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I liked this, it was good to read. Well written, didnt fall off & kept consistancy throughout. Nice imagery in this, really felt what you were writing about.
Things were simple when she was pregant, no cries to comfort,
But three and two make a difference when the lives are numbers.
Another mouth to feed, how proud was he, to not be man of it
And So he slowly gave it up, almost unable to withstand runnin'
Eventually reduced the kid to nothin, woman and child followed.
Now knowin' Birth control woulda been the better pill to swallow.
Those lines really stood out for me.
Nice work, keep it up.
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i really liked dis drop...the image u created was amazing & the topic, altho it was kinda depressing, u made it unique--
some of the lines were a lil played out, but overall it was a str8 drop
props on dis & keep droppin
-LL
I like this alot
had very good vision, wordplay, and vocab
the struct was also good did'nt find nothing I did'nt like
Yeah and I can say this some of the best lit I've read on this site.
Things were simple when she was pregant, no cries to comfort,
But three and two make a difference when the lives are numbers.
Another mouth to feed, how proud was he, to not be man of it
And So he slowly gave it up, almost unable to withstand runnin'
Eventually reduced the kid to nothin, woman and child followed.
Now knowin' Birth control woulda been the better pill to swallow.
^^ Damn, that was deep. This is one of the best om's i've ever read. Seriously, this was dope. I hope you make more drops like this, I will definatly read them. Awsome flow, nice rhyme scheme, nice word play. Everything was good. Almost no flaws. If I could rate this it would be a 9/10.
Nice drop.
Hit up my Om's.
Artificial.Intelligence
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Thanks to those above, I've hit a piece of those who asked me to.
appreciate it.
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Very nice piece,indeed.The whole drop worked well with a nice flow,on point vocab and great imagery.I was really feeling the content and you did a nice job at getting the point across.This is definately the kind of peices I like to read,beacuse its hard to find text with any meaning online anymore.Overall this was a very dope piece and I ain;t got any real criticism or suggestions right now....8/10...Keep Droppin Ill shit....
CHEEBA HAWKS CREW
"Better Then You Since 2002"
thanks man. yea meaning is of utmost importance.
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thanks, appreciate it.
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yea...................nice piece..........good structure, nice worplay, an overall it was dope.............pz.
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