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    The Golden Glove



    I had a dream of being a boxer, so i trained brutally
    Elevated my guard status causing it to become my duty
    Had a golden glove, boxing was my true destany
    So i have no other choice but to become the best to me
    Trained and sparred for hours, 6 days a week
    I developed a sleek technique just so i can beat

    I joined a leauge of boxing just to test my skill
    They turned out agressive, so i was getting killed
    They were quicker, stronger, and had more training
    I couldn't do nothing more until i brung up my grade
    That was having trouble maintaining, so i started complaining
    Everyday i had a tutor so that meant less boxing
    I guess school was more important and life wasn't rocking
    I just felt like socking, just had a need to have a glove on
    So i snuck out of the school and practiced until dawn
    But i got in trouble because i did something wrong
    Tutoring isn't where i belonged, in the ring is where i should be
    If it wasn't for school i'd be there, I just could be
    And i would be, but things are complicated so i debated
    Boxing was extremly loved while school was plain hated
    Over the month I brought my atrocious D up to a solid B
    I just focused on boxing, school no longer bothered me

    Over all the training and building up strength and speed
    I thought i was ready, i had a feeling i was going to succeed
    So i joined the B division and did pretty well for a newbie
    People studied me with admiration even when they never knew me
    After the first few matches I was 5-2, but after that i dominated
    Brought my record to 15-4, i won the league and was congratulated
    I got a trophie and inbedded in it was " Divison B Champion" in bold
    And that day forward my dream was extremely ready to unfold
    So i joined Divison A and wow did the compition get harded
    I had a 3 match loosing streak, i thought my dream wouldn't go farther
    But then i got angry and didn't give up, i won my next 6 fights, "wow!"
    Then i won the next 3 matches and punches people lights out
    My record became 19-6 as the end of the league grew nearer
    And boxing was just automatic and it became much clearer
    At the end of the season my record was 25-8 that was 2nd place
    I was in the championship vs a man with a tough looking face
    He had a record of 30-3, now i had to bring everything to the game
    I just had to win so people would start respecting my name

    That day came, the championship was into play, i was ready
    The bell wrang, and my position was being held steady
    I threw a left jab, right upper cut both blocked, he hit me
    I felt a bit dizzy then suddenly became a bit witty
    I moved forward, fake right twice, fake left, right hook
    Hit him in the eye, got him by surprised, round 1 was in the book
    The crowd was cheering for me, then round 2 was about to begin
    I threw a quick jab left, right, right hook, left upper cut with a grin
    He got knocked down, blood pouring, 10 count i was the winner
    I had so much respect because i was considered only a begginner
    I loved boxing, but it was sad that i couldn't become a pro
    But i still had 14 years of A league left to go
    Last edited by Fatal.; August 10th, 2006 at 11:24 PM

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    Last edited by Fatal.; August 10th, 2006 at 11:21 PM

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    upping for feed. leave links.

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    please leave feed. i know it might seem long but just please leave feed.

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    no feed? just leave links if u do

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    man it was really long i had too force myself to read it i know i newb but with pieces like this you want to make sure that every word hit hard because everybody knowhow great ali was you i thought you couldve gotten more creative add some fiction too it you know have fun ... long story short i liked it but it was the average tribute that everybody writes nothin new .....
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    ok thanks uppin for more.

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    this is exactly why i dont post my OMs, cause what i write is long like this one but i know it'll get no looks so i dont even bother wastin my time postin it........

    anyways, nice story going on here...only thing that drew me from it was how predictable it was, at points i already knew what was gonna happen before it actually did, especially mid-way into the ending....with you entering division A and losing then winning afterwhile, other than that....the story was told very well, you didnt get too reckless with ya wording, it stayed steady.....the point you were trying to get across was definately in effect, the ending was blah though.....could of had more of a twist in it, it was too simple.....like seeing a movie thats so intense, and then ends when u least expect it, with no point (like Pulse) lol.....nah but i was feelin it regardless, overall it deserves a 7 outta 10

    develop it more, and close it better that'd bring it up to maybe like a 8 1/2 or 9
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    nice shit I like it dog keep it up

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    Yea your a vet and all with your 123,000 posts but um really....


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    thanks. very appreciated.

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