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  1. October 25th, 2005, 02:36 AM #1
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    RED Lip-Stick



    She wore a dark red dress with lip stick to match,
    She was all anyman could disire, but there was a catch...



    She dressed to distress and I'll tell you Why,
    This hot-tamale tried it on me then I Realized...

    A man subconsciously sees things that aren't there
    So when he views beauty he can't seem to think clear
    Thats why these wemon triple-check their appearence
    They know that beauty is the key to a man's clearence

    It's true, no lie I wish I had a witness
    it started six months ago, and went like this...

    Took a step-back, my chest-cracked as I gasped
    It was a Kodak moment but I couldn't make it last.
    She passed in slow motion, perfume like love potion
    Coca-Cola bottle body, hips swayed like the ocean
    at that point no matter what her request I woulda awarded
    Now with that said, my head's perception was distorted...

    Blinded by infatuation, simple minded, infact impatient,
    She had me whipped-n-twisted, tight fisted as I stayed-bent.
    Determend to give her anything and no one could stop me
    of course she was playin me like a literal game of monopoly
    racing to meet her demands I was gassed from within
    she had me Whipped, but I wasn't a past-tense benz...

    As time told, the relationship proceeded to age,
    out of the blue the dime left me, but left a page...

    on the bed sittin by her Red Dress, was Distress in a letter,
    there was only three words written: "I Found Better"
    My perception became clear, I was tricked by this chick...
    Then..like her last laugh, I saw her kiss-print in Red-Lip Stick...









    ___________-____-____-_____________


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post3354169

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...03#post3354203
    Last edited by BigBoss; October 25th, 2005 at 02:52 AM

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  2. October 25th, 2005, 03:01 AM #2
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    yo i was feeling this dawg,good flow,east 2 understand and V.G structure
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  3. October 25th, 2005, 10:41 AM #3
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    That was propa, i felt that and the flow and styling was good, dog u an asset to the crew
    Kiss me through the camera lens.
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  4. October 25th, 2005, 04:11 PM #4
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    nice piece, there was emotion on it, vocab was perfect, flow was on point, didnt confuse the reader at all...plus it was a good topic, and the way you brought it out was nice...cant wait to see what you gonn say in our OM
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  5. October 25th, 2005, 04:24 PM #5
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    Quote Originally Posted by Pakaveli
    That was propa, i felt that and the flow and styling was good, dog u an asset to the crew

    hell yea man, you a great lyricist, glad to have you on our team.
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  6. October 25th, 2005, 05:10 PM #6
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    This was pretty tight,good flow and multis

    Determend to give her anything and no one could stop me
    of course she was playin me like a literal game of monopoly
    -Fav line

    stay ^
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  7. October 25th, 2005, 05:29 PM #7
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    RED Lip-Stick


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    Stay posted for Part 2...

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  8. October 26th, 2005, 12:23 PM #8
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    real real hot drop fam...good descriptive words and metaphors...vocab was on point and structure was good for this piece...Finally somebody did this concept and stuck that shit...there's a lot of pieces on here that try this out and it doesn't come through that good...but this shit was cold. good drop fam
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  9. October 26th, 2005, 11:41 PM #9
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    thx fo feed..who wants some money?

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  10. October 28th, 2005, 05:30 PM #10
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  11. October 29th, 2005, 10:19 PM #11
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    this was a tight peice, struture was great, flow was really good, had really good emotion in it, it was a good topic, liked the vocab used, good drop fam
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  12. October 30th, 2005, 08:09 AM #12
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    rhymes werre goood..i'm impressed
    multies were good vocab was aight
    flow was smooth and lines were even
    coplexity was aiight could be upped
    overall this drop was pretty good
    nicely done layin out the verses
    overall about a 8/10.keep it up
    and return the feed on my om
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  13. November 1st, 2005, 09:49 AM #13
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    Took a step-back, my chest-cracked as I gasped
    It was a Kodak moment but I couldn't make it last.
    She passed in slow motion, perfume like love potion
    Coca-Cola bottle body, hips swayed like the ocean
    at that point no matter what her request I woulda awarded
    Now with that said, my head's perception was distorted...


    ^i sure liked that part..plus much more to like about this piece.. nicely delivered and full of poetic promise...imagery was yeah!...worded dope all in
    cool rhymes n rhythms
    nice text
    ill ish yo
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  14. November 1st, 2005, 05:18 PM #14
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    I Upda Up

    Nobody can up da up like i up da diddy diddy up up....

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  15. November 1st, 2005, 05:21 PM #15
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    the topic was a lil eeehhh, but it was dope, nice wording, complexity and structure.
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