Way too Dark

[The Vortex]

I’d take you there to where the grime stays, but that’s way too dark
Hungry felons believe crime pays; they’ll even snatch your heart
Enough of all the thug wars n projects, lets find new concepts
Ok, here’s an average-day jobless: Woken up, I shit n read
Searched for work found none… logged onto the net, eat
Rolled road wit couple yunger’s, smoked herb n hash
N thought about going-back into jugglin’ sum yack
Oh, shit! This is that thug thing again: I’m way off track
Lets get back to plan-B I’ve gotta think positively
Suppress those blurred visions of jewellery robbery
Recite a song, lite sum strong, I should write for a wage
Ride a bike win a race, kick-ass wit Thai-fight on the stage
If that fails steal a gun..…nah I’m trippin’ again conceal that one
Seek legal income, every two-weeks the post-office cashes a check
This should last for… uhm? At least three-days if I balance out my assets

I’d take you there to where the grime stays, but that’s way too dark




links-
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=245014
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=245909

[The Vortex]

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[K-Loc]

I thought this was a pretty good peice, esspecially for a newbie...it flowed pretty good, althought the lines coulda been a lil shorter..I like the whole concept of the peice it's not too played out.....yet LOL but yea I thought it was a very decent peice, I give ya 6/10 keep elevatin an I'll keep lookin out~1

[thuganomicz]

Shit was nice for a beginner.....good structure to though i like the song and just elevate more with your skill. Good Piece

[The Vortex]

thanks for the holl@

what makes you say im a newbie tho?
lol