tha Sickness

[...::ExZaKt::...]

ight

im sick-wit-it,spit-this-shit-swift-n-shit-kid/
rediculous,mentally affectin physics with the realistik/
real-twisted sicknin fittin the profile of a ill mc who wears fitteds/
leavin my thoughts imbedded in ya head like hooks used 4 fishin/
metaphysicist,yea im ill,kid keep ya distance/
im tha best,for example i couldve ripped this in an instant/
but i didnt, cuz i wanted to finish/
lyrically u cant see me,like my words were fuckin tinted/
chea u betta listen to the visions im spittin/
images outta my mind cut part of ya head off like curcumcissions/
u gotta pay to battle me son,i sell-losses/
u like micheal jacksons nose,cuz u fell-off-kid/
fuckit u live lies sayin ur a fuckin felon/
keep talkin,ill rip a hole in u,and tell the cops that the bullet fell-in/
slugs sizzle in snitches ribs for tellin/
twistin stomachs wit the acid pourin out smellin/

[Trema]

Now some of your rhymes were ayt but the vocab was poor very weak. I mean your rhymes were like a lil kid would spit it. You need to work on your vocab homie, alot!

[*BaByShAnTe*]

you had okay vocabulary use nothing too big just regular words, i liked the topic also.
you had a good structure of it though but i don;t think you needed the -'s in between some of your words okay. this was kindof short but it was great as far as i could read.

[...::ExZaKt::...]

lil kid would spit it?....wtf r u talkin about son i would rip u and im only 14.....

[Ether Spitter]

ya rhyme sheme was coo...and ya multi's were coming thru...but ya delivery was weak duke....elevate ya structure and delivery and you'll become nice thru evolution

igido

[jesta]

Ay that wuz coo. But you shoulda made the beginning stronger. I almost turned away but you picked it back up. Stay strong da whole verse and you be killin em. CHAMEEEN.

[...::ExZaKt::...]

thanx for the feed...but this was basically juss str8 off the mind to a beat so..it didnt take much effort at all......

uppin

[Obscene six-17]

You got mad mutlies, but mostly filler, but ya shits pretty good, i'd rate this like a 7 out of 10, keep elevating

[...::ExZaKt::...]

yea uppin..

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.