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    "The Graffiti Artist" - for 'rill writers.

    "The Graffiti Artist"

    be it a portrait or sketch, it wasnt hard to get his mother to boast
    at breakfast, he was the type to literally paint his butter on toast
    yet eventually the artist in him became a mid-summers day ghost
    ‘n sadly before he met his callin, his inner-youngster met growth
    but he knew he still had it all! in a life, some shutters dont close
    for he had a skill and a wall, it was time that he brush up on both

    the naked wall called to him, in an instant, he’d jot a work plan
    and after years of hearing the word CAN’T, he got his first can
    he started at night…but embarked with a bright spark in his eye
    that somehow allowed him to harness the light darkness denied
    it was rationalization vs. his artist inside... armed with his pride
    his brush offered a stroke of genius with the smartest of strides
    ‘God damn my hearts a bad guide!’ the kid scoffed with a smirk
    cuz he finally followed the thing, and ended up lost in his work
    he swiftly bathed the wall with paint, he smothered it with haste
    ‘n graciously gave it every shade, including the color in his face
    it absorbed each drop like soil plains that been floodless fo years
    he redefined the 3 primary colors…with blood, sweat, and tears
    he fought thru the strife, paintin a name he thought up that night
    wit that he didnt just personify the wall, he also brought it to life
    tho his childhood curse was uplifted wit the word he had written
    he wasnt content, with this person’s ambition it hurt to be driven
    cuz he had perfect precision that could rival a surgeon’s incision
    but the worst indecision when it came to his version of finished
    yet people saw the worth he had given to the earth that we live in
    nothin as influential emerged from a vision since birth of religion

    it’d be a poster to me, but some bitched “its all over the street!”
    kid plugged into his creative outlet ‘n shocked both the extremes
    pussy politicians would push for prison…probably 20 years flat
    to penalize a picture perfect paintin the public paused to peer at?
    ‘its pollution!’ parlor moms pose arguments, just to harp ‘n mock
    ‘n then pitch their partially-smoked parliaments in the parkin-lot
    he aint purposely persuade packs of people to the particular game
    they just found a wall, ‘n like an alliteration, all started the same
    pummeled with persecution…the painters were going thru a test
    they were in their right mind, but most people only use their left
    so everything the artists posted was attacked ‘n called into focus
    whats poetic justice? before the graffiti the walls went unnoticed
    media told the masses: its peer pressure parents, scold their asses
    they’d follow him off a bridge, the day he starts taggin overpasses
    how trend setting was he? some people were swept off their feet!
    he didnt just paint the town red… he painted it ready to read
    cuz dammit it wasnt damage! why’d anyone brand him a bandit?
    he could manage to see an artistic side on the back of a canvass
    he cant even admit he did this, gets dismissed like sun-shines are
    making a painting he cant claim, like a gift with an unsigned card
    to this day hes a name that isnt reppin a face, but u bet its okay
    …its easier to see someone’s soul without their flesh in the way
    so the poet in him’ll keep going forever, and hopes eternities late
    even though his intellectual property doesnt have a security gate

    this story’s not false… but i can easily explain how i planned it
    rap boards were the wall, i was the he, 'n the name was dynamix
    vet to sensation, i wrote in present tense durin my text elevation
    so my every piece would be an easy read for the next generation
    my shit’ll live- in the future read one or two spits, it’ll prove this
    cuz behind the new shit theres always a blue print on how to do it
    someday a cat’ll say my ideas are old…he wasnt there at the start
    ‘n if he went backwards, what he calls an artifact was in fact a art
    some tried to copy my paintings, i wont say vengeance is sweet
    but the most important prints they traced, were left with my feet
    we’re all graffiti artists! wit a made-up name to decoy a real sense
    and with a creativity that’s priceless to the point you feel spent
    i’ll be gone by day break, if im remembered i got ya’ll to thank
    the name was dynamix,
    …will it paint a picture or will you draw a blank?

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    This was very nice, the emotion in this piece really brought the message out clearly. I enjoyed this read man, and I really cant think of anything that is really incorrect in this piece. nice drop, very solid..

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    Still sick now. One of your best, Namix. Ive replied to this before and gave you my thoughts on it, but this deserved an 'Up'.

    Read this and learn something, f0ckers.


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    very well done overall as a whole you have a grasp for discriptive text narrating that truly amplifies your content this was a great read 8/10
    thats only for the few places you went simple and the fact i can't hear audio for this.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    i loved the imagery it put across deep emotion in me very descriptive only a lil off som places but overall hot

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    Quote Originally Posted by Camarac
    Still sick now. One of your best, Namix. Ive replied to this before and gave you my thoughts on it, but this deserved an 'Up'.

    Read this and learn something, f0ckers.


    - Baron Mynd
    yea, good looks bro.. i'm going to post my more 'thought out' topicals on more sites - you know, the ones that you actually put thought into and what not.. mostly to proactively stop kids like the 'fake fracture' that was on this site from biting entire drops... I sincerely don't give a shit about someone biting a punchline verbatim, and even if they bite an entire battle verse i just try to let the net self-police itself... but jacking entire topicals is my limit lol..not so much that 'my dick is so long, yours is more like hello' drop, but 'ish like this would get to me...

    thanks pawtna..is this pretty much the main board you reside on these days?

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    It was a nice read man. Stay on your game

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    Quote Originally Posted by namix
    yea, good looks bro.. i'm going to post my more 'thought out' topicals on more sites - you know, the ones that you actually put thought into and what not.. mostly to proactively stop kids like the 'fake fracture' that was on this site from biting entire drops... I sincerely don't give a shit about someone biting a punchline verbatim, and even if they bite an entire battle verse i just try to let the net self-police itself... but jacking entire topicals is my limit lol..not so much that 'my dick is so long, yours is more like hello' drop, but 'ish like this would get to me...

    thanks pawtna..is this pretty much the main board you reside on these days?
    This has ALWAYS been my board man. Before I was even called Baron! (Hence, THIS name...) I started here, got better here, then emigrated to have a go in the RSTL, but this place is primarily where I post at. RM was just me branching out so more of you could read my shit. Stick around though, we could use more heads like you.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Camarac
    This has ALWAYS been my board man. Before I was even called Baron! (Hence, THIS name...) I started here, got better here, then emigrated to have a go in the RSTL, but this place is primarily where I post at. RM was just me branching out so more of you could read my shit. Stick around though, we could use more heads like you.
    word? then as you know, i never really visited here much.. i registered a couple years ago under 'namixx', but this name became available now lol... I'll drop by more often, topical league/battle leagues in good health?

    peace hommie

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    i like it a lot made me think good emotin keep droppin homie!
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    all these hoes aint nuthin but hoes

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    Quote Originally Posted by namix
    word? then as you know, i never really visited here much.. i registered a couple years ago under 'namixx', but this name became available now lol... I'll drop by more often, topical league/battle leagues in good health?

    peace hommie
    The leagues have been better. I havent checked the topical one here just lately, but the LLL isnt doing too badly. There's a couple nice heads, some with the potential there. Same as every site man! Haha ..

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    man that shit was sweet keep bangin that sweet shit im really feelin that 4real cuz holla at the kid

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    that was a real good piece.....good shit .
    lot's of reading but the longer the more interesting............
    overall just a masterpiece.................

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    word this was tight dyna

    prolly one of the best pieces dropped on the net since this text shit has existed. alot of quotables, too many to mention. but word, this shit was nice from top to bottom man. you need to drop new shit though lol
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    Wow, This was some drop shit kid - Darth wasnt lyin about you, Very creative topic never seen it done before. Hope to see some more drops from you in the future

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