Dyl=IL Duce just incase you guys didnt know
Dyl=IL Duce just incase you guys didnt know
"Children and lunatics cut the Gordian knot which the poet spends his life patiently trying to untie."
Jean Cocteau
x1 PSHOF
Imminent Evolution
Last up people
Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
So far so good.....
But how you fall doesn't matter
Its how you land
V-Dyl
This was a good battle, I enjoyed the read, and thought that both had well written peices. Thomas your elevation is evident, I think this may be the best I have ever read from you, and it surprised me a lot, so props on that. But I don't think you had enough to out-class Dyl who as usual came with a rock-solid verse, with great imagery and a very well thought out storyline. That's why I have to give this one to him, keep writing Thomas, I'm glad to see you elevating, and I hope that you'll take any advice I have to offer. I want to see you become a great writer.
Word Thanks man .........Now lets close this thing.
Legend.
RB Original.
Meta. Convicts.
18-0 Crew Record, 06-07 Best Crew.
damn good battle fellas.
DYL- i like ur topic. and u had a nice interesting story
i saw some creativity. good imagery. nice vocab.
excellent flow. good rhymes. and u had a good deal of emotion
i followed ur whole topical and i liked. good job
De- you did really good too. i also liked ur topic
interesting, creative. imagery was good and vocab was as well
good flow throughout and good rhymes
emotion was a bit lacked and thats why im voting for
dyl due to a slightly better job
v/dyl
hit up the sig honestly.
Thomas
Pretty good piece. I like the way you went with it. It was unpredictable and original. I think some of the things you should work on his rhyme scheme, flow, multi's, and get some more imagery in there. But you did iight for the topic you picked. The storyline was good but it just wasn't an amazing and outspoken piece due to some of the things you lacked. No emotion really felt there and that was a downer. I really like emotion filled pieces or at least great imagery to paint a vivid picture in my mind. I'd say keep working man. You'll get there.
Dyl
Good piece man. Multi's stood out great here. Loved the flow of it. Your style has changed alot since the last time I have read a piece of yours. But it has been like a year. lol. But the imagery was great here. That made me want to read on. Painting mini pictures in my brain from time to time was great for the overall read. The storyline was great man. I really loved it. Word choice was also very good. So keep it up man. I really liked this piece a whole lot.
Conclusion
Dyl actually took this battle quite easily. It's just about more experience. He had the better flow with the better imagery and rhyme scheme. Both storylines were pretty good but Dyl's just stood more appealing to me. So both keep writing and I'd like to see more from both. Good reads on both sides.
\\//Dyl