To Peach

[Johnny C.]

With all the harmful karma that's surrounded us, how can we
Try again when tradgety has you avidly mad at me?
Is there any point in tryin to get you to ever come back to me?
I've lately unsharpened my focus like a camera broken tragically.
I need to apologize; all that I've done is blasphemy
I'm a bastard; you're my one chance of a fairy tale happily
ever after... Too bad I'll never again hear your laughter; we
Had a falling out... Earth couldn't exceed our situation's gravity.
But I shouldn't assume there's no hope left for us; actually,
Cuz you're the lost elixer of life that's eluded all of alchemy.

Two Peach... or impeach.... i'm running out of reach
At least... at least... i've found something to eat.
Not Freed... by wii'd... and not the fucking system
I've fucked up so much... just wish i would have listened... (two Peach.)

Well I guess I'm fucked, but i'll have to make due
It was all my decision, thus I can't hate you.
I shoulda never let eric stay with us and chanced it
He took advantage of us both, the hopeless bastard.
There's quotes from dopes in the family of **** Hanson...
It might "take two to Tango," but I know you weren't out for dancing,
Thus forgiveness is within us like a power made super
and like M***** in bed, I wish it would have came sooner,
From me, into ya...if that dream was true, I fancy
We'd be like Ash from PokeMon, and still might have a Chance, see?

Two Peach... or impeach... i'm running out of reach
It seems.... It seems... i've found nothing to eat
Not freed... by wii'd... i'm not Down with the system
I fucked up too much... just wish i would have listened... (two Peach)






links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...st-351983.html
and
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...fs-351314.html

[Johnny C.]

upping for some input, please.

[Rhapsodist]

I liked your flow... very consistent, and you're rhyme scheme was nice, especially in the first verse.. I liked the hook too, very catchy.. the whole thing had a poetical feel to it and I like to see that more wit raps cuz lots don't do that.. overall a very nice read

[Johnny C.]

^thanks alot; I appreciate the feedback, and i'm glad you liked it. I'd also like some input from ppl that didn't like it that much if at all and why you feel that way. Gracias, amigos. (up)