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    The almost champ.

    The champ who almost was.
    By Burden.



    It's been sworn and I'm sighting, never the type to shout,
    After years of boring fighting all the hypes about my title bout,
    A frightened clout, I'm tight with peers more exciting - passion,
    Something I can't fight without, easy living, strike it out,
    As entering the ring causes my wife to pout !
    I wipe my mouth, ..
    The humid conditions tend to make gloves tear faces,
    & at Last, cast love sneered with hatred as cuts appear in places.
    I tie my boots with care, laces ; ..white as snow,
    Ready to steady bruise & fight this foe, I might just know,
    ..Will blood trickle to taste? blood sickle with haste,
    A consequence of a mans fickle mistake.
    A fighters pride - simple to take, ..
    I'm amped, it's stamped I'm ready to slam a peer.
    Vamped, the Champ is here! ..
    Reeling, my gut feeling? damn it's fear,
    This mans career - his eyes shine with hunger,
    Fists almost cry with thunder, confidence went flying asunder,
    Panic, ...looking for a rock to hide me under,
    I must swing, but he'll catch,
    *DING DING*
    Head still spinning, It's beginning - the match !
    He released vicious, My dream could be torn apiece, stitches
    needed as I look at my body screaming like obese bitches.
    He's too fast, young and has a clever game plan.
    Using jabs over my covered eyebrow,
    ......To cast some better maimed strands.
    It's the middle of round one, He lands a right hook,
    Leaves me stumbling wondering whether I took the right bus,
    The fight must - go on, I should never fall : soldier,
    Yet before I get a chance to recover, it's all over.
    My dream shattered and mutilated, ripped away,
    Battered & soon belated, never gripped the day,
    Alas, I was always meant to fall,
    The bribe I took wasn't worth it,
    ........Now that I've spent it all.
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    Re: The almost champ.

    Anyone?!
    LOL

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    Re: The almost champ.

    Dude, I can't beleive this is being slept on..this was a really sick piece, the wording..the vocab..the multi's..the rhyme scheme, it was all prety dope, an it was a good story, I liked it. keep writing man, hopefully u'll get some more feed on it..


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    Re: The almost champ.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...es-356374.html

    ^^^hit that please

    I'm going to say...umm...yeah...this one...this one was hot...i liked your imagery and i really got into it around the middle it picked up and became more vivid...i liked the twist at the end as well cause i was really thinkin dude just got his ass beat...i was like almost champ...yeah right...then...OOOOOOHHHH!!! now i see why he got his ass handed two times...well no money + no title = double assed out...anyway...the flow was very nice as well the beat that popped in my head was Eminem's Lose yourself...and it was kinda sick...you should try that shish too...anyway...i'd say you get the coveted....top shelf...cheers

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    Re: The almost champ.

    Thanks, I'll hit the links asap, dudes
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    Re: The almost champ.

    cancel that other link i dropped and hit this one if you have time...thanx

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...in-356668.html

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    Re: The almost champ.

    I liked this piece, and it had a incredible flow to it. A lil twist, but thats what made this piece so unique. I dont know why this would get slept on, but people need to wake up. The multi's were off the hook, and everything. Anyhow, just keep droppin' the dope ish. I'll be keepin' an eye out, so peace for now.

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