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  1. August 3rd, 2005, 02:44 AM #1
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    Heaven vs Hell

    Heaven vs Hell

    Intro
    The Day has finally come.....When all humanity..
    Reakin havoc & people everwhere causin insanity..
    Some may call it the end of the world..But i call it..
    the beginning..The day the world's split..
    And peoples lifes are determined by things they do..
    Whether you end up in heaven or hell it's all up to you..

    Prelimanary
    As the sky turns black..and the .......floor starts to crack..
    Creatures and angels start emerging..for there .......attack..
    Ghost,Goblems..and Devils all armed....... with axes in hand..
    form lines,wishing to kill but,......waiting for satans command..
    ........Then the powerful Angels Appear,With halo's and bows..
    Composing a plain to defeat the devils..right under there nose..
    Then Satan gives the command..and his troops emerge& attack..
    Each One holding Iron..and armor ..that would break ones back..
    The Angels wait for the moment,that satan strikes first,to start war..
    Cus this battle was about to be on of the goriest ..and hardcore..
    As the demons draw there weapons..and draw closer..People stare..
    Hoping that the angels win this battle,and say there ourfather praire...
    Then the demonds strike..and one angel falls..and loses its wings..
    Thats when the battle begins...Just like some lord of the rings..

    The Battle
    Angels pick up your bows,then fire at will..hitting everything in sight..
    Because God aint willing to give up the world,without. having a fight
    Angels start falling..and demons start deminishing..Battles getting rough..
    But creatures...and angels..start coming from everydirection oddly enough..
    More & more Creatures and demons start to fall,Seems like there no end..
    Creatures attack..Angels Defend..Over & over as if...starting alittle trend
    After endless days of fighting ..the war seems.... to not have stopped..
    Creatures Chopped......................&.................... ...Angels Dropped
    The days are getting longer ..the nights never end..who's going to win?!
    .......But then the angels Feel alittle.......charge of light/energy within..
    And god send the key of victory the Archangels...that will seal there fate..
    Golden arrows in there possesion ..doing all they can to protect the gate..
    Then All of a sudden a flash of light apprears and its god himself in the flesh
    Striking All of the demons,and creatures who mean harm to the world to mesh
    Then god snaps his fingures..and everything turns white..& everyone disappears
    Then you see god grinning from ear to ear..
    ....Then god sits and watches the world gets older year after year till we appear


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  2. August 3rd, 2005, 12:15 PM #2
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  3. August 3rd, 2005, 02:39 PM #3
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    Upping again once again for some feedback please
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  4. August 3rd, 2005, 02:46 PM #4
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    eh man dis shit is fucking amazing man
    Nice work, I really mean it
    Makes my stuff look like shit


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  5. August 3rd, 2005, 08:03 PM #5
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  6. August 4th, 2005, 03:51 PM #6
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    Damn man this was a hot ass drop..your feeling and emotions were on point..your structure was okay..coulda been better... but damn i was really feeling this drop..you had some nice imagery going on in your peice.. i loved every bit of it...alittle bit of a long read but it was worth it ..damn man nice drop..keep it up
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  7. August 4th, 2005, 04:38 PM #7
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    Damn I felt like I waz there dogg nice structure and a killa flow
    That shit waz hot but u could of elevated more
    check out mine leave some feed
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...34#post2896834
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  8. August 4th, 2005, 05:23 PM #8
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    another extremely dope drop by you!!!!!!!!
    lol...........the rhymes were exellent
    vocab and flow were really goood
    you have potential to be sumthin BIG
    multies were good, strucutre was also really good
    the style you have is awsome
    topic was interestign and enjoyable to read
    great job, keep it up, and keep droppin
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  9. August 5th, 2005, 02:38 AM #9
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    loved tha imagery...loved how raw and deep the emotion was..i was literaly there..i could see tha gold(heaven)..i could smell tha sulfur(hell)....i loved tha wordplay and tha complexity incorporated with it...your vocab was amzing..but at a straight level..all in all very dope piece...keep droppin tha hottness.~1`


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  10. August 9th, 2005, 07:11 PM #10
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    ^Thankz all of ya'll for the feedback upping for some more
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  11. August 9th, 2005, 11:13 PM #11
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    damn real dope man your improving with your topical skills. the vocabulary was upped a little bit more then your last drop the stucture was pretty good, flow was better i see how your shortening your lines more keep shortening them cuz there still a bit long but when it comes to text i suppose it aint matter, the imagery was very good nice story from you very good drop feelin it.

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  12. August 18th, 2005, 02:14 AM #12
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    ^thankz man upping for some more feedback
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