Who am I?

[Joseph]

who am I?
if time means nothing to me anymore?
who am I?
along the path I examine then I equip that knowledge?
who am I?
when I see a human parallel but on a different road?
who am I?
when that same human can't tell me why, but I can
who am I?
when I'm talkin to some cat about truth and he start stumblin
who am I?
when I oppose god cuz he aint right and he modify's my mind
who am I?
Should I focus on myself or pay attention to the birds in the sky?
who am I?
atmosphere is cosmic why? and I can't tell you until I die
who am I?
if I long for sight and It comes to be there aint nothin to find
who am I?
when sight maybe beyond me but I strive to get it
who am I?
if I'm the only human that made it out of its mental prison
who am I?
if I make it out and its actually NORMAL and nothin else
who am I?
When I die and god aint real and there aint no after life
who am I?

[Scarcasm]

from some of the comments that you made on other poems you seem to know a lil something about poetry unfortunatly you didn't put that across in this peice. was this a serious attempt. I suggest that you spend some time on your work there's no point in writing if you're not even trying. heres a list of things you need to work on
wavering diction
meaning
punctuation
structure
voice

[¤Amba§§ador¤]

This is okkk, but this style of poetry writting is played out, it gets boring reading through, but good try tho... Keep elevating... respect

[Spoken]

its purely a thought piece. a way to work your thoughts out on paper, sometimes you end up with this purely beautiful thing that you are amazed with and some times it just helps clear your head. i take this piece for what it is worth to you, your thoughts and all. but it is not something thats to provoking to others, and it doesnt get us emotionaly involed. the skill and thought process is all there just think deeper and define your thoughts more and it will come.

T
True Love

[Wyla]

good

[-MeRk-]

I liked the topic a lot... and the structure of the poem.. 'Who Am I?'

It wasn't the best poem ever, but I did like the idea of it. Especially, "who am I when I die and find out god isn't real and there's no after life"... it's a deep ass subject that I think about alot too.