†.Emotionless.† {Poem}

[.†.Nite.Mare.†.]

I was so bored I wrote this..so serious. I just need some feed b/c if its good then I might start battling with it


†.I have no bodily emotion.†
†.It might be from all this self demotion.†

†.I cant think my vision is distorded.†
†.Its takin a toll on me as if my mind was extorted.†

†.I cant shed a tear I cant feel no pain.†
†.All I do is live and hope to gain.†

†.Its proboly all imagination.†
†.I hope so because without no end there is no puctuation.†

†.I can feel my heartbeat in my head.†
†.{Tick tock} Wait..its my clock I've been misled.†

†.Times up. Its time to put my mind to rest.†
†.I guess im just stuck being Emotionless.....†

[Mercyless]

i like it...ur not afraid to just say things
but mostly i think i like it... bcuz its so familiar

†.I can feel my heartbeat in my head.†
†.{Tick tock} Wait..its my clock I've been misled.†

[.†.Nite.Mare.†.]

Thanks Mercy.
uppin 4 Feed!

[White-Winter]

i liked the poem...i think you could of went deeper with it...its like you stayed with the basics and just gave us viewers a skeleton to read(to you know what i mean?)...the imgaery was nice but again it was basic...i think you should add more imagery and emotion in the future

[.†.Nite.Mare.†.]

Yea i get that alot, but thanx fam for feedin.

Uppin 4 Feed!