dope drop here

i didnt need or really even notice your training wheels y but its certainly show your commitment which was more than evident in your verse

i thought you did a great job with the nature imagery, solid flow, rhyming and most especially the structure

and u did a good job relating back to humans
i was surprised to see a maya angelou reference- iv read the book you referenced

it was almost like you had 2 conclusions though- you could have ended it after endeavour if you wanted-cuz the tone shifted a little ambigiously even

and im not trying to be critical- that was an amazing verse and to the extent the reader can relate to your perspective you made a stunning accomplishment here- just trying to give you something to think about in addition to saying its fantastic

and if you could hit this link later that'd be awesome itz my 1st topical battle

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