Three day Thoery:Of The Rising Death

[Visual Chemist]

Day 1: Three day Thoery:Of The Rising Death

First day of the rising Demise,came back the returining death
i tried to remember but in my mind,it was a concerning swept
im following the tracks back as the same as i came i have left
nothen in my memorie,except when i layed a women wepted
i walked i wanted to murder the one,who put me in crucifixion
as i asked what happened,they said im dead and i didnt listen
i had no control over my body,and then i gave others eternal rest
what i have done no turns back,so i left what rats could fest

Day 2: Three day Thoery:Of The Rising Death

as i have just risen from the night,from the unforgettable bed
i have had thoughts in my minds, as i was sleep as i dread
i thought about people lives,i had ended for anothers doings
i thought by releasing my anger,i'd overcome this pursuing
it was something in side of me,that my mind couldnt hesitate
now the killing of another person,was what i have had to face

Day 3: Three day Thoery:Of The Rising Death

Now its trying to come to me,and thier was no real rising death
i had to find out what happened and why i made others slept
it was like the devil was taking over my body and giving this pain
now i was walking the streets going crazy and lives was invein
the time i had pasted was remembering god crying at sea
but the only rising death, i was having to face........was me


i just did this in a battle not to long ago i just wanted to show a little piece i made


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...86#post2923086

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...17#post2923117

[BIOHASARD]

yo nice shit nice flow sturtuiure pretty cool yo go checkout ma crew illtactics u in if u want

[Visual Chemist]

i would but man my crew going for a forum thanx for the feed uppin

[Murderous Venom]

Man that shit wuz tight i liked the flow and structure if it all

Flow wuz great and vocab wuz good i like it a lot
also i liked the topic very creative imaginations wuz good

~Help~
i think u could have used a little more Multis
which would have made this piece better
other than that great piece

keep writing

[Visual Chemist]

thanx for the tips and same uppin

[sILLable]

kinda basic...your rhyme scheme was a bit off...your structure was fine....your wordplay and complexity could have been elevated a little more...you could use a more organized rhyme scheme...other than that this wasnt too bad...pretty basic is all..keep elevatin and droppin.~1~

[Visual Chemist]

thanx for the feed i will elevate more thanx man for the feed i needed tips uppen for feed leave links

[Tha Reason]

it was different but good i liked it :yes: :yes:

[Visual Chemist]

lmao at yes yes thanx for the feed uppin for feed

[McSin]

it was nice, original I liked that.

[Visual Chemist]

thanx for the feed uppin for feed

[Visual Chemist]

uppin thsi shit uppin ths shit