This place, called nowhere

[Poeta Demonio]

This place, called nowhere
Bullets made for organs,
tears like steal blades
falling from cheeks of
stone; slipping in and out
of veins like snakes
designed to kiss youthful
lips; yet deceit runs a riot
with the the blood cells
Salty water detected by
tongues of little speech
smiling the opposite way
around; to a song with no
name, except, loneliness
In a place where birds
dare not fly, and poets
refuse to speak of romance
A sky so black that white
shades crawl into the
shadows to take shelter

If you do not know of this
place, you are not alive
my friend; your pulse
may be pumping in the
wrong direction, & your
eyelids may aswell be
closed; it cannot be found
on any maps, or atlases
it's a secret that reflects
the irony of it's feelings
with the simple description
of 'lost'; you can find it when
the moon eclipses the heart
& when sunlight is replaced
by curtain rails being
slammed into dead-lock
Blacks, whites, Asians
plus every race you can think
of, are all welcome here
yet they are rarely
permitted to leave
A population of billions
are resident to the
pollution this place
leaves in our forefathers
lungs; & if you still no not
of this place, you have not
loved and lost... my friend.

-Poeta

[Poeta Demonio]

Yo yo yo, feed feed feed.

[Poeta Demonio]

upping.

[Poeta Demonio]

upping

[Kaotic Theory]

nice dude
the concept was interesting and made me feel like i was in a whole new wrold a world that's different and opposite in many ways compared to ours....i mean thats the way i felt after reading this, the emotion was solid in the amount was needed for the read it was a perfect dosage lol, the imagery was beautiful bruh it made me litterally picture this weird place you described you feel? the vocab was nice also......get back and peep
mortal, no more

[Spoken]

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hit back fucker...

nice drop here...i was into this really well and emotionally i was tearing deep inside form the nac i was getting here man...it was refreshing seeing you get bakc your old fashion touch of makin gme cry inside myself to wonders of your words ya know...

This place, called nowhere
Bullets made for organs,
tears like steal blades
falling from cheeks of
stone; slipping in and out
of veins like snakes
designed to kiss youthful
lips; yet deceit runs a riot
with the the blood cells
Salty water detected by
tongues of little speech
smiling the opposite way
around; to a song with no
name, except, loneliness
In a place where birds
dare not fly, and poets
refuse to speak of romance
A sky so black that white
shades crawl into the
shadows to take shelter

i loved the metaphors leveling out in here man...nice little parches of expression in such metaphors man and the way you worded it was just in its own of excitement...i loved the bullet organ line and the on i loved the most was the simplistic ways of the black sky metaphor were the white had to crawl for shelter....nice shit man i loved how you made this into a nice abstractive story itself man.

If you do not know of this
place, you are not alive
my friend; your pulse
may be pumping in the
wrong direction, & your
eyelids may aswell be
closed; it cannot be found
on any maps, or atlases
it's a secret that reflects
the irony of it's feelings
with the simple description
of 'lost'; you can find it when
the moon eclipses the heart
& when sunlight is replaced
by curtain rails being
slammed into dead-lock
Blacks, whites, Asians
plus every race you can think
of, are all welcome here
yet they are rarely
permitted to leave
A population of billions
are resident to the
pollution this place
leaves in our forefathers
lungs; & if you still no not
of this place, you have not
loved and lost... my friend.

OUCH man damn you poeta your fucking white ass is just fuckin ill on the simple words yet harsh effects in emotion and getting one so involved witht hte sotry itself being presented man... damn you to hell for writing so simple yet so meaningful man... i loved how you made the ending be a blast of one not knowing of this place and theis place being called lost....the lines were the eyelid should be shut was cool nice concept and the whole if you not know of this place then your have not loved & Lost...crazy lines and nice way to place things man...loved it man HOF but KT already nominated it so WOOT FOR YOU MAN!.

[faith]

The Story Was Great.the Whole Time I Was Reading The Poem I Was Really Into It. It Was Like Reading And Trying To Find Out Wat Place U Wer Mentioning Until I Reached The End Of The Poem.......so.......big Ups Man
Faith