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  1. #1

    Fuck Karma

    they say karma's the cause and it has no flaw's//
    no flaw's... I guess this death is a unknown cause//
    saying shit like.. karam aint real//
    that bullshit... I knew if I did it again it would reveal//
    and now your gone, karma took you away//
    but baby wait.. baby I love.. it's to late//
    you passed away//
    and all I can think was what I did//
    I cant belive it... I just lost my baby and my kid//
    what the FUCK.. screamin at the top of my lung's//
    this cant be real... This is hell.. i can feel the tong's//
    priding me, ridin me like im the cause//
    but i did make a mistake, I did you wrong//
    I swear.. Ill do anything to get you back//
    Ill trade my soul to the devil just to get you back//
    and if you aint at the pearly gate's, Im stepin back//
    Ill spend eternity in hell just to see you one more time//
    but god know's, this love I have aint a crime//
    he will understand, he is the man//
    he's the only one that can bring you back//
    Ok i know what I gota do to move on//
    it's painfull and hard, but Ill move on//
    cause I know you here with me every step I take//
    I feel your presence is strong, as i move on.. ever fuckin step I make//
    Just one more run and we be set//
    I keep running it through my mind, that our life was the best//
    Just one more job... and we be free from the life we lived//
    and I could finaly find time to spend with wife and kid//
    Just one more job.. that's what I said//
    You was waiting for me, during the attack//
    If i was there... shit baby youd still be here happy with out a care//
    I miss you more than life and it self//
    I just wana end my own, cause im already living hell/
    But I promis baby Ill move on.. never to forget//
    How much I love you and you love me... RIP sweetie//

  2. #2
    Im -not- BacK
    Join Date
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    nice piece
    sum emotion in it
    couldn't really spit it, i had to read it
    flow - 7/10
    structure - 5/10
    rhyming - 5/10
    like it? - 8/10
    overall - 6.25/10

    work on ur structure as this will improve the flow
    i couldnt see much rhyming at the end - it was jus talkin
    Don't Do Drugs EP is coming soon.

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    Thank's man! I got a second piece coming soon! Got a whole new style coming up. But gona work on it.

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