside Announcer: very true. In fact, I believe the frivolous loss was a wake up call for the young champ. And here he comes to the ring..........
*joggs to ring witta mean azz mug*
*takes off robe n shows off physique*
*shadow boxes*..........
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Tricc, you must be scared out ya 'azz', versus me?, you on some 'shyt'//
Knocc you west out of 'England' to the 'state' of unconsiousness//
Say you venomous, but like garner snakes* you spit wit harmlessness//
I'll rip ya muscles off n hang em to see what ya strength harnesses//
I'm rough like sprayin varnishes, and tough, I'll rip you armless bytch//
Set a flame ya carcuss then piss on it to sway the sparks a bit//
Battlin me? Don't get ahead of ya self, you betta rewind//
Cuz even if it was noon in london, it wouldn't be T* time//
I'mma dogg, you's a puss, I spit frees till there's no fee-line*//
Cuz cats get they 'azz' pushed bacc and 'end up'
'behind'//
Like doggystyle, stop cryin cuz you lost wit ya soggy smiles//
Ya runnin short of blind faith like midgets joggin a foggy mile//
Constantly fuccin this homo, let's see how long this fag lingers//
You spit gay constantly droppin ya own keys* like bad fingers//
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HELPFULL HINTS:
*garner snakes=not venemous at all
*T=TRICCSTA=TEA TIME(in england)
*fee-line=pussy=pussycat
*keys=keystyles
Aye dogg, I matched ya bars cuz I wanted it to be a fair match you feel me. I coulda spit way more, but I don't wanna be a poor sportsman. Good battle homie.
intro was stupid
Knocc you west out of 'England' to the 'state' of unconsiousness//
i found that hillarious...
everything else was sloppy, played, forced or dumb as hell...
and with tricksta i used to post verses like that when i was first starting.. pretty weak battle...
vote - cometa.. he actually had one punch i liked
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yeah,sorry bout tha lack of bars,i juss remembered b4 i went bed last night!
and all i gotta say is..fuck u ridah,hatin bitch,it doesnt make u look 'cool' by dissin our verses
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uppin...
i could care less what it makes me look like.. just giving my honest thoughts.
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*reviews verses*
<<<doesn't see shyt played from eitha verse.
Triccsta don't worry bout this nicca, he's just jealous. And quit postin in here, you makin yaself look stupider.
TRICKSTA::
fuck spittin ill 'piss on u',maybe itll mean 'urine' luck/
this 'jobs' truly 'blown',provin u really do 'suck'/
BLAH AT THIS OPENER,URINE LUCK WORDPLAY WAS WEAK MAN,REWORD IT IT WOULD OF BEEN BETTER,AND THE PUNCH WAS TOO BASIC SIMPLE SHIT,NEXT TIME COME HARDER AT THIS POINT OF THE VERSE,MAKE IT AN APPEALING VERSE
tha 'truth hurts' kidd,so stock up on them 'pain killers'/
ur dirty like wacko jacko,a 'fake' an a 'chyld' 'thriller'/
MAN YOUR KILLING ME WITH THAT WACKO JACKO SHT,I DONT HATE ON PEEPS BUT MAN IM NOT LIKEING THE WAY YOU SPITTING,BUT YOUR SETUP WAS OK,I THOUGHT IF YORU PUNCH LINE WAS BETTER IT WOULD OF MADE THE SETUP STICK OUT MORE,BUT THIS WAS TOO BASIC AGAIN
like 'pullin faces' in tha 'wind',ya fortunes gonna 'change'/
like an 'afghan sniper',a victories clearly 'out-of-range'/
NOT TOO BAD,BUT COULD OF BEEN MORE EFFECTIVE,IF YOU PUT MORE THOUGHT INTO THIS SHIT,BUT SINCE YOU DIDNT NOT EFFECTIVE
ill stop u readin 'otha lyrics',and cut out ur 'power source'/
u like a one legged 'marathon runna',tha pain takes its 'course'/
OK,BUT NOT HARD THOUGH
each style sound tha same,u recycle like 'eco friendly'/
ya rhymes 'pleasent',it takes more than average 'sickness' to 'offend me'/
BLAH AT THIS FILLER TYPE SHIT,NOT LIKEING THIS AT ALL BOO AT YOU
clearly ripped,cormetas more 'fake' than britney 'lip syncs'/
ya styles 'flushed out',everyone knows yaw 'shit stinks'/
AGAIN TOO BASIC AND SIMPLE SHIT
i 'tripped' u,and sent u 'head ova feet',a 'flipped' 'flop'/
theres no 'karate kid' but yaw still headin for tha 'chop'/
OK,BUT NOT LIKEING THE ENDING,NEED TO COME HARD HERE,MAKE THE READER GO WITH YOU FOR THE WIN
COMETAPHORETUNE::
Tricc, you must be scared out ya 'azz', versus me?, you on some 'shyt'//
Knocc you west out of 'England' to the 'state' of unconsiousness//
OK AT THIS,ALSO NOT EFFECTIVE,DIDNT COME REALLY HARD HERE,BUT WAS BETTER THAN TRICKSTAS,NEED TO REMEMBER COME HARD HERE,COME WITH A GOOD SETUP ,PUNCH COMBO
Say you venomous, but like garner snakes* you spit wit harmlessness//
I'll rip ya muscles off n hang em to see what ya strength harnesses//
NOT BAD HERE,I LIKE THE VISUAL,THE SETUP WAS NICE,BUT DIDNT REALLY DO IT FOR ME WITH THE PUNCHLINE,BUT NOT TOO BAD
I'm rough like sprayin varnishes, and tough, I'll rip you armless bytch//
Set a flame ya carcuss then piss on it to sway the sparks a bit//
I WAS FEELING THIS,I LIKE VISUALS LIKE THIS,PROBABLY THE BEST SETUP PUNCH COMBO IN YOUR VERSE,NICE,IT WILL BE IN PUNCHES
Battlin me? Don't get ahead of ya self, you betta rewind//
Cuz even if it was noon in london, it wouldn't be T* time//
OK,GOOD FLIP HERE,A PLAYED CONCEPT BUT AGAIN NOT BAD OF A FLIP,NOT REALLY HARD THOUGH
I'mma dogg, you's a puss, I spit frees till there's no fee-line*//
Cuz cats get they 'azz' pushed bacc and 'end up'
'behind'//
OK
Like doggystyle, stop cryin cuz you lost wit ya soggy smiles//
Ya runnin short of blind faith like midgets joggin a foggy mile//
NOT BAD,NOT FEELING IT,SETUP OK,BUT DIDNT GO WELL WITH THE PUNCH,THATS WHY ITS NOT TOO EFFECTIVE
Constantly fuccin this homo, let's see how long this fag lingers//
You spit gay constantly droppin ya own keys* like bad fingers//
OK AGAIN,NOT TOO HARD OF AN ENDING,BUT ITS COOL
UMM BOTH VERSES LACKED THE HARD HITTING PUNCHES,BUT COME CAME WITH HARDER ONES THAN TRICKSTA DID,TRICKSTA WORK ON YOUR SETUPS AND PUNCHES BE MORE CREATIVE AND WITTY,AND LOSE THE FILLER SHIT,COMETAPHORTUNE,YOU HAVE POTENTIAL BUT YOU NEED TO BE CONSISTANT,YOU NEED TO SETUP YOUR PUNCHES BETTER ALSO,GOOD SHIT TOO BOTH THOUGH
VOTE COMETAPHORTUNE
Coo
Vote= Cometaphoretune
Your verse was thrown together very sloppy and it killd your rhyme scheme.....AS far as metaphors go, the snake part was iight.. So was the throw you out west england part... Metpahors could have been better.. Punchs werent really that hard.. You should up on Vocab and multis to help out your verse..
Tricksta, your rhyme scheme was good.. But it was basic over all, alot of newbie cats who just start to get good use that rhyme scheme, so unless you gunna hit it hella hard, stay away from it.. Punchs werent bad...Coulda been a lil harder, and more than half your verse ive heard just worded other ways...
OnE
IM GIVE DIS BATTLE TO COMETAPHORETUNE...I THOUGHT HIS VERSE WAS JUST HADERS THAN TRICKSTA....I FELT DAT COMETA PUNCHES WAS HARDER IN DIS ONE AND MORE CREATIVE....TRICKKSTA WAS KOO.BUT I WASN'T REALLY FEELIN HIS VERSE AS MUCH I FELT COMETAS....
VOTE=COMETA....
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