special rules..topical

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*~Big Nash~* vs bobericc_lyrics

rules are you must drop 16 lines for 3 topics, you must drop 16 lines for at least one of the opponents listed topics. may the best win.

topic list #1
treason of a close friend during the depression
in the shoes of an extremely fatass
and you last thoughts as a hurtling fireball of death the size of michigan comes fling at the earth
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topic list #2
Man on Fire
Blind mans Dreams
Rewind Me...

the 1 verse must be due by 45 min...the rest may be due inbetween now and 2:00 p.m. (eastern)...tommorrow...DO NOT VOTE b4 all three are dropped. *kisses my beautiful mind for tinkin up dis plot*...if everything is str8 checc in nash and G/L, i will checc rite after you

[Cody Nash]

Check...I'm writing all of them right now...be done soon, try and do good kid.

Good Luck,

~NASH

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thanks... my first topical ive done that i havnt been ducced

checc>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

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topic list #1
in the shoes of an extremely fatass
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my elbowz becomeing shellbows..in any appearence 'n dont get an encore
help me!..a serving of jellow..im lloyd banks the way i have hunger for more
im painfully hurting on da inside though, under layers of thickness im soft..
laughing from hurassing me thiccly head 2 toe, despirate 4 da more of alot?
you jus dont understand its like a deftifing drug, with the overusages to kill
tried the simple wayz, the rolls dont fade, soufbeach, atkinz & stacker2 pillz
kellogs, pancakes, hashbrowns, and half of yesterdays 20 lbs turkey........
.................................................. ............................only for breakfast
jus get the message...ive fell under the calories secretly lurking...............
.................................................. ......................4 whats best whipped
the love lives..2 what ive imagined ina twisted dimention ova lower intestine
get to give..never seem to RTF unless uve pigged owt @ my banquet section
im an abominable outcast..everyone looks @ me diffrent like apples 2 a orange
notice, i dun fit thru da doorway w/out knockin off da whole damn door hinge
its a horroble obscenity when a woman close mistakes me for very raw pork..
im an obescity among those unfit for my eyes..SO I RIP EM OUT W/ MY FORK
most of me grew up ina trailer home...now ima tyrand look what i inherit, ma'
the portions are wondering who i am...im all of you...my name is AMERICA

twisted the ending for you...its a very true statement

this is my 1 verse for tonight...the rest is due tomorrow @ 2:00 pm (eastern)
make sure u say NO VOTES YET whe you drop

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topic list #1
in the shoes of an extremely fatass
.
.
my elbowz becomeing shellbows..in any appearence 'n dont get an encore
help me!..a serving of jellow..im lloyd banks the way i have hunger for more
im painfully hurting on da inside though, under layers of thickness im soft..
laughing from hurassing me thiccly head 2 toe, despirate 4 da more of alot?
you jus dont understand its like a deftifing drug, with the overusages to kill
tried the simple wayz, the rolls dont fade, soufbeach, atkinz & stacker2 pillz
kellogs, pancakes, hashbrowns, and half of yesterdays 20 lbs turkey........
.................................................. ............................only for breakfast
jus get the message...ive fell under the calories secretly lurking...............
.................................................. ......................4 whats best whipped
the love lives..2 what ive imagined ina twisted dimention ova lower intestine
get 2 give,never seem to RTF unless uve pigged owt @ my banquet section
im an abominable outcast,every1 looks @ me diffrent like apples 2 a orange
notice, i dun fit thru a doorway w/out knockin off a whole damn door hinge
its a horrable obscenity wen a woman close mistakes me for very raw pork
ima obescity among dose unfit for my eyes..SO I RIP EM OUT W/ MY FORK
most of me grew ^ ina trailer home.now ima tyrand look what i inherit, ma'
the portions are wondering who i am...im all of you...my name is AMERICA

twisted the ending for you...its a very true statement

this is my 1 verse for tonight...the rest is due tomorrow @ 2:00 pm (eastern)
make sure u say NO VOTES YET whe you drop

fixed structure > real verse

[Cody Nash]

...Man on Fire...(Holy Name)
Originally I think I must've grown to be great...
...I've fly'd above the world on a strand of bait,
No feelings, no hate....heat you couldn't relate,
I've walked the walk but still can't rely on fate..
Skate to greatness, like fire stranded under ice,
Think twice before you think my abilitiy is nice..
It's a burden upon my shoulders...so I hold hers,
..My friends are on my nerves, the devil shofers,
My life ends with slow pain, I survive on no gain,
Blows my sanity to insane as if it was propane..
..It comes to worse...a surgically removed brain,
A man ignites to flames, and only acid is to rain,
A life of tragedy all the same, remember me or I,
Remember my sacrifices, how I died and Why....
Hang me from my cross..burden that release us,
Remember your loss, Man on Fire...Your Jesus...

...Rewind me...(He hurt me)
....Rewind me, I lost all I have to lose, help me,
He felt me...I hated his touch, too blind to see..
..The man hurt me...Parents don't need to care,
First my body, my legs, then into my underwear,
Too young to know..a blank stare would appear,
Bruises from eye to ear....my chest and my rear,
Secrets to hear, I was hurt by you and so near,
Living my whole life full of hatred and with fear..
Madly he did steer....down a lonesome cold road,
I'm history, no body listens, evil gift is bestowed,
Rewind my life back to when it was at its best...
...God let this be a test, put me with all the rest,
Heaven here I come..no less. I'll be less dramatic,
Physical feelings are bad, emotionally just extatic,
Its Automatic, how I feel so good, but am so hurt,
My Pasture...my life...my father.......................
.........................It was me he tried to convert.

...My Last Thoughts As that Fireball Comes to Earth...(Oponent topic)
Grandparents hold me......Parents see my life and behold me,
You'd think of a happy thought, but the ending is controlling,
Poetry runs rampid through your body...you drop the shottie,
Thoughts stop the reality of the top of the world, to a degree,
...If you were blind you now see...Fireballs become the light,
You begin' to gain sight of the sane. Sun rises so nicely bright,
Love with blacks, mexicans and the white, you know its okay,
To stray from origins, to play the dust covered organs, Today,
A new day strikes...caring and sharing, giving, love and power,
Within' the hour...race becomes the opposite of sit and cower,
You devour the last crumbs on your plate...embrace the thanks,
This is the first day without levels or ranks...no war no tanks...
A day of innocence when pirates burn their planks. Eat breakfast,
Before the world breaks fast...a day when good times dont last,
Earth is on it's throne soon to be taken over...drunks turn sober,
This is the day we become knights...kings...earth turns Nobler...

Man on Fire- Based, in a way on sacrifice. It's about sacrifice of a man which relates to the sacrifice of Jesus Christ on the cross...In the end it is compared to Jesus as "The Man On Fire"...

Rewind Me- Based on a girl...corrupted by the men around her and hurt and beaten...in the end you realize that the whole thing revolves around the beating being comitted by her father...Through the eyes of a child

My Last Thoughts as a....- This was a harder one...it's main storyline is the thoughts of many different people, what's going on around them as they all know the world is going to end...They become peaceful and care nothing about their race...the statement "Earth turns Nobler" supports this.

NOTE: DO NOT VOTE UNTIL' MY OPPONENT DROPS HIS OTHER TWO VERSES... THANK YOU

~NASH

P.S. Pwned?

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dont give ur hopes up nash ima b out in 5 min...its 2:42 in da morn ova here and my eyes lookin crappy as hell, nice drop

DO NOT VOTE

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checc for next topic>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>.

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topic list #2
rewind me...
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rewind me... untill' all of those poisonz removed from its target
too late, i cant find me...waging the devil my soul as a bargain
my eyes dusted, with the anger and hatred of many a millenium
da conscience rusted, havent felt power of good from any of 'em
consecutive shots...only if you could slip a fate into a vhs player
Rewind it*, fasfoward ensures famz peerin my casket w/ a prayer
rewind why, da toxins very toxic, 'n no control..reasons y i lost it
obsticals i've avoided to stop it, and rite now theyve paused shyt
big doseagez wernt feeding me destined pleasure, but not a cut cord
empty wallets 2 piggybank change...$ no measure, 4 more and more
da comtaminations 'o my soul in it purest form, still i cud never denie
lines=checcmate,4 queens on 4 pons,mounted escapez i never climbed
mind 'n constnt rapids & fainted, wites my rhyno. but my nose da plow
my glory seedz tainted, bcuz of da nostrils of an albino..i wait now
waiting 2 wake up from dis dream hope'n god eluded me from a reality
open eyes now w/a glossy gleam,only thing i cudnt rewind was da...
............................... magnum heat..........................................

*sings clap bacc*

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checc 4 third topic>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

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Topical list #2
a blind mans dream
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w/out my cane i aint living, even wish i see da evils, deaths~carcus
my cortex missing and my pupils stained white wit the darkness..
skies blaccened infront of my eyes, da bleach played my life lika fiddle
wish i cud experience wonders of a rainbow, i get lies and skittles
my emotional intake is very little...brakes on impact its very brittle
hot pokers in my eyes, disgustin enuff to give starving kids~a~fill
eyes disolved infront 'o my momma's womb,gd ensured me sert'n doom
its my eyes now just like my soul, impaired wif a dark curtains gloom
then he marched from over the horizon line...the prophet of most
livin in my fantasy's, but no lies dis time, a miracle'z powers 2 host
i must get closer, so this message i may send him, 'please i beg you'
his legs touched da floor like me..had arms n a face..sometin i cant see
his palms touched my forehead, a bright light took place, can this be?!
"from dis untimely darkness my pure soul, u are free, twas merely a test"
a test dat a blind mans tru dream is restored...for i am jesus of nazereth

http://www.erasmagazine.com/jesus/ga...lind%20man.JPG

[Black Hornet]

flow; nash
topical;bob
rhymes;bob
creativity;bob

\/ bob for having better verse

hit up the battle in my sig please both yall please.

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it is 2:03 eastern and i dropped @ 18 min ago, so i didnt go over da limit...

also poll ur vote professional... and bump..i get pretty deep in my topical, i jus like suprise endings tho...so ya

[Black Hornet]

shit homie, i dont quite got 500 posts yet so i cant poll a vote yet.
this is the real shit right here

[b_rEEz]

Both were hot....there was so much to fucking read tho
nice structure on both....
decent flows...and nice rhyming..and internal rhyming
both had the creativity.....but bob had more imagery i felt...
i could picture everything...
like i said..long ass topic battle...but

v/ Bob



drop an honest vote on a link in my sig...i did it for this...you could at least do the same....