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    The Caffeine Cult

    The Caffeine Cult
    Esco 3000


    Swept under a brume
    of brew; percolated by
    prayers of the faithful,
    this city's a cup half empty.

    i'm beginning to see the pitchfork
    that stirs such a large red pitcher.

    and yet you still extend your tongue
    like a pink welcome mat to the
    roof of your mouth.
    nothing comes closer to home.

    go on, ground your seeds into mud.
    continue to close your eyes
    and let your slumber feed you dreams
    of your umber hunger.

    it makes me sick; watching
    so many skulls daring to
    flash stained smiles without
    flinching.

    lifting cups to their mouths only
    to have it trickle to the floor
    bathing bones bronze, puddling
    beneath the feet; making
    messiahs of men.

    it's then that your smugness
    bubbles and bursts.
    the mugger in front of me
    is protected from persecution,
    wearing a mask fashioned
    with today's paper.

    it's their bible.

    and today's passages demand
    your attention as always.
    so as to escape the world
    around you, masking your fear
    with the world beyond you.

    but i digress,
    because it would seem that
    i'm next. so sings
    the machine whose foam
    grinds the teeth
    of the drone to my left.

    it's then that the devil sashays
    through the doors of the church,
    sewn from heel to horns in Prada.
    with pursed lips she parts her
    purse in search of a card to
    slip the child behind her.

    I declare war!

    the canvas before me
    betrays my palette,
    mind painting a vision
    of the frothy sauce
    grinding this seed into mud.
    leaving a skeleton
    in it's wake; taking
    the innocence of this
    poor pagan child.

    and while the cardinal
    behind the counter
    sings the price of my tithes,
    i watch the puddle form
    under her small ugg boots.

    prayers answered she walks to the door,
    holding it for her mother who brings a
    bottle to her jaw, and i see
    her water, is wine!

    it was at that time i took this
    city in my dirty copper palms and
    sat down to confess my sins
    in a cup of joe.

    I think i'll stay for the second service.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
    Po.Ethics.

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    Re: The Caffeine Cult

    Elevation is key, 1luv.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
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    Once more, 1luv.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
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    this was a crazy free verse man the topic alone was real creative and real real thought out...some deep writing in this and a big influence on me homie cus ima caffeine freak...lol...but your word choice was nicely done aswell as your image portation..sickness man..i just liked this piece it spoke out loud with pride and no shame what so ever man...it was real deep and had mad depth of great emotion..i liked it..and story aswell just clicked nicely man reallly some nice stuff i think i wanna HOF it...

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ll-331701.html
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    hit that in return

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    ^^dont worry esco its me i got my acc. back...lol im not the original ill but he gave it to me then i gave it away now i got it back
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    I got you man, thanks for the praise. Elevation is key.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...me-332299.html
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    hit that if you wanna instead of body language its up to you both if you'd like..i would appreciate both but one is good eighter one.
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    Re: The Caffeine Cult

    fucking computers..
    Last edited by Atti; April 2nd, 2007 at 05:53 PM
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    ...
    Last edited by Atti; April 2nd, 2007 at 05:53 PM
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    haha, I love you esco. this was great man. my favorite part about this was the double meanings that were strewn about the first stanza of the poem ("red picture" ect.) just very cleverly worded and concise to the surface concept, yet still very intricately playing a roll in a deeper second development. also, I liked how you switched the focus from personal in the begining to more objective later on. this was just great man, and the most impressive part is that you were able to keep consistant even with such length. great job as always.
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Thanks for the response Atti, i'm going to get to Plastic Deer i promise!

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    Re: The Caffeine Cult

    This was fucking dope, the imagery was vivid and the metaphores were endless. I never heard of anybody using coffee to describe a human complex, and the sound of it dosnt sound good at first but of course you pulled it off and made it very interesting, One of the most imaginative poems I've seen on here and a nice way to start off april.

    Good shit.

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    Thanks a lot man, elevation is key.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
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    This was just dope man. The metaphors and wordplay throughtout the whole piece were endless and brilliantly used. This was a very interesting topic too, the comparision is something I never would have thought of. The vivid images painted by this piece helped to further strengthen it, great write man!

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    Thanks man, i really appreciate it.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
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