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    Body Snatchers – Schizophrantic Umbrella

    (Double Feature)

    Schizophrantic Umbrella directed by Exact

    I’m all about obsessive compulsive disorder,
    obs-e-ss-ive com-pul-sive dis-order.
    Say it,
    OH – SEE – DEE
    Louder and clearer madam!
    I’m obsessing over this CD!
    But check this out champ –
    I’m a weeeeeird mother fucker!
    I’ve been venting over these rainy days.
    My head has been going so many ways.
    In the toilet – in the sink,
    wait a second – the (uurrrrrgh! griiiiind!)
    Ah cah berry pronantz mah worz –
    My tongue has kissed the garbage disposal.
    But you know – the touch wasn’t right.
    Right – right!
    Rituals say I touch it again.
    Like twister.
    Tongue on the garbage disposal –
    right hand on the cutting board,
    left foot in the stove.
    Mangled.
    But today is different.
    I’m going out.
    Out and about.
    Tootles with my umbrella –
    : O
    Swinging to the swigging beats of a mutilated Broadway,
    Audience concave, exothermic entertainment convex,
    A prick’s complex,
    Get the context?
    Anyway dude -
    I hope you really didn’t think I was going out,
    I hope-
    I HOPE!
    I hope I spit in your face.
    Rub it in between your wrists.
    Cut me.
    Don’t bark.
    Are you there?
    Hello?
    I’m seeing fever abstracts –
    jig!
    I can dance good for a white man.
    Leave me on 17th and Cross.

    Body Snatchers Directed by Atticus


    tractor casualty-
    the beam talks with phases set to
    [abnormality]

    abdomen stripped to sinnue
    harpsichord
    to tickle extraterrestrial
    symphony- a duet
    strobe probe percussion
    music
    detuned on the human pallet
    with an english accent,
    back up voca-
    list of demands to
    human flutes-
    to play nooses without
    drowning in double bass
    movements
    -a new ear drum
    line of unidentified flying
    conscience.

    it smells like little green men-
    thol leaves
    and aborted babies;
    pluck my wash basin bass
    made of umbilical cords
    plugged back in
    to outties-
    innies inhale AV cables
    with poor connection

    -this specimen makes
    a poor conductor!

    corneas boiled
    in aluminum foil-
    dried with petroleum jelly
    and electroshock
    jock radio

    -body snatcher just want boogie!

    wrapped in achilles
    and too many amputated left feet
    they can't dance to the beat-
    the murmurs
    of abducted subjects
    wear pattern similar to plad
    -another scream overlapped
    the one two step
    of stepping on toes
    in shoes made for...
    they don't wear shoes

    walking less then a mile
    in the human b-boy
    buoyancy-

    oh boy! this is taking awhile

    don't run with scissors
    sister, but-
    tap dance with scalpel
    lab coat and open asshole
    -cut a rug!

    let me borrow
    that one's spine-
    boa vertebrae draped over
    shoulderless slopes
    -360 degree reverberation
    of the neck breaking

    now I can dance to this!

    that's what I call a twist
    -wall flowers
    and intergalactic soul trains
    beware,
    mars has a head start
    on the human heart-
    beat box cardboard hip
    thieving,
    hop on another's leg
    kind of two step
    to come "correct"

    .. I believe is how it's said.

    the pitch white
    lights the contrast of fluttering
    eye lash-
    this depeshe mode
    disco ball
    room dance needs a hand
    to take the lead..

    Iiiiiiiii'll take that my good man.

    Credits

    My Sanity

    Your Sake


    Our Time

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    Re: Body Snatchers - Schizophrantic Umbrella feat.

    Wow, this was incredible guys.

    It was a long read but engaging throughout (even though Atticus forced me to pay attention with that extensive vocab) and i was suprised it read so well, the tone was strong and fluid for both of you. I really liked your concept and approach and the closing was strong also. You guys should definitely collab again, i enjoyed the outcome of this one, a lot.

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    Re: Body Snatchers - Schizophrantic Umbrella feat.

    Thanksalot man.

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    Re: Body Snatchers - Schizophrantic Umbrella feat.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...wn-334422.html
    ^^
    its a simple piece i did but yea..


    anyways man..WHOO!... this piece was just fuckin sick man. straight gully man it was very artistic and very very poetic.. i loved both your word choice..very spectacular and very vivid filled with nice emotion and nice imagery with a great display of word choice ya know... i cant say much cus there aint much to say really man i saw no flaws man nice drop guys!

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    Re: Body Snatchers - Schizophrantic Umbrella feat.

    I absolutley love this collaberation. It's my 2nd favorite poetic writing on this site!!.. exact.. you had beautiful emotion in this one, it was just thriving from the heart of a character that you managed to illistrate so vividly, it was dope. I would break it down but i didn't necessarilly see stanzas lol.. the word choice was perfect, and the scheme amazing.. I think that to accomplish something great in a piece, like this.. you need to get inside a characters head, and spill out their thoughts and inner feelings onto the page and that's exactly what i felt you did!! The only thing i could point out that i didnt feel fitting myself was the repetition of the toungue in garbage disposal lines..

    Rituals say I touch it again.
    Like twister.
    Tongue on the garbage disposal –
    right hand on the cutting board,
    left foot in the stove.
    Mangled.
    ahaha.. pure gold man. I loved how you could really bring out the crazy side of a character, and make it seem simply logical to him in a sense.. really i have nothing else to say.. great work deffinatley deserving of a spot on the hof..
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    Re: Body Snatchers - Schizophrantic Umbrella feat.

    Thank you, man.

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