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    Re-Birth

    I hate the terrible way.....that this horrible world operates
    The only way of dieing is for someone to determine your fate
    Every three seconds another adolescent child dies
    Soon the average life expectancy will be twenty five
    I wish I could escape, and just fly away to a Utopia
    But the only place I could afford to fly to is Ethiopia
    I'm a pretty good guy, I've behaved my whole life
    Just maybe one day, I’ll reach that platinum ice
    But, what do I have to do, how far do I have to go?
    To get all this money, I don’t want to pimp a hoe
    I don’t want to kill people I don’t want to rob stores
    If I have to sin to become rich, I’d rather be poor
    Tell me why am I in this environment, this is Hell
    To change my ways like the stock market, I’d sell
    Going through the streets I see the terrible crimes
    I go home and cry, I can’t count how many times
    I cry for the kids, the old, the bad, and the good
    I fucking cry for the people restricted to the hood
    Die, death, decease, buried, and six feet under
    I here these words at the speed of bolting thunder
    That’s all that’s in on our minds though, being dead
    Walking through a battlefield, a bullet through a head
    I want to cry out to Dante, and confess he’s wise
    He knew about all the Hells, he had seeking eyes
    I feel like I’m in a war, fighting only myself
    One side of me stabbed my other, that’s what I felt
    I need some war tactics so I listen to the aged
    Machiavelli taught me the people, and the ways
    I’m stuck on an axis that keeps spinning never stops
    We’re all on the same planet, the hoodlums and the cops
    The hookers and the priests, the good and the evil
    Take them all down, the pitiful mind of someone feeble
    Pressing upon the buttons, destroying our souls
    Killing our own kind, is a majorities life goals
    Tell me when this stops, I’d like to open my eyes
    And know that the world is safe, so stop with the lies
    Just some simple statements, on this very Earth
    This world needs to change, it needs a Re-Birth



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    hmmmmm could have rymes more flow was alil off desent topic you started rymeing more towards the end but you might wanna start off strong because i did'nt relli want to keep read'n it like the frist 5 lines there was no rymes lol n then when u actully did ryme it was pretty gay...anyways start off stronger but nice finsh

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    shutup kid go watch porn or something

    real feed

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    upping for some feed here

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    some feed on this piece here please

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    feed................

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    cmon upping for some real feed here please...

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    upping for some feed....

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