Crayola Racism

[Twixn...]

Crayola Racism

While Black gummy bears set up a trebuchet made of cotton
others plot ready to kill the white noise and retake Gothom
dreaming of freedom... though through song they touched closer than ever.
and there forefathers ... look on in shame as war hits the horizon and flesh uncovers
the timid souls hidden with tears drifting... away from lovers...
meanwhile...
in the southern parts the red-bearing-non-Indians sun burn
in hopes of shedding new skin as pure chalk white as ever
chasing symbolisms of hate never quite in reach... they quiver...
bleaching the landscape... and chasing off all true color
while the rainbow race... looks on with envy....
no... it looks on at its own skin as if wondering
if each part of it is really worth being multi-cultural
is the tattoo artistry original or synthetic?
if each part hates one another...
merging constantly joining the paints into a Grey smudge.
smog and skyscrapers... pavement as Grey as death.
with a lunge... the artist leaps into the heavens...
snickering as he left stories of only one color.
as if to confuse and abuse the pasts...
humans realizing... while trying to get over there southren discomfort.
that the path of the brush stroke withered and it all became the same
and as soon as all color fades we will sit back and see
that green dominates through trees and grass glades.

[Twixn...]

ne one?

[Twixn...]

no love...

echo echo.

[Twixn...]

i really gotta feed a bunch first i guess before people will peep this...

give and take community

[Spoken]

this was a nice read and was just nicely formatted mana nd said out loud.. i think this would be a great spoken word nah mean.. it was filled with nice emotiona nd the whole word choice was real picky but in a good way.. the imagery was just nicely done and detailed and was creative through out and the topic too aswelldidnt really come played nah mean.. it was done well and was really a nice read.. and as i read before in the IE league it was a niec great read man and i think you handled the topic well off and great.
sorry if i can't break it down more... but seriously this topic was a nice read mana nd was original throughout man.. great job dude.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...od-342319.html

[Twixn...]

no? okay.

[Poeta Demonio]

Real abstract piece here man, filled with very nice lines, such as the 'southern discomfort' line, that really hit me, not only as an alcoholic, but as a writer! tehe, it was a pretty cliche topic, but you took a nice original slant to it, and really brought yourself into the piece, and for that, it dragged me into the piece aswell, which for obvious reasons is always a good thing. I havn't read much from you lately, but this was a real good piece, and i'm nominating it for HoF this month. very nicely written

Check my new piece out bro.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nd-342196.html

[Jon]

eh, good topic, nice title too... i loved this to be honest, and to tell you the truth i never was really a fan of your poetic side... rofl... but hell, you might have changed that here....

I loved your word choice, it was crazy... you had a real nice poetic voice that kept me going, and wanting to read more, and you didn't really have metaphores, well... yeah you did, but they were shaped differently than the ones you'll see from poeta or esco or any other good poet... you got a style of your own, and its working for you! don't change it my dude... lol, keep writing. I better see more of this! or you won't get any weed.... jp!

[Twixn...]

returning favors tommorrow...

can someone pm me so i remeber

ill try to myself though..

my memory blows.