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    2 Sided Letter By:Incript

    Dear baby,
    Every day that i said baby its okay...
    its a friend im talkin to it was a play...
    Dont worry it okay jus chill...
    Imma call you back just stay still...
    Yet im still on the fone wit her untill..
    4 in da morning cuz we talkin bout stuff...
    Aint no freaky stuff wasnt nuttin much...
    I treated you so bad i can see the pain..
    I made you so sad ya tear replaced the rain...
    Call me insaine for mix love wit hate..
    Cuz now you got hate now restin in your heart..
    I still got love jus shoulda showed it from da start..
    I never touched her that is one i can promise...
    I aint gunna lie i told her its her i loved and miss...
    Didnt mean it she aint the one that i'd kiss....
    I know the pain in ya chest only gettin stonger...
    I know you cryin now night gunna get longer...
    Days at work will be gettin harder but boo...
    Imma still wait for you still care for you...
    Still be here for you cuz we were friends...
    then became lovers true luv cant pretend...
    In the end imma be ya man i know it..
    I see images of us again from a defined poet...

    .......Stop next letter.........

    Hey T you know who it be...
    I speak to you from another seat...
    I've seen the pains of defeat...
    Here take a seat relax and listen gotta speak..
    I was talkin big game while i was on da creap...
    You didnt have a damn clue you was my mistress...
    You thought you was my only boo now theres mistrust..
    I told you me and my girl was over and done..
    But it was her i was wit when i said i was gone...
    Never picked up my cell fone i no u woundered...
    Y he aint home he said hes wit friend i pounder..
    I shoulda stop before gettin ya number im sorry..
    I can't say that we knew each other hardly...
    Cuz i got to noe you from the round table...
    I noe you thought this is a problem fo cable...
    Sumin like this wouldnt happen right?
    I'm sure she thought the same every night...
    I cant say i aint still in luv wit her i'd be lyin...
    wasnt tryna be coo this aint me im dyin...
    tryna figure out wat to do but gatta leave...
    I noe it like pullin da trigger one could believe...
    Im a monster call me a grade a ass if you need..
    wish love be a class then maybe i wouldnt fail so bad n bleed..
    I wanna appolgise for the lead i hope you can fogive...
    I analised the situation i need her in order to live..

    this is a real life problem im having.. i freestyled this so thats why the lines are off.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=304280
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...6&page=2&pp=15
    I work alone aint no one beside me,I stand tall...
    Onli Death is wat fears inside me,If U need help my hand fall...

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    feed please
    I work alone aint no one beside me,I stand tall...
    Onli Death is wat fears inside me,If U need help my hand fall...

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    Decent... there were some grammatical problems, so try and fix those because i f you dont then it will look quite unprofeessional and peopole mighte not want to continue the piece (ignore the mistakes i just made in spelling, im typing fast) for instance... analyze and apologize where both spelled wrong.. dont use a word you cant spell.... decent piece still.. stay up

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