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    Jesus Understands

    Jesus Understands
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    When you feel like your the only one left...He understands
    When your a victim of identity theft...He understands
    When Daddy has to leave 'cause he crossed the border
    Or when Mommy has to go stand on her corner...He understands
    When you run away away because of the stress your under
    Or when you @ night 'cause of hunger...He understands
    When you hit your brother 'cause of poverty...He understands
    When you kill someone and give apologies...He understands
    When your failin school cause you skip class to hustle
    Or whenever you get into law trouble...He understands
    When your fightin wit some boys in the yard 'cause of beef
    Or whenever your runnin from the police...He understands
    When you hold up the 7-11 to make the last house payment
    Or when you pocket shit from the gas station...He understands
    When you cry your self to sleep cause your parents argue
    Or when you drink 'cause your freinds are too...He understands
    When you bleed from your nose cause Daddy is a son beater
    Or when your expelled cause your a cheater...He understands
    When ya girl leaves ya 'cause you don't listen to her problems
    Or when they shoot ya 'cause you fought 'em...He understands
    When you shank the guy who robbed ya for ya vengence
    Or when you work for Mom @ your expenses..He understands
    When your Mom puts you down, so you slam the door
    Or when you run away b/c you take anymore...He understands
    When you ghost a kid 'cause he is tryin to trick you
    Or when you use weapons to solve issues...He understands
    When you take the heat for ya boy, and have to 5 years
    Or whenever you decide to let out ya tears...He understands
    So, whenever you feel noone gets you and ya problems expand
    Remember no matter wat it is................................
    ..Jesus will understand.
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    this was a decent om, detail was ok like how you named struggles of everyday life people go through, but saying he understands got a lil annoying after reading it 6 times lol maybe if it was audio and had "he understands" in the background it would be dope, but on a om got a lil annoying. Besides all that it was a nice peice homie, keep writing and dropping the dope.

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    nice.... i really liked this piece, it was deep and had some aspects of imagery, the jesus understands hook was good too, the read of this and flow was smooth. i think you should add more to a scenery because most of it was moralistic, and could work on the vocab, multis. internal rhymes are a beaut too. it wasnt a clued thing either, the message was easily seen... i mean even jesus understands

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bo6vious
    nice.... i really liked this piece, it was deep and had some aspects of imagery, the jesus understands hook was good too, the read of this and flow was smooth. i think you should add more to a scenery because most of it was moralistic, and could work on the vocab, multis. internal rhymes are a beaut too. it wasnt a clued thing either, the message was easily seen... i mean even jesus understands
    i cant help but agree with this you have a great idea you conveyed in a personal manner to touch others the content was ther5e just could use a little more appeal to it.i can tell this hits you home the way it's composed just insure that the same meaning is given and received to those listening to your conviction
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    This was good, the understands got a bit annoyin. Good emotion and explanation. Great ending, the vocab was aight, mostly and ok piece. Structure was great and flow was good. Keep it up. Focus on some more vocab to rhyme. This was good man. keep it up.

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    i really liked this piece for the simple fact that jesus does understands those things.
    u wrote that one on point,but ur vocab could have been better.
    it flowed good together,yet the ending of each sentence was kind of doing too much because of repitition.
    otherwise,i loved this piece.keep doing it
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    This Piece Had Some Good Points And Some Bad Points....overall It Was We'll Scripted And Flowed Pretty Smoothly, I Felt You Lacked Imagery As Well As Your Vokab Was Only Descent....as For The Topik It Was A A Good Point I Agree With Everyhting You Said... I Think You Could Have Wrapped It Up With Some Lines That Talk About Forgivness...but Overall Nice Piece!
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